I really enjoyed the way you wrote this, and just everything over all. Nice work :)

Really engaging piece. I got lost in your words, they were woven so well. Really beautiful. LOVED IT.

Huh. That was interesting, though my literary side is in a bit of a daze. Too much jumping of POV, but I guess that's what make this piece interesting.

Hmm...very interesting...I had fun reading this. The literary part of my mind is reeling right now, but that's a good thing; it needs that every now and then. Good job. I love the overall feeling of this piece-Fate and something stronger. Nice.

Oh this story is so heartwarming! I never there was a Lockon/Setsuna thing in the fan world. This story's great!