Reviews for We Danced Kyohei and Sunako
girl.az2001 chapter 1 . 12/26/2014
me gusto y mas cuando se trata de sunako y kyohei
springjasmine91 chapter 1 . 5/4/2011
Sweet! I love it!
wallflower lover P chapter 1 . 11/28/2009
aw... so CUTE... and SWEET... so AWESOME... LOVE it... :]
Scherherazade chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
Sweet story.
Johonna Marie chapter 1 . 7/30/2009
aww that was sweet. i like it!
Nyphetamine chapter 1 . 6/16/2009
I think it was good, but your writing is too straightforward. That's fine for an essay, but when you write a story like this, you need to elaborate. This story should be tender and emotional. By the end, you want the reader to feel like the two did the right thing by getting together. I think your language lacked the elegance it could have had. However, the story is very good and sweet.

I feel like you could benefit from an editor. (We all could, haha.) You have the story telling talent, but your writing needs to be more descriptive. I'm sorry if this review seems mean, because I actually did enjoy the story. I just wanted to give you advice. )

You should keep writing!