That last paragraph of your notes in ch. 4 is an interesting take on cannon. I tend to hold to the thought that Riddle's soul was so unstable by then and the strain of killing a one y/o child fractured it without the elaborate prep. Finding Nagini there upon arrival was a fortunate happenstance for Tom (aka Moldy Shorts) as I sure don't see him hunting up the snake in his etherical form and physically transporting anything physical, much less a live animal, across the channel. It seems like an extraordinarily and unforeseeable necessity for a backup plan. The Night Bus can't even transport across water. Anyway, I suppose your theory is as good as mine, seeing how it's all fiction and magic to boot. :)

Paladin? Is Defender any relation to the main character in the old B&W T.V. series, "Have Gun: Will Travel"?

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What did Hermione do that fractured their friendship that badly? I've read the last several chapters and both epilogs 3 times now and the last scene appears to be from a different story. Surely you didn't have Harry objecting to her helping Cedrick or her taking the job disbursing the donations. There wasn't any other scenes that involved her. She participated in the final battle - no big blow up scenes there. It seems too good a story to end on such a head scratcher.

fucking granger needs to fuck off and go for ron to be bashed with him

Thank you for wonderfull story. Your description of Bones and Abbotts families is one of my favourites.
Your post chapter scenes with McGonagall And recomendations fór reading allways lift my spirit a bit.

In an early paragraph in this chapter under the heading Sunday 19th June, you have said that Susan Bones was a fourth year student. I believe she was in the same year as Harry, which means at that time, she was just finishing third year.

bonne fic!

After four years of training Harry still only knows/uses four spells over and over. Spells he learned in junior high. Diffindo, reducto, incendio, and expelliarmus. Disappointing. And again the time in this chapter is way, WAY off. There are mere seconds described between Moody counting out full minutes.

This story stuck way too close to canon despite all the changes. While some people died at different times, or in different ways, all the major events happened in the same order, mostly the same way, and usually at the same time as in canon. All of the changes were social and individual, while barely affecting the overall plot at all. Which is extremely disappointing since the changes were quite sweeping in some cases. I liked this story when I first read it, but back then it was one of the first fanfics I'd EVER read. Rereading it now, it's merely OK. There's nothing terribly wrong with it, but it stays so close to canon that it's nothing new or interesting.

Why would Harry be past the point of collapse? This Harry was far better trained than in canon, in far better shape than in canon, had an easier time in the maze AND the graveyard than in canon... yet is still somehow in far worse shape? What the fuck is the point of all that you wrote in the past 19 chapters if you just throw it all out for the sake of a trivial plot point?

Also, you clearly don't know what "half two" means. It means 1:30, or a half hour BEFORE two, not after. You use that phrasing wrong throughout this story.

I remember this story being good. I really do. And so far it's been decent. Fun, albeit with some WTF moments. But this chapter is truly, deeply stupid. Just as stupid as Harry forgetting to bother reporting that Moody suddenly failed the challenge/response test, thus causing the entire canon-rails situation. Harry should've used his popsicle stick as soon as he could. He disobeyed instructions he received mere minutes prior. And the obliviation was ludicrous. There's still a third of the story left and I'm not sure I care to read it if it's going to go to this level of effort to keep things on canon rails. This, unlike most of the prior chapters, was simply bad.

So in early September Harry played "code and response" with "Moody", who failed it badly, and two months later still hasn't said anything to anyone. He deserves whatever happens to him.

The sense of time in this chapter is really off. First, they have lunch until it's time for dinner, which is just weird. And then Harry's eyes start to glaze after Hermione spoke for about 15 seconds of introductory material.

This was a really good ficthanks a lot for charing!

Ah the good ole U.K where you have to jump through hoops to have a double-barrel shotgun and a very specialized need to get a permit for a pump-action. The situation you describe in the battle scene is where a Rem 870 or a Benelli M-4 would be perfect... well if it weren't for the U.K's draconian gun laws.