|Reviews for Adverse Reaction|
| Taaroko chapter 13 . 11/6/2009
*dramatic chord* And Drusilla's death will probably make Spike a lot more focused in carrying out an actual plan rather than acting on a bunch of reckless impulses.
Seriously, though, there were *way* too many descriptive identifiers in this chapter (and, frankly, all of the chapters). You identified Willy like seven different ways. We've seen the show. We already know Willy, what he looks like, what he does for a living, and how much of a greasy lowlife he is. There's really only room for *one* "weaselly barman" type thing to remind us of what kind of guy he was on the show, and then just simple pronouns, with his name thrown in here and there to make sure we're following who's saying what. It was hard for me to focus on what was happening in the chapter because all of the greasy human/short, corrupt bartender/dive's owner/barkeep/whatever stuff was so distracting and unnecessary. This is really the only problem I can see in your writing, which is otherwise quite excellent and insightful.
| angel1969 chapter 13 . 11/5/2009
Hi, Well Welcome back...I liked the chapter...too bad dru died...I hate Dru and Spike...They make me sick...Good job...
| pinkyblue-ice chapter 12 . 9/11/2009
I need more please. This is so great. When will you be updating again, I hope it is soon. Gr Arrg
| angel1969 chapter 12 . 9/3/2009
I am glad that you wrote jenny calendar out of the story...Inever liked Jenny. Good chapter...
| ba2006 chapter 12 . 9/3/2009
Love this chapter :) cant wait for the next one
| BrandiIndigo chapter 12 . 9/3/2009
I loved this update.
I really am glad to see Willow is coming around.
I can't wait for more!
| vixangel chapter 12 . 9/3/2009
Loved the chapter, loved the last line lol. Good on them finally listening to cordy lol. Glad willow isnt being such a bitca anymore gr at xander tho lol. Can we please please have some buffy angel goodness next chappie hehe...i know im terrible arent i lol, but u could write a fic with just angel and buffy and id be happy lol. But come on now buffys all vamp ness theres gna be some urges and stuff right lol. Plus well although im glad her n willow are all buddy buddy pal again, i missed my angel lol hehe
| Taaroko chapter 12 . 9/3/2009
Okay, even though it was just in passing, the reference to Jesse made me very happy. He never gets enough love. He was Willow and Xander's friend for probably their whole lives, pre-series, and yet he was unceremoniously forgotten after two episodes. Wow. Anyway, very nice bonding moment for Buffy and Willow here. It's nice that they can still be great friends in spite of what's happened.
| booksmartblonde333 chapter 12 . 9/2/2009
Always knew Cordelia was a wise one. And Xander can take himself and go jump off a cliff for all I care. He's an idiot.
| Bookworm-xxx chapter 11 . 8/30/2009
Happy to have a little bit more Buffy and Angel focus for a while. Ironic though that even though Angel didn't turn, Jenny still died. Anyway, as always, well written and I'm excited for the next chapter. :)
| RabidReject chapter 11 . 8/24/2009
Awesome. More soon.
| ba2006 chapter 11 . 8/24/2009
aw how sad she killed herself :(
love this fic :) cant wait for the next chapter
| booksmartblonde333 chapter 11 . 8/24/2009
Such a happy chapter turned to such depression! It was great though, as always. Its fitting for her to kill herself even if it is sad.
| Taaroko chapter 11 . 8/23/2009
Wow. Okay, did not expect Jenny to commit suicide. She definitely didn't seem the type...but then again, I know from experience that it's not always the ones who seem the type. *cough* New topic! I absolutely loved the Buffy/Angel scene. Particularly for how you incorporated more of the Claddagh traditions and the "with my hands, I give you my heart and crown it with my love" vows, which I adore. Beautiful.
Now then, you're a great writer, but I do have one small beef with your style. In the narration, you always refer to the characters by things that describe them. For example, Buffy is "the blonde", "the Slayer", "the eternal teenager", etc. and Angel is "the souled demon", "the Irishman", "the man she loved", etc. I would only refer to any given character like that at most once per chapter. Don't be afraid to use their names and the simple pronouns. We know who you're talking about, especially if there's only one person of each gender participating in the scene, so you don't need to keep identifying them for us in different ways. It's completely unnecessary and gets distracting and obnoxious very quickly.
| BrandiIndigo chapter 11 . 8/23/2009
Loved the update. Buffy and Angel goodness I LOVED IT!
Wow, on the whole Jenny thing.
I can't wait to read more!