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   SeverelyLord chapter 38 . 10/9 Good plot. Though, there are some things that kinda boggles with me. It's way too long. The story, yes, should be focus on Severus and Harry. But then, the story is way toooooooooo long, focusing on explaining this and that. Honestly, to explain is longer than to speak of your characters. I just don't see the point too where you had to italic the whole conversation of Sirius, Remus and Potter. The confron, I mean. It can be written as normal and only emphasize what you wanted to emphasize because clearly as someone who's sensitive at this, it doesn't feel right. The chapters, short. The story, long. I am not complaining for that, but perhaps you should've just cut it and make the chapters up to 50-60 instead because I feel like it can reach it. Also, on the fifth chapter, I think. Harry finally saw his mother's memories on the pensive. And Lily say something like, the charm would wear off? Something like that for 15 years. I may have read it wrong, but I thought the charm was something she'd been locked on and would be released after 15 years. I had a confusion on that one, well, I was hoping after reading that there might be a second chance for Severus and Lily. I read your story because I've been looking for a quality stories about Lily and Severus. I was hooked with your summary. Though, kinda disappointed it's not up to my expectation. But good job, I still finished it :) |
| notwritten chapter 38 . 8/27 I like this story. Keep smiling.:-) |
| DarkRavie chapter 38 . 8/10 Love this chapter. Excellent story. I can't wait to read what happens next! |
| tambrathegreat chapter 18 . 7/10 Great chapter with some character development for Snape. Sirius needs to work o things. hea such a hothead. |
| tambrathegreat chapter 16 . 7/6 That was harrowin that last bit. I know most people dont think it, but poor Lucius. he bore the brunt of Severus' feelings about the potion. Here's hopeing things will work ut for them all, well, all but Voldemort. |
| tambrathegreat chapter 14 . 7/5 i really do live your characterization of Snape. It's hard to strike that balance between cold and caring |
| tambrathegreat chapter 13 . 7/5 Beautifully done chapter! |
| BlueWater5 chapter 38 . 7/1 Having every former Death Eater make a similar vow or at least a vow of neutrality would make sense. |
| YJ Sun chapter 37 . 7/1 thank you for the update! |
| wandamarie chapter 38 . 6/29 thank you |
| wandamarie chapter 37 . 6/29 keep up the amazing work and thank you |
| wandamarie chapter 36 . 6/29 thank you |
| wandamarie chapter 35 . 6/29 wow |
| wandamarie chapter 34 . 6/29 great job thank you |
| wandamarie chapter 33 . 6/29 love the story thank you |