|Reviews for The Book of Dobby Reboot: Per Arcana ad Astra|
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 2 . 5/11
Dobby's patois is too much... way too much. There's not nearly as much butchery and it's much easier to read than you've made it. Here's Dobby's side of his first conversation in canon (American edition) to remind you what it should look like:
So long has Dobby wanted to meet you, sir... Such an honor it is...
Dobby, sir. Just Dobby. Dobby the house-elf.
Oh, yes, sir. Dobby has come to tell you, sir... it is difficult, sir... Dobby wonders where to begin...
S-sit down! Never... never ever...
Offend Dobby! Dobby has never been asked to sit down by a wizard — like an equal —
Bad Dobby! Bad Dobby!
Dobby has to punish himself, sir. Dobby almost spoke ill of his family, sir...
The wizard family Dobby serves, sir... Dobby is a house-elf — bound to serve one house and one family forever...
Oh no, sir, no... Dobby will have to punish himself most grievously for coming to see you, sir. Dobby will have to shut his ears in the oven door for this. If they ever knew, sir —
Dobby doubts it, sir. Dobby is always having to punish himself for something, sir. They lets Dobby get on with it, sir. Sometimes they reminds me to do extra punishments...
A house-elf must be set free, sir. And the family will never set Dobby free... Dobby will serve the family until he dies, sir...
Harry Potter asks if he can help Dobby... Dobby has heard of your greatness, sir, but of your goodness, Dobby never knew...
Harry Potter is humble and modest. Harry Potter speaks not of his triumph over He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named —
Ah, speak not the name, sir! Speak not the name!
Dobby heard tell that Harry Potter met the Dark Lord for a second time, just weeks ago... that Harry Potter escaped yet again.
Ah, sir. Harry Potter is valiant and bold! He has braved so many dangers already! But Dobby has come to protect Harry Potter, to warn him, even if he does have to shut his ears in the oven door later... Harry Potter must not go back to Hogwarts.
No, no, no. Harry Potter must stay where he is safe. He is too great, too good, to lose. If Harry Potter goes back to Hogwarts, he will be in mortal danger.
There is a plot, Harry Potter. A plot to make most terrible things happen at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry this year. Dobby has known it for months, sir. Harry Potter must not put himself in peril. He is too important, sir!
Not — not He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named, sir —
Albus Dumbledore is the greatest headmaster Hogwarts has ever had. Dobby knows it, sir. Dobby has heard Dumbledore’s powers rival those of He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named at the height of his strength. But, sir, there are powers Dumbledore doesn’t... powers no decent wizard...
Harry Potter mustn’t be angry with Dobby. Dobby did it for the best — Dobby has them here, sir.
Harry Potter mustn’t be angry... Dobby hoped... if Harry Potter thought his friends had forgotten him... Harry Potter might not want to go back to school, sir...
Harry Potter will have them, sir, if he gives Dobby his word that he will not return to Hogwarts. Ah, sir, this is a danger you must not face! Say you won’t go back, sir!
Then Harry Potter leaves Dobby no choice.
Harry Potter must say he’s not going back to school —
Say it, sir —
Then Dobby must do it, sir, for Harry Potter’s own good.
| Sieben Nightwing chapter 5 . 12/15/2015
This is freaking amazing as a concept. This story could go so far. If you are going to write more, I will look forward to it.
| WhiteElfElder chapter 5 . 11/24/2015
Hermione is starting to scare me. What is up with the way the Goblins are acting all sweet on Hermione?
| RHJunior chapter 5 . 11/10/2015
okay, I gotta bark here. Wizarding shields have stopped things with far more kinetic energy than a bullet (it's not just velocity, it's mass times velocity.) Things like boulders, falling statues, falling HUMANS, etc. Any force field that can stop a bludger- which is, frankly, an IRON BALL traveling at close to a hundred miles an hour- could stop a bullet, or even a hail of bullets. Furthermore they have multiple spells which can generate destructive force equivalent to a bomb.
It's not the destructive capacity of the gun-
It's the range.
Most of the magic we've seen done in the Potterverse (like in most fantasy settings) is line-of-sight. Bullets, on the other hand, can travel two or three miles-
Couple that with the fact that a man with a gun can snap off a shot faster than someone can blurt out "avada kedavra" and a wizard can be killed before they're even aware they're in danger. Forewarned they could shield against it, but forewarning is in short supply in a shootout.
| Guest chapter 4 . 10/16/2015
THIS. IS. FUCKING. HILARIOUS.
| Aramaki chapter 5 . 8/18/2015
Holy Jesus this is amazing. The original seemed to get to the action faster, but this has more solid underpinnings. And Jaegers. And insane house elves. And sparks. On that note, you really ought to duo something with this. If Hermione is an Agatha analogue, I'd be thrilled to see Harry in the lines of Gilgamesh Wulfenbach - power-mad, hilariously destructive spark just as amazing as Agatha and the two working together always being something electric to read.
| Bronze chapter 5 . 6/26/2015
Hey Doghead Thirteen! I'm Siriusly awaiting the next chapter whenever you get it posted! I'm still struggling through Harry Johnson and the Headmasters' Socks. All the tech has my mind spinning way, way into overdrive. True there's no sex but that doesn't make the stories any less interesting. So keep up the good work and I'll be waiting.
| sonofthehills chapter 5 . 4/26/2015
Thank you very much. Very amusing.
| Luke Dragneel chapter 1 . 2/21/2015
I'm curious: why isn't there a Harry entering GG Verse or Agitha entering HP Verse, after all they do show that both time travel and dimensional openings to other inhabited worlds. I mean really, there are only three crossovers and none of them are based on that well particular plotline?
Also, you have some grammar issues all over the board, but using shoutie capitals for their names is both an eyesore and annoying. It would be better to either use italics or nothing at all, that way the story line isn't broken by unexpected and unnecessary shouting except for Dramatic names such as " I. Am. AGITHA CLAY!".
Also your brake up via the Voiceover stills the effect, it would be better to replace that with either the other characters saying the same thing(and switching between those to make it seem like they were talking to one another) or with sounds of fighting, explosions, arguing in the background, shrieks from the engine or monsters. Besides, every spark is either half mad or insane when they break through, with Agitha being a perfect example of rule bending and even then she has Her evil/insane mother to deal with and a Baron that wants her dead. Personally I think a crossover of Worm Serial Novel and Genius Girl would actually fit much better since they both have the "gained powers via seriously traumatic events" and surprisingly there is a mad-scientist power available in the Worm Verse unlike HP.
| Reishin Amara chapter 5 . 2/21/2015
OMG,i hope u resume like this are hard to find...and girl genius crossovers even harder!
| mekareami chapter 5 . 2/18/2015
I am really enjoying this tale and hope inspiration hits you to continue. Tyvm for writing
| CRose chapter 5 . 10/29/2014
This is a lot of fun to read, I like the original set up you had going. I'm sad to see that it hasn't been updated in 4 years though. Finding a good crossover like this is very hard.
| Son of Zeus0001 chapter 2 . 10/8/2014
I have so much more respect for Colin now than before reading this story.
| sfjoellen chapter 5 . 7/22/2014
I read the original and came back for the extra spicy, thank for writing! It was a lot of fun to read.
| KateyK chapter 5 . 6/14/2014