This is a good story and I am enjoying it very much. Your Beta, however, is not doing a complete job. There are words that are missing a letter; like mediating instead of meditating, totally different meanings; there are one, two or even three words missing in some sentences. I am a bit of a stickler for the English Language. Help yourself by re-reading your writing, preferably out loud, as the sound of the word strikes the mind better than just reading it if it is an incorrect word.

I like the story alot! Good job!

Sorry was a great story, but when you broke them up out of no where and so forth, I mean seriously why didn’t she just take him into the house and have the aspect of healing fix it. Problem solved. That chapter ruined the story for me and I won’t finish reading it.

This story unfortunately needs a massive amount of work and time. The premise is ok but the execution and supposed editing fall beyond short.

Most paragraphs counter dictate eachother more often than not. Entire sentences make no sense or are confusing due to missing words or misused words. For example, they spent 10 years living and sleeping together but are afraid of seeing eachother naked. Have less communication over the bond than when they started even though they promised eachother and have reprimand eachother about keeping secrets. 10 years of intense training yet first instinct is to not use magic and fail a patronus even though Harry actually knows and has experienced love. A supposed aspect of healing magic doesn't notice the soul shard or whatever this story will have it be. Occlumency is mastered and yet a dementor affects Harry as if he had nothing. Luna can't find put the not so secret password to a door but knows all about older kids she's never met and about people who've been in a coma for 12 years. You have the creator of the magical world who's description of when they created it only implies that they have been around only a thousand years give or take a century but supposedly also made them and is a seer who was around much longer than a few thousand years.

I'm sorry but I have kids and have meet up with people I hadn't seen in over 10 years before and any parent who can't see the difference in their child after the child has lived for ten years (but for them it's only been a few weeks) shouldn't have kids. To top that off, the Occlumency is stated in this fiction to give them perfect or near perfect memory, how do they conveniently forget shit.

Bottom line is that things that should be explained aren't and things that are explained are conveniently ignored for the sake of drama or getting around writing into a corner.

I made the mistake of reading the reviews after this chapter and unfortunately it looks like the issues stated above and much more are the staple for the rest of the story.

I hope that you take into account the reasonable feedbacks you have received to improve and ignore the flames.

Thank you for sharing as writing let alone receiving criticism or flames in some of the worthless posts is very hard and you should be commended for doing it anyway. I wish you luck!

This chapter just ruined everything else. All the training they had been doing in a time displaced area is supposedly worthless against Remus Lupin. Yeah right! So you just need your characters between their big moments, so I'm done goodbye.

I have no clue why Harry is being treated as the one at fault. He's the VICTIM! He got his memory wiped, why the hell is everyone 'forgiving' him? There's nothing to forgive bruh. He's the one who suffered the most. I get if Harry blames himself, that's in his character, but NO ONE else has any right to blame him.

How they hell were they expecting him to act normal and happy when he had no idea who he and everyone around him was. Imagine you wake up and are married to a stranger and are friends and family with strangers, who all expect you to act the way some person in their memory did.

I love this story, but this treatment of Harry is just frustrating.

I agree with everyone else. We all f**king hate unnecessary drama because it's f**king unnecessary! One f**king sentence of three little words would clear up everything and stop all that f**king woe is me shit! No one wants to read enless chapters of will they won't they and we all f**king hate it when they do it on tv too! F**k this shit. You can keep it!

This is a great story. I love the idea of the house in the bottle

U killed molly in such an anticlimactic way and im here for it! Lmaooo

I havent said but thank you for sacrificing Cho instead of Cedric its much appreciated. Not to mention the teist on cho that was excellent.

Oh my Gawd Fred and Susan! Now thatsa trope and OTP i didnt see coming hut am glad its here!

Love that u payed homage to the fact that its clear Draco always had a crush on Hermione in such a good but sly way. As a Dramione lover u did it justice and it’s appreciated.

Oh and here i thought Dumbles was gonna be a good gyy oh ur good. This is turning good and i literally CANNOT WAIT!

So this is going into third year? Thats a little confusing but im gonna go with it. Its mad early but like i said im going with it.

So what about Sirius cuz not to be pushy , he hasnt once mentioned airius and if this is going into fourth year . He knows about him so whats the deal . I cant wait!