Reviews for Broken
Lily's New Boots chapter 18 . 11/1/2011
You are, without question, the best writer on this site. I honestly cannot believe that a story like this has gotten so little reviews. You deserve so many more - much, MUCH more than those AU AH fics that seem to clutter this site, much more than all those 'Edward left Bella in New Moon, but then...' stories. I don't get the mindset of some people, I really don't.

Ooh, where to start. There's so much to SAY. Ah, the family. I love how you managed to convey the Cullens and their respective stories without letting it descend into chaos. Emmett especially - most people seem to portray him as some dumb idiot, and I love how you made him intelligent, yet still keeping his character firmly intact. Alice, too - very few writers manage to capture her character into their own writing, but you are a pro. In fact everyone seemed very believable and in-character (a remarkable feat, given how flat they are in the books).

I love your writing style, too - it's not overly simplistic, but not too heavy either: just right. A lot of stories I see on here (usually, the ones with the most reviews - sigh) tend to be very overwritten, with long words where they're not needed and descriptions that seem to border on Tolkien's own lengthy ones. You don't do this at all, and consequently it's very refreshing and pleasing to read. The dialogue you write is brilliant: not only can I imagine the character that has spoken actually saying this, but it's short, snappy and grabs your attention.

"I...I had kids. I was older and I had kids. Two little redheaded sons."

Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant. Simple yet heartbreaking. Exactly how it should be. You don't say 'Alice looked upset' like a lot of others do, because it's not needed: you can tell exactly how Alice feels from those three sentences alone. And that's what awes me. One slight problem I had was the number of 'repeated', 'murmured', 'replied' and the like, when just plain old 'said' would have sufficed - however, that is just my personal preference, and I insert a lot of these phrases in anyway! Sorry for being such a hypocrite :/

You probably (I hope) get a lot of reviews like this - reviews that just go on and on about the brilliance of your writing, without criticising anything - and I want to make my review different somehow, but I really can't. This is just too good. And I hope you keep writing, on this site or no, because unlike most people on this site (me included) you have a real, shining talent. Please continue, and thank you for making my day much brighter with this story :)

Lily x
Il'Diko chapter 18 . 3/20/2011
Oh, I love this the most. It was captivating and exciting. I just loved how you included the Volturi, it's a very unique plot! Also, every single Cullen was amazingly written.

Congrats for this amazing writting!
Shanii21 chapter 18 . 7/25/2010
This was absolutely AMAZING !

You write so well!

Aah favourites :)
9ud9ir190ne6ad chapter 18 . 2/6/2010
Yay, I'm so glad for a happy ending for quite a few chapters I thought it wasn't going to end happily :) This was brilliant written. I enjoyed every minute of reading :)
bella123441 chapter 18 . 1/25/2010
This story can be hecka confusing at times, but i still liked it more than others. Believe it or not my mammy(lol)told me to read this story. She loved it as much as me.

Keep writing.
Mayven chapter 18 . 1/20/2010
Lovely story!
BiteMeSilly chapter 5 . 1/15/2010
BiteMeSilly chapter 2 . 1/15/2010
jesus... woman! it's just the second chapter and i'm so digging this and irritated and surprised and all, but i have to love it.
lemon-of-the-tent chapter 18 . 1/9/2010
So beautiful. Thank you. :)


lemon-of-the-tent chapter 14 . 1/9/2010
The myth of Cupid and Psyche is my favourite of all of the greek/roman legends. :D J'adore.


lemon-of-the-tent chapter 8 . 1/9/2010
Oh. My. God.

This. Is. Too. Good.

I only paude long enough to tell you that.



lemon-of-the-tent chapter 7 . 1/9/2010
What beautiful, violent lovemaking. I wish evberyone shagged like vampires... :L

This was very touching - still reading...


lemon-of-the-tent chapter 5 . 1/9/2010
*licks lips* M...sinful.


lemon-of-the-tent chapter 3 . 1/8/2010
This is sad, but also pretty awesome at the same time, it must be said. You have most of the characters spot-on, which is always amazing to read...I can't believe Emmett would need dirty rags - why not just download really high-quality, great pornography? I mean, he has the money (and time..?)


Dedii chapter 18 . 12/13/2009
this is such a good story :D and i loved the end, it was soo beautiful. x
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