Reviews for Broken
alohabride chapter 13 . 9/1/2009
Hi Mandi1,

Thank you so, so much for such an amazing story! Can't wait for your update!

I enjoyed your storyline so much and I love the way how you capture the family bond in just a few lines - e.g. Edward & Esme in Ch6.

You have captured every Cullen so well, even though I was a bit wary about the story being told by the storyteller instead of the common POVs... I thoroughly enjoyed it! You are a genius!

My favourite 'serious' stories are 'Dark Side of the Moon' and 'A Changing Heart' by blondieAKArobin, 'Green, Red and Gold' by Segolily and your 'You've Kept Me Waiting' and 'Broken'. But you are the only one who took up the challenge to cover every Cullens' feeling! And you did a terrific job (not that I know anything about writing)!

The only thing I wasn't too sure about is the sex scenes... I actually cringe a bit at the mention of Edward's private part... I enjoyed the description of their intimacy but definitely not that word! :)

Thank you again, can't wait for the story to unfold!

Kimbi94 chapter 13 . 8/29/2009
Amazing chapter, cannot wait for more ... please hurry and update soon ...
spellboundagain chapter 13 . 8/28/2009
Cliffie...why,oh why?

Now I have to ask how often you update? What in the world are those three and Maria gonna do to make the girls better?

Great job again - compelling chapter.
spellboundagain chapter 12 . 8/28/2009
I wonder how Maria can be the key? Poor Jasper, going through so much right now and then to have to deal with Maria...

I have a feeling that the Volturi have an ulterior motive...we'll see...
spellboundagain chapter 10 . 8/28/2009
Still intrigued...can't wait to see what happens with the Volturi...

I hope Emmett and Rose can work things out...
spellboundagain chapter 9 . 8/28/2009
Oh - now there's a twist. Didn't see that one coming...

What in the world could they be doing? Trying to find a way to control their kind, hmm, nope, clueless...

Great job so far!
spellboundagain chapter 8 . 8/28/2009
Oh! Soo good!

What was in those bears they ate?

Gotta go and keep reading!
spellboundagain chapter 4 . 8/28/2009
It's depressing to think about the family having to pick sides. It is odd that alice wouldn't have seen this, but I guess when she gets excited about clothes...

Poor Emmett, I think his way of coping is to react like a little boy - maybe rose just got tired of that - but 70 years... that's a long time to throw away.
spellboundagain chapter 3 . 8/28/2009
Wow- Rose is one tough cookie. It's a little hard to feel sympathetic for her, maybe I just don't know the full story.

Carlisle is always so wonderful, Esme as well.

I'm interested so far.

Off to the next chapter...
spellboundagain chapter 2 . 8/28/2009
Is there more that we didn't know to get Rose to this place? Or was it the last comment about Nessie that set her over the egde?

It's hard to imagine these two not being together anymore..
spellboundagain chapter 1 . 8/28/2009
Oh! So excited. This is new and different from anything I've read before.

I like the way you've set everything up with the timeline and the different people moving concurrently.

Off to read.
EJ10 chapter 13 . 8/28/2009
Oh My God, so good! What will Jasper ask Maria for! Whatever it is, I'm sure she will NOT give it to him without payment...

And I loved it when Rosalie was trying to think of Emmett as a brother lol! They should so get back together but I'm actually glad that they didn't do anything because it would probably just have driven them further appart like the last time...

Amazing keep it up!
Enthralled chapter 13 . 8/28/2009
It looks like you're just getting started...

That Jasper...just willing to do anything for his Alice...he's my kind of man!

Only one tiny criticism...

Update faster...
kt.potter93 chapter 13 . 8/28/2009
oh, jasper...he shouldnt play with fire, he'll only get burned...

and quite the progress in this chapter for emmett and rosalie :P


nice chapter :)
Cullenista chapter 13 . 8/27/2009
I always enjoy the way you find a small action to portray a character's traits and emotions. Rose is so self absorbed she forgets it's their anniversary. Emmett messed up before but he seems so determined to make up for it, I feel so sorry that the two of them can't get it together. They both need Esme and Alice, and you write that whole family dynamic so well.

I shuddered when you brought Maria into this, remembering how horrible she was in YKMW. Alice must be in a coma because otherwise she would be all over her in a NY minute. I love the mystery element of this, and can't wait to find out what poor, desperate Jasper is going to ask that witch.
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