Good first chapter. Can't wait for more.

The internal monologue is spot on and so are both the characters: ''She did not realize that his eyebrow could go quite that far up his forehead.'' I laughed so hard at the visual imagery. Great x

LOVE how you ended it "thank you brain"

HAH.

I love humor in smut-esque stuff like this. Ahh, good times, good times...SUBSCRIBED!

I am looking for more. There is more, yes?

aw that was a great story.

Very, very yummy. Also, thanks for posting that bit about the VLD online. I didn't know about it, but it will definately help with my story. Keep up the great work.

J.

lol, completely ooc but hilarious and very well done.