In a way, this was almost like poetry in that it was so short and you really made sure that every word counted. The shortness of it added to its power, and it was really quite beautiful, rather like the original Silmarillion. I particularly liked your second paragraph - the idea that Melkor, as he was, was part of Eru's creativity and plan all along. The second sentence: "As Melkor's fires transformed Ulmo's waters into countless intricacies of potential, Manwe's winds fanned and fueled Melkor's flames." has great imagery and brings forth so very vivid pictures, and you even used a nice bit of alliteration in the second half, furthering the poetic feel of it.

Very well done, mellon nin. A brief but interesting look into the Silmarillion. Keep on writing!

-Sauron Gorthaur

I don't know what to say. I'm blown away with your writing. Everything seems perfectly clear with this. I like the last part where you wrote, "When Iluvatar gathered the Ainur-" it just seemed the perfect ending. So creative, so well written. Great job!

Great story! I think you caught Eru's plan beautifully. Thanks for writing this. God bless!

I think you captured the Valar and Maia perfectly, along with Melkor.

Melkor thought more like a man, that's why they couldn't understand him. He wanted what men wanted. Power and to rule. He was cruel, greedy and ambitious.

The Valar and Maia could not understand that.

Wow. . .that was beautiful. Strange, but beautiful. If only it were that simple. . .after all, Melkor was sunken so deep into his own evil that it was just about impossible for him to ever recover. Still, you've done a really great job, and it really sounds like a passage from the Silmarillion. Wonderful! D

~Araloth the Random