|Reviews for Loki and Luigi|
| Amy Ehren chapter 4 . 5/23/2010
Aw, I wish this had continued!
Pick it up? -puppy eyes-
I like this story quite a bit. :3
Some of the sentences are kind of run-on, connected with a lot of "ands," which makes it difficult to follow sometimes. Other than that, there are a few places where some commas would be useful. The only thing I see is that sentences seem too long, but for the most part, it's good!