|Reviews for Of Kings and Pawns|
| ShizuBABE chapter 1 . 11/12/2014
Mmmmm delicious... Gonna read the rest :)
| Azera-v chapter 11 . 9/18/2014
| Jellyfish Princess chapter 12 . 8/3/2014
Now that I have finished the story, I think the story improved as it went on. The characterisation was better although I still think you have Schneizel way off. Lelouch improved noticeably but I think in certain situations (smut) his character went out of the window. Overall the story seemed just way too generic and cliche, like everything turned out well with no serious consequences, which takes away from the realism.
And one of the biggest issues is that you call this 'romance'. Why does Schneizel continue to call Lelouch a 'prize'? Seriously, why? What kind of relationship works that way? An unhealthy, abusive one that is. Yet apparently Schneizel 'loves' Lelouch ugh. The second biggest issue was the smut. It felt sort of disconnected from the story, their personalities seemed to change into copypasta seme-uke genericism. The actual smut was fairly well-written but it didn't feel part of the story. Smut like that is more suited to one-shots, not a multi-chapter story where everything is intertwined together.
I'd give the whole story a 5 out of 10. It had the potential to be great but (because the author probably watches/reads too much shite yaoi) failed to deliver.
| Jellyfish Princess chapter 5 . 7/26/2014
I have to say I'm pretty disappointed so far. I feel like I'm reading a generic trashy yaoi manga, a stereotypical seme ans stereotypical uke with the names 'Schneizel' and 'Lelouch'. I feel like you've completely degraded them as characters. Whenever Schneizel calls Lelouch a 'prize' I fucking cringe. I mean wtf? Who says that anyway? Oh yeah a generic seme.
No, I don't miss the porn like you. I thought it was pretty abrupt and unrealistic how it happened just like that, without any real emotion in it. I didn't come here for pwp you know.
...I guess a story with good characterization and plot is too much to ask for. Thought I will finish this and give a review on it all at the end.
| lenxann chapter 12 . 6/23/2014
Love schneizal x lulu 3
this plot is 3
| Phoenix chapter 12 . 6/1/2014
Go for the side story it will be exiting
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/30/2014
This is incest because lelouch and schneizel are half brothers
| duhorcommonsense chapter 8 . 8/12/2013
um sorry but Charles did have contact... when he grabs his son around the neck? I'm saying this because you mention it in the next chapter so i don't get why you put that in your AN.
| PurpleSong chapter 12 . 7/7/2013
This ff is utterly amazing, hot, well written and just absolutely fan-freaking-tastic! Thank you sooooo mush for posting this! I... Have a little request... Can you make lulu call schneizel "aniue" in stead of "older brother" or "brother"? And make schneizel call lulu "otouto"? It's just... I have a thing for those things... I think... ' I dunno, I just think it should make their relationship even hotter.
| Guest chapter 12 . 4/13/2013
My eyes were glued to the screen until I finished the story.. OMG.. It was so goddamn sexy! Is there really something as a "Schneizel whipping Kanon scene"? I don't recall it at all...
| shingaling chapter 9 . 1/13/2013
Omg... please finish the side story of Suzalulu? I want to see Kanon Schneizel's reactions. xD
| spiel chapter 12 . 1/13/2013
Thank you for the interesting read :)
Though I'm a bit sad cause it seems like Rolo died in vani :'(
| HoneyCaramelSwirl chapter 12 . 12/25/2012
Dang, I love those hot sex scenes. / Overall the story has a clear plot and is not JUST PWP, so great job. :) I was kinda hoping for a threesome between Suzaku, Lulu, and Schneizel; too bad we all know Schneizel doesn't share his lulu with anyone. xD Keep writing! & if it's not too much to ask, can I maybe request a GinoxLulu fic? There aren't that many and it's saddening. :(
| poogle chapter 11 . 11/29/2012
this was a great story _ thankyou so much
| hitomi65 chapter 12 . 11/4/2012