|Reviews for Pleasures of the Wing|
| redamant chapter 1 . 3/29/2012
Mm. A very nice, very calm ficlet. I certainly like it. (: Jetfire is, indeed, spelled Jeftire, but Jet Fire is also used by many fans - let's say it's a semi-canonical way of spelling his name.
Something you could improve in would be the paragraphs. Most of them are too long and, seeing how the story holds no dialogues, it may become a bit tiresome at times.
You could break the paragraphs down into shorter ones or throw in a punch line every now and then to give the long narration a pause. For example, you could have written 'No, catching the horizon would have to wait.' as a topic-phrase-only paragraph and give the reader a break. Just a thought!
Anyway, all in all, it was a lovely one-shot. Let's hope the captures the horizon, one day!
| LucasVN chapter 1 . 11/28/2009
This fic is under the wrong world filter.
It should be under the Unicron Trilogy filter.
| Tweepy chapter 1 . 9/1/2009
I loved this little story! It was a sweet moment and really kinda captures how I feel how flying would be like, ya know, without heavy machinery or whatever to hinder us. I always have dreams like this.