|Reviews for A Run in the Park|
| dolphinrain chapter 1 . 11/11/2012
Nice story. Nice little fluff at the end for Colby.
| wild-springflower chapter 1 . 6/30/2011
aww, poor Colby! glad hes ok though! this was really good, i liked it a lot! :)
| BobWhite chapter 1 . 12/23/2009
| hepaxedemos chapter 1 . 6/5/2009
liked this. keep it up. more colby whumping please!
| PattyB chapter 1 . 6/4/2009
I liked the story very much right up to the time the
nurse rushed out of Colby's room in a panic. I didn't
get that at all what scared her?
And then the attacked girl showing up as a nurse . . .
That just seemed a little too convenient and I think
her taking the responsibility to nurse back to health was a little much.
My personal opinion is you should have written a second
chapter detailing Gary and Don's team's search for the
girl. It would have been much more interesting and more
You write well though. As I've said before, I love
the Colby whumping. Don't let my or anyone else's
comments discourage you. At least you're writing
intriguing stories and we're not. :D
| TheNaggingCube chapter 1 . 6/2/2009
I like the story. I love the Colby whump.
Quite a few typos, read the story from the bottom up, one line at a time to catch them.
Keep the Colby focused stories coming. I've enjoyed them all.