Reviews for A Run in the Park
dolphinrain chapter 1 . 11/11/2012
Nice story. Nice little fluff at the end for Colby.
wild-springflower chapter 1 . 6/30/2011
aww, poor Colby! glad hes ok though! this was really good, i liked it a lot! :)
BobWhite chapter 1 . 12/23/2009
hepaxedemos chapter 1 . 6/5/2009
liked this. keep it up. more colby whumping please!
PattyB chapter 1 . 6/4/2009
I liked the story very much right up to the time the

nurse rushed out of Colby's room in a panic. I didn't

get that at all what scared her?

And then the attacked girl showing up as a nurse . . .

That just seemed a little too convenient and I think

her taking the responsibility to nurse back to health was a little much.

My personal opinion is you should have written a second

chapter detailing Gary and Don's team's search for the

girl. It would have been much more interesting and more


You write well though. As I've said before, I love

the Colby whumping. Don't let my or anyone else's

comments discourage you. At least you're writing

intriguing stories and we're not. :D
TheNaggingCube chapter 1 . 6/2/2009
I like the story. I love the Colby whump.

Quite a few typos, read the story from the bottom up, one line at a time to catch them.

Keep the Colby focused stories coming. I've enjoyed them all.