|Reviews for The Highly Sarcastic Version of Isabella's Revenge|
| EAMC is mine chapter 2 . 3/13/2013
Plz just finish it already
| xAliceCullenWhitlockx chapter 2 . 8/11/2010
amazing please write more the story is almost been a year since you wrote*does puppy dog face*
| Elena0017 chapter 2 . 5/24/2010
Love this chapter. Are you planning to add more chapters to this story, anytime soon? hope So!
| VampChick76 chapter 2 . 5/24/2010
Awesome! Update soon!
| TwilightFan888 chapter 2 . 4/27/2010
come on when are you going to write more im dying to hear what bella is going think. please please please write more im tired of waiting
| twilightfan888 chapter 2 . 4/17/2010
i also have an idea maby the ne chapter or a chapter after that bella sees the things that sapire stole and tell each of them when rhhese pictures were taken where she wor those dresses and just about her human life. also maby with saphieres gift she coul scratch something in their wall using ice telling the that shel visit soon or a threat letter to one of the family members askin for them to explain why the girl is ith them. once agan keep writing SOON
| twilightfan888 chapter 2 . 4/17/2010
love this chapter i cant wait till you post more please please write more soon i cant wait to find out what happens after
| painted.inkblot chapter 2 . 7/20/2009
So I just decided to skim your most recent fic when I just stumbled across your profile and noticed you were a beta reader. As most 'beta readers' I see are incompetent n00bs who should never be qualified to edit someone else's work, I was curious to see if you were the same.
Your writing is fine, and your grammar is pretty good (that's how it's spelled, by the way. Judging by your beta profile, you seem to think it's grammer, but it's grammar), but your dialogue tags are all wrong. Take, for example, this piece of dialogue you wrote:
“Don’t get any blood on the car.” She barked.]
That should be "Don't get any blood on the car," she barked. She should not be capitalized because it's not a proper noun, and only proper nouns should be capitalized after dialogue if it's not the beginning of a new sentence. Also, if the tag after the dialogue is not a new sentence, the dialogue should not end in a period, but a comma. Look through any book and you'll see that's how it's done. Notice how the dialogue is in these examples:
"Hello," Bob said.
"Hello," he said.
"Hello," said Bob.
Bob waved. "Hello."
"Hello." Bob looked down at the ground and bit his lip.
"Hello." He looked away, not meeting Alice's eyes.
This is unrelated to dialogue, but if you have characters shouting, you don't always need to put on the caps lock. Just an exclamation point is sufficient information enough besides a tag of "she shouted" for us to know the character is angry and yelling.
I hope that helped.
| prettypinkprincess123 chapter 1 . 7/12/2009
this is horrible. i am trying to be niece but dis is horrible. youre spelling and grammar is very bad and your stroy is bad. why did u even writ dis stupid stroy. u cant write get a life. you idiot.
| Karly Black chapter 2 . 7/8/2009
Whoa, why'd she take all that stuff?
cant wait 4 nxt chapter!
| X-Lily-Evans-X chapter 2 . 7/5/2009
Please update! This is really good. So do all of the Cullens hate Casey or is it just Alice and Rosalie?
| MadderThanTheCheshire chapter 2 . 6/25/2009
OMG! This is great! Update soon please! :)
| The Flamers chapter 2 . 6/24/2009
The beginning of this story is basically the same as the beginning in 'Unusual Beauty'. I do not like how you describe everything immediately in the beginning, and as I said before, you should incorporate it into the body of the story. It instantly turns readers away.
Again, you must remember that every new speaker there is a new paragraph.
Now, unless Cassie has a legitimate reason to call Bella a ** and **, then it is fine. But it gets a little irritating when there is always that girl who hates Bella because Edward like Bella (who is mostly Tanya for some odd reason). So if it's just because Bella was with Edward... I think she'd be overreacting. Maybe she'd be jealous of Bella, but would she really call her a ** and scream over her? It depends.
Besides that, I think you have the potential to be a good writer.
| IceAngel95 chapter 2 . 6/24/2009
the gravestone was so funny and its a great story
| MrsUzumakiUchiha chapter 2 . 6/22/2009
Can you make Bella forgive Alice and Emmeet and make Rose nice to Bella?