|Reviews for Say the Right Word|
| Nayeli Clearwater chapter 62 . 11/19/2013
Um...why is Jake crying?
| Nayeli Clearwater chapter 59 . 11/19/2013
Um, it's spelled 'bite', not 'bight'.
| 1 Corinthians 13 chapter 6 . 11/6/2013
UHgggggg. ENOUGH with the adoration of the Edward. WTF? He did not control the bad side of himself. He may have stopped hunting humans for blood but he re-channeled those behaviors into controlling and manipulating Bella. He ridiculed her judgement, made light of her intelligence and made her feel plain, unattractive and weak. Why do all you fan-fic authors make Edward out to be the second coming of Elvis. He obsessed over Bella and manipulated a young emotionally inexperienced girl into an abusive, controlling relationship cutting her off from friends and family. HE WAS NOT A GOOD GUY. He brought out the worst, most selfish, ugly behavior in Bella. There is more true love between two gladiators hacking away at each other with swords and axes in an arena.
| PastOneonta chapter 64 . 11/3/2013
I found the Billy outtake and the ritual of the new children of the moon outtake particularly moving in this chapter. All were excellent but Billy's grief and determination to save his son was compelling. Likewise, the young children finding each other was stunning.
I must ask though, your references to CYOR.? Is that a new story or a story you removed? I am not familiar with it.
| PastOneonta chapter 63 . 11/3/2013
Wow! Jacob, the Hunter, was the only one who could bring them together. This is a fantastic story, creative, coherent, great characters, great action, a happy ending for Jake and Bella. Leah as the next supreme ruler is perfect, she had the leadership all along.
| PastOneonta chapter 62 . 11/3/2013
I am crying out loud and I have no words. So beautifully written, the farewell to the young alpha of the children of the moon.
| PastOneonta chapter 61 . 11/3/2013
Tremendous action. Leah and the wolves arrive -in time or no? Bella has been bitten twice. How can she survive? And her babies? She and Aro both think she is pregnant. Jasper is damaged, Alice is starved, how can they survive? Where is Edward? Jacob?
| PastOneonta chapter 58 . 11/3/2013
What have they done to Alice, where is everybody else, and how is Bella escaping human?
| PastOneonta chapter 57 . 11/3/2013
So the Italian children of the moon will join with Jacob and fight the Volturi? This might work, I am hopeful.
| PastOneonta chapter 56 . 11/3/2013
The vision of Jacob snoring, "a gentle thunder" across the cabin as they take their first plane trip ever is lovely. Please bring them all back home safely.
| PastOneonta chapter 55 . 11/3/2013
Very different, very creative, both Packs going to Volterra to fight. I hope everyone comes home healthy.
| PastOneonta chapter 53 . 11/3/2013
I am worried that the children of the moon cannot help at all, when they need the help.
| PastOneonta chapter 51 . 11/3/2013
I am moved by these children. (Who knew children of the moon would be children, literally?) Their life must be hard and lonely. Can Jacob help them?
| PastOneonta chapter 50 . 11/3/2013
Children of the moon as allies in battle. Very unique, very creative.
| PastOneonta chapter 46 . 11/3/2013
I thought Leah's goal was to aggravate Jacob enough for him to fight Sam, I didn't see her as suicidal. But this is still developing...