|Reviews for Tales of The Cosmic Wars Vol Three, Light of Hope|
| Piccolo Sky chapter 9 . 18h ago
I notice your chapters are getting considerably longer... I know that if I was writing these at a font of ten they'd be close to fifty pages... More of an observation than anything, but didn't know if you wanted to break it down more.
"Recent Transformers Revenge of the Fallen Movie"... Dang, I'm getting old...
Interesting how Ben is fighting actual bad guys for this challenge as opposed to deceased heroes...
Aw, I thought Gilgamesh would do his bit where he pretends he's losing as he powers up, and then says "...NOT!" at the end. Aw well. :P
I'm not sure if Garland actually has these moves in DISSIDIA, but if he doesn't...nice touch making him do moves named after the Four Fiends.
Uh...Ben? Gilgamesh already said you can't "die" during this battle...so why are you so worried about Lacus?
Anyway, now the sword is complete...but it seems there's an "eighth" challenge in there. I wonder what kind of upgrade this'll be? Last time he got the nice little transformation...so I wonder if this does something similar... Really, only way to find out is to see how it does against an opponent who provides a good frame of reference...and I guess that's what's coming up next. :D
| Piccolo Sky chapter 8 . 19h ago
How come X hasn't been infected? And if T4 and X both have ways to negate being infected, how come they don't have that on every robot?
Well, an interesting turn of events toward the end, but I definitely didn't intend on it happening so soon in this volume. My guess this isn't going to be like the others in Volume One.
| Piccolo Sky chapter 7 . 23h ago
| Piccolo Sky chapter 6 . 3/8
I'm a little confused on the span of time. How long has it been since the story started? I got the impression maybe one or two years at most in terms of "story time"...
Considering everything that's happened thus far in the story, I'd be a bit more concerned about anything unusual, including a robotic dog.
Considering the fact he's a vastly outdated, inferior model, you'd think Forte would be a bit more humble. Then again, this IS Forte we're talking about... A great example of that MST3K line: "After all, he's only beaten me numerous times before...what makes him think he can do so again?"
Well, seems we're back at things again after that brief interlude at the start.
| Piccolo Sky chapter 5 . 3/1
I never really played Banjo-Kazooie, but didn't the witch always rhyme when she talked?
Good thing the bad guy had hostages, or my instinctive reaction would be discharge aura and blow up entire theme park instantly. :P But, eh, Ben did something like that anyway. :D
...Did Lacus really think Ben's "heart" wouldn't be able to handle an Enji? Mrs.-Until-Possibly-A-Couple-Chapters-Ago-Couldn't-Function-Without-Rocks-For-Brains? If the pot ever called the kettle black...
Ah, I see what you did with the title of the next chapter there...
Well, this may have just been an "amusing diversion"...or it may not have been. Technically the Lord of Games never did anything illegal. There aren't any laws against NOT doing the right thing or ALLOWING a crime to happen. So...he may get off and cause a bunch of frustration to our protagonists later. Guess we'll find out...
| Piccolo Sky chapter 4 . 2/23
You know...would bullets be more effective against shields...or things like Borg that "adapt" to laser fire? Sorry, random thought...
Well James, Ben could have always consented to be their hostage, wait the five minutes necessary for them to think all went according to plan and take the guns off all hostages, then beat them all up with ease...but ah well. :P I did kind of think he'd be so disgusted with the guy he'd beat him to a pulp in an instant...but, then again, he was so weak that'd kind of be like sandblasting a soup cracker. Kind of a "Cell" effect...really not worth the trouble stomping on him. :D
Lacus has a point telling Kazooie it's not much to go on. There's got to be several planets peopled by humanoid bears in this galaxy alone due to nothing more than random chance...
Welp, back to the main protagonists. Although this seems to be like it'll end up being a humorous side arc for Ben to stomp on would-be bad-guys, we'll see if it ends up being a bigger threat or more serious...
| Piccolo Sky chapter 3 . 2/23
I give this bad guy points for actually including a mild compliment in his assessment of the protagonists. Don't see much of that.
Actually, the "machine" analogy might have been a good one. Rather than being truly "malevolent", Zannacross looks more like one of those AI programs that inferred the "Zeroth Law of Robotics" or something similar.
...Did Zannacross ever consider in the course of his plan that his idea would likely destroy him as well? Probably not.
...Did the bad guy REALLY say "It's Galactic National Zannacross Day"? Desperate situation or no, I think the biggest danger at that moment would be me hurting myself laughing.
I would say this battle had a Dragonball end to it, as a lot of the battle was copied from Dragonball, but, in more modern days, it reminds me more of "Man of Steel". (Cue gratuitous Zod screaming)
Well, on the negative side is everything I pointed out to you in PM. As you can see, both the villain and the heroes explained their entire philosophy multiple times. Other than that, I hope the "next" battle with him is a bit more satisfying. This was more like that Brolly battle I told you about earlier, with the heroes doing nothing but failing repeatedly until the last move or two.
Anyway, flashback over. Next chapter is back at it.
| Piccolo Sky chapter 2 . 2/20
Forty percent of the fleet destroyed by a 1.2 kilometer blast? Well, dang...you guys knew you were in space, right? That's kind of your fault for all cramming yourselves together in a tiny space...
Well, technically it IS still impossible...you're just going to have to leave everything to these guys. Heck, when they showed up, I would have been like: "Alright, everyone. Since we're all pretty much 'debris'...let's head on home and let these guys handle it. I don't fancy becoming a 'red shirt' today." ...They probably should have let them handle it to begin with, especially those 40 percent of dudes who lined up like a shooting gallery.
Ok, done with this chapter.
| dragonridley chapter 94 . 10/22/2012
Right, where to start..
Enneagram of Personality. Again i feel it's not required, but as you feel it helps others understand your villains, thats your call. I can't much else on that.
The guide itself. it's got more characters, obviously, and has the content more even and fair between them and keeps to minimal...cept Brad and Zannacross, but thats a given. If i had a guide, BU (Broken Universe) Richard would f***ing hog most of it.
It's oddly more of a guide, guide, and keeps only some spoilers in, which works as it makes people want to look into the story to know more.
The whole Identity business is understandable, but yet in most stories they cover this as a norm, since it's more of a goal, all characters have goals in life, be them short ones or long term.
The pursuit of the ideal world and life, and the pursuit of what is truly right...I can't say much on this department, as all people have, and always will have, different views of 'right' and 'the ideal world' that others will always see as wrong or worthless or brings no happiness even to them. Many can claim they're doing it for the sake of the people or for others, but to some others, it can be seen as something else.
Crossovers. well duh, this whole thing was one huge one, it's a pretty obvious given. i can't say any fault there.
Bass: The whole no real closure in his canon story in classic, Battle Network, and Battle Network anime? totally agree. that was annoying that he didn't get any. damn Capcom...
Zannacross, your author note of him was accurate. the thing with the big bad was, for me, it was over the top, but again, this is me. He didn't come off well compared to others, but you needed a big bad to end with, and thats the guy.
Brad: Your...note on him. About the whole Him being based on someone you hate because he was with a girl you liked? Are you sure that's the kind of thing you want to be saying? I mean, it was easy to guess...and I do mean easy to guess between Brad, Ben and Lacus, but is that really the kind of thing you want outright confirmed to everyone?
Anyways, beyond that...it does the job alot better then the hero one. nice going.
| dragonridley chapter 93 . 9/14/2012
Holy, salamander, cuttlefish.
I know this is a guide and all, but bejebus must it be so much for so few? the content is fine, but it needs to be squished a little. Ben's is just...way too much, as is Lacus. when you think guides, you think 'basic outline' when it comes to characters, so then people have to look through the stories to know their adventure.
Some can/probably do/will skip to the guide and wrap up the gist of the story here.
I'm surprised you even needed the Enneagram of Personality. you could've just said the characters traits and drive without it, they're your cast afterall. You should show you know the characters without a guidebook. it doesn't give them much of a better overview, it just doesn't. also, in the words of barbossa "tis more what you'd call, guidelines, then rules."
And I MUST say this one error, this one error that made me suddenly think that perhaps all this Cosmic War was Toy Story aka actually just a battle for a street in a residental area, and thus, it made me laugh for a few hours at the thought of it.
'Full name is Benjamin Fei Auro, has blue eyes, light brown hair that is mostly normal length, and is six inches tall.'
'Six inches tall.'
besides all this, it is informative and useful for reminding you of the previous two stories. Nice job there.
| senor lamba SHALL bite todeath chapter 87 . 11/8/2011
hola. from mehico.
its still spelt shall not shawl
ALso, reviewer and you still spell it wrong way.
| kapia chapter 1 . 10/16/2011
This story is unique to contain this kind of universe and characters, so congratulations for your creativity and energy. By the way, you said you will start a new arc. Is this arc the revamped version of Vol.1 or will you put something new?
| lambo shawl bitetodeath chapter 87 . 9/4/2011
something that ive been wanting eve since the start of the series. well done considering juggling all of those cameos. although the ichigo disrespect was... funny im not gunna lie.
| Rydrian Gunn the Journeyman chapter 91 . 7/8/2011
sorry this is a bit late have had a alot on my plate great job on the story
| Phantom Xie 323 chapter 90 . 7/5/2011
Zanacross not being able to die is no surprise, given the fact that he
is the ultimate evil in the trilogy he can't possibly just die, evil will
always exist, but it can be incapacitated to a point where it is no longer a
threat, just look at Sauron from LOTR.
As for Lacus' revival, probably expected that, plus you said you were aiming
for a happy ending, not what happened to Nia in TTGL. Through having the
Supreme Being turn into Shenron is kinda too predictable.
Also what was the fate of the Gundam pilots who helped our heroes throughout
And finally, when can I expect the final chapter? Can't wait!