|Reviews for Adjustments|
| Kyu-Momo chapter 1 . 8/25/2010
Heh, that was cute.
I liked it.
| TheSilverHairedMaiden chapter 33 . 8/25/2010
Sorry for the late review, my internet was down, which may or may not have caused me to have a mild freakout. I bet you were sitting there, staring at screen for endless hours, just waiting for a review from me. No? Yeah, didn't think so.
The chapter was good as usual, but everything happened really quickly. They flew across an ocean, encounered Ulki and Janaff, and climbed to the top of the Guidance Tower in only a couple hundred words. Draw things out, and keep working on improving Mihara's thoughts and emotions!
The reuniting scene was sweet :) But more emotion!
All in all, good chapter. You get a celery stick and a bucket of chocolate milk. That's prety damn awesome.
Still waiting on more Ranulfy goodness. And more Shoen/Sylvia! God, I'm a demanding reviewer. I don't know how you put up with me.
| EVILmuffins776 chapter 5 . 8/19/2010
That was an amazing chapter. The end was just ADORABLE!
| EVILmuffins776 chapter 1 . 8/18/2010
Holy crap that prolouge is amazing! It reminds me of Star Wars a little bit at the end. "I am your father." When I heard that, I gasped so loudly.
| xTwilightxSpiritX chapter 33 . 8/17/2010
I was a bit too lazy to actually log in.. but I /had/ to comment/ leave a review because I think this was one of your very best chapters yet. The emotion was powerful and everyone was really in-character: it takes a lot to be able to write Tibarn like you do xD
Anyway, keep it up, this story is fabulous~
| Lumos Fabula chapter 32 . 7/29/2010
I already texted you this, but I am quite certain that "inputted" is not a real word. :)
Progression is great, loving the characters, why do you keep making up words, and just let Mihara do the killing of the Ashera, which must be done by the person who is the most main characters of the main characters, which is therefore Mihara.
Now that's a run-on sentence. :)
And surely you're not doing a ShoenxIrea pairing?
See you tonight! :D
| Guest chapter 32 . 7/22/2010
Sorry for the late review- I was dragged against my will to a small town where people walk their sheep on leashes and the neighbours alpackas are too loud.
TEAM SHIPPO! DAMN STRAIGHT!
The first half of this chapter was mostly dialogue, which I really enjoyed. You could feel the tension in the room, and see how characters dealt with it as individuals. Well done.
What I really appreciated was your taking my words to heart, and I truley noticed the effort to change. Thank you. :D
Touching back on the dialogue part again, I enjoyed the reference to Inuyasha, because it made me remember that these people are far from home, and they know it and miss it. They really are brave, aren't they? Your adding in that one bit pleased me.
I think there's no question that Mihara should deal the final blow. This is her journey- her story- and it's her... right, duty even, to end it. And let's face it, it's simply more epic than her watching it happen, and will probably appeal more to your readers. It's like this-
Harry killed Voldemort, not Ron. Not Hermione. Not Dumbledore.
Frodo destroyed the Ring, not Sam. Not Aragorn. Not Gandalf.
And Mihara should kill Ashera, not Tibarn. Not Shoen. Not Ranulf.
It's powerful, and after all this time of Ashera tormenting her, attacking her, endangering her in so many ways, Mihara owes it to herself to rid herself of that forever, and cure the tradgedies she's gone through by killing the one that brought such plague among her. She needs this.
Great chapter, I can't wait for the next bit. Here's an organic pot-scrubber, but don't spend it all in one place!
| Cata-nee chapter 32 . 7/20/2010
CRY CRY (Dis be Iline)
I remember when you first posted dis story- Ive been wit you through and through on it! Since like... chapter 9 i think. Oh wells- It's getting Awesome-er!
I cant wait till next chaptah XDDD!
Hmm... final blow? Well, I say Mihara or Shoen - but its up to yah! (Yknow cause their mom...?) Byesss :)
| Angel Of Darkness And Light chapter 32 . 7/19/2010
Aww...The story is close to being over? *cries*
Well, I think that Tibarn,Mihara, and Shoen should deliver the finally blow together. Maybe. Of course, maybe it shouldn't turn out like that...hmm.
Anyway, good job. I can't wait for the next chapter!
| Brookie4Cookies chapter 32 . 7/18/2010
Hahaha, SHIPPOU! I 3 that show! Good times...AND I THINK A COMBINATION OF ALL THE TEENS SHOULD DO SOME WEIRD COMBO ATTACK AND BLOW ASHERA TO SMITHEREENS!
Sylvia: You sound like SUCH a pyro right now...and I like it! EL THUNDER!
| Brookie4Cookies chapter 31 . 7/4/2010
Happy birthday Mihara! O dear a way 2 defeat ashera? Yay! good job so far abs could u tell ppl if they want 2 draw sylvia they just hav to pm me?
| Cata-nee chapter 31 . 6/27/2010
I wish there was more... I haven't been online at allso I was kinda forced to read chapters 25- to... this one over cause i dont remember.
Frankly, I am glad!
And Im curious about whatever Mihara knows.
And if Naesala wants to be a good daddy he's gonna Have to babysit! If that's even important in ya story, of course.
XDXD cannot wait till next update :D
| Cata-nee chapter 30 . 6/27/2010
Haha! I loved the story that Silvan told.
It was 100% believeable!
Ah sorry i dun kno what to put next.
Oh! Yeah there will be ACTION in the next chapter!
I cannot wait until I read it!
And Reyson, awwwhhh YOU!
That's it, cyaaa! :3
| Angel Of Darkness And Light chapter 31 . 6/27/2010
You're welcome. :D
YAY. Another excellent chapter. :D
Discriptive and dramatic as always.
Ooooh a cliff hanger! I can't wait for the next chapter!
Youch, Mihara really is Tibarn's daughter! She doesn't give up easily, that's for sure! It makes me say ouch when I read the battle scene between her and Kyo...O_O XD
| TheSilverHairedMaiden chapter 31 . 6/27/2010
Sorry Im not logged in, Im too lazy.
Oh, good, no Reyson screwing up my- I mean, Miharas, happiness! Somthing about this story bothers me a little. your characters are flat. They never descibe how theyre feeling, theyll only occasionally roll their eyes or look shocked or something, but whoever the story is currently following have no emotions. When Mihara saw Harmony, sure she looked surpised and shouted a bit, but there was nothing else there. They almost never have thinking sessions, exept for one-liners during battles. Also, everything happens fast and in brief paragraphs, and you swich point of view constantly. Action scenes take up lots of the chapter, and are getting sorta repetative and teious to read.
Despite the heavy critizem, I want you to know that I stil really love this story and enjoyed the chapter! :) Dont get me wrong, these are just a few things I wanted to point out if they help :D
P.S. Sorry for the lack of apostrophies, the computer keeps typipng the French symbols instead and refuses to be fixed.
P.P.S. If you want, leave a review for my story, The Maidens Shadow. I enjoy tips on imrovement and guidance :D Thanks!
P.P.P.S. I know this review lacks all forms of randomness and entertainment, but in m defense its 7:30 am where I am and Ive just stayed up all night with a bunch of friends, who are sleeping n the floor in front of me. Its times like these where my imagination sprains.