|Reviews for Dawn Of A New Age|
| Guest chapter 2 . 5/26/2015
You have a particularly egregious typo in this chapter.
When Jerry and Galahad are having their live fire exercise, you wrote that the drone Starfuries sarcoma to Jerry's missiles. The word you want is succumb - to give way to superior force. A sarcoma is a type of malignant tumor.
Somewhat less noxious but still pretty bad, when Sinclair and Sheridan are talking in the last scene of the chapter, you wrote that the station disrepaired. The word you want is disappeared, meaning vanished or went away. If it disrepaired, you would be saying that it somehow took itself apart.
| Syphon01 chapter 4 . 2/2/2014
just came across the Bolo and searching found this story very nice.
but is it going to be continued?
| Guest chapter 4 . 8/30/2013
well very good story no doubt . but its been a very long time since the last update . i hope you can update soon
| Blackholelord chapter 4 . 8/23/2013
Well this is a nice crossover.
| Illuviar chapter 4 . 8/20/2013
| thebluninja chapter 4 . 1/29/2013
You have the Botany Bay as a colony ship ... just tell me it's not captained by one KHAAAAAAANNN! I'm a fan of both series, and you do a very good job of emulating the BOLO-voice of the series. I feel sorry for Ivanova, though I suspect the Psi Corps has a *much* harder time hassling her with BaBOLOn 5 watching out for her. I can only hope the "to be continued" might come true, because aside from some minor spelling mistakes, this is a good story.
| Nightgazer333 chapter 4 . 12/17/2012
Update This Please!_
| ARcan chapter 1 . 9/19/2012
great job, personally I would try to disarm the nergear with an EMP.
| cklammer chapter 4 . 12/8/2011
you'll sea - you'll see
axillary - auxillary
Picosecond - picosecond
One few outsides - Only a few outsiders
don't you threat non - don't you fret none
momentary sence - momentary sense
stop any, accidents - stop any accidents
ships first commander - ship's first commander
ahybrid Hellrail - a hybrid Hellrail (this one 2x)
a multiple battle screens - multiple battle screens
a full minutes - a full minute
| cklammer chapter 3 . 12/8/2011
""I have do desire to calm down." - "I have no desire to calm down."
"That is and over-simplification, but true." - "That is an over-simplification, but true."
We have raised words to ash and ruin, slaughtering their inhabitance without mercy or compassion. - We have razed worlds to ash and ruin, slaughtering their inhabitants without mercy or compassion.
Surplus; On Lone - Surplus; On Loan
of the crew are foolish enough - if the crew are foolish enough
the take down the Vorchan's, - they take down the Vorchan's,
Everyone held there breath, - Everyone held their breath,
To slashes like a surgeons knife, - It slashes like a surgeons knife,
for-quarter - fore-quarter
physic energy - psychic energy
Oooh, wheels within wheels - conspiracies galore. Nice.
Nice battle descriptions.
| cklammer chapter 2 . 12/8/2011
Typo nitpicks: "primary a secondary" - "primary and secondary", "sarcoma" - "succumb"
| cklammer chapter 1 . 12/8/2011
"Hier ist Bolo Das Afrika Korps." A bombastic German tenor reported over what sounded like Wagner's Ride of the Valkyries played at full blast, "Ziele bekämpft und vernichtet!"
Funny Bolo names you have and your German needs work.
| orionastro chapter 4 . 11/27/2011
very good story, i hope you update soon.
| darkfinder chapter 4 . 8/30/2011
to bad there is no more . surprised they did not catch on to clark .
| darkfinder chapter 3 . 8/30/2011
i'm surprised they let clark take power . how they get around him now .