|Reviews for Freind and Foe|
| Charlie Torrence chapter 1 . 6/29/2009
Firstly, congratulations. Writing is hard. Just a few points on your story.
- The preclusion to the actual recording is an interesting way to begin the story and I appreciated it. It made me as a reader feel a part of the action more.
- The actual recording text requires a bit of grammatical structuring (Capitals, proper paragraph structure, etc.), but the text itself is intriguing enough that I would like to hear more.
- The most interesting part of your story is the date at which the file is accessed - 91 years after the recording itself. I as the reader am very interested t see who is accessing this file and what the state of action is in 2047. Are the Chimera still at large? Is humanity gone? ho is Jack Hanson?
I eagerly await the answers to these question. I enjoyed this and hope that you continue.