|Reviews for Misty's capture|
| KairaB chapter 9 . 4/4/2011
It's interesting. Does Misty ever give herself to him? You never really specified that.
| A.T chapter 9 . 3/31/2011
Dude, this fic is the BEST! nice work. update fast please!
| theonewhoseesall chapter 9 . 3/16/2011
this story is well wrote. but thats all. this last chapter should have been THE last chapter. also afraid your logic doesnt stand has to be atleast lvl. 80 by now. not to mention the fact that tangrowths cant learn synthesis. maybe im reading into this too much. however i merely wanted to state my opinion. one last note is that in terms of the anime and my logic ,banette would not willingly join somone like lady cloud. banette live solitary lives and focus on causeing mischief. however as i said this is merely my own opinion. please dont be you do take time to read this than you have my graditude.
| Alicorn White chapter 9 . 3/16/2011
Liked the other version better. This one was still very good though.
I suppose this is more "realistic" as to what people would say, but eh. Fuck them, really, lol.
| Innocentius chapter 9 . 3/16/2011
Hmm. I prefer this chapter alot more to the previous since unlike many other Pokemon fans, i think Ash is pretty awesome. However, you took quite some time in posting it so i've kind of forgotten what the character's mindsets were at this point. However, didn't Misty try to escape like, two chapters ago? What's with the sudden change of heart in wanting to be a slave?
| Impstar chapter 9 . 3/15/2011
Interesting... I'm not sure which one I like more. The old version portrayed Ash in a bad light, while this one portrayed Omalley in a bad light. I must say, the second version is a lot more expected and canon, so I supposed I'll have to go for that one. But it will be a lot of work for Omalley to get Misty to like him now.
| Fapmaster chapter 9 . 1/16/2011
Wow i'm not sure quite how to express my view on this chapter. It was well written but your burning hatred for Ash shows REALLY well, however you didn't have to bend the characters personality to an unimaginable length to show how much you dislike him and as a previous reviewer said about making Ash a bastard and the your self insert like a freaking god.
He kidnapped her, raped her with tentacles, covered her in grimer and submitted her to yuri. Ignoring the fact that this is fanfiction and anything goes RAPE is still a fucked up thing. She should be feeling violated and something along the lines of feeling dirty.
When a woman gets raped in the real world she enjoys the feeling but that's unaviodable. The emotional and psychological damage from being fucked against your will is far worse.
Overall your other chapters made me continue reading and this one has deterred me from ever eading on again, sawry.
| Atrum Ferox chapter 9 . 1/15/2011
okay, i'm going to be perfectly honest with u...
i didn't like this chapter at all...not one bit. i understand that u wanted to make things interesting in ur fanfic, but still i concur with everything Lix Lorn the Eeveetrainer just said. took the words right out of my mouth. u made ash WAY TOO OOC just to make you (the self-inserted fellow) look good when the fact that you kidnapped & rape misty is far worse.
that's just my two cents. i ain't saying i'll stop reading or hating this fic since it's evilly sexually amusing, the chapter was by far my least favorite that's all.
| Lord Anubis Judge of the dead chapter 9 . 1/15/2011
Not bad, just a couple of questions. One when does Misty get her pokemon back, and two is she really going to get turned into a sex slave considering Misty and Omalley's feelings towards each other and the events that just happened. I mean she did just volunteer to go with Omalley after all.
Asides from getting those answered i LOVE how the story is turning out since i also think that ash is a immature dick in the show. Can't wait to see what happens next.
| The Azure Guardian chapter 9 . 1/14/2011
Wow. Wasn't excepting this. The previous chapters Ash did seem concerned for Misty (he even said something along the lines of "we'll find you" or something. I don't remember) and then he turns out to be a total prick.
| Lixie Lorn chapter 9 . 1/14/2011
I'll be honest. I didn't like this chapter.
...least important of all, it's a smutfic. This chapter was smutless. xD
But that could be fine.
More importantly... Ash DOES care for his pokemon. It's not his fault that the show works like that-in most fanfics, his pokemon DO follow their instincts. What's more, he DOES respect Misty, and would fight for her. He wouldn't harm Forretress, and he'd regret it if he did.
More importantly still, however much of an utter prick you make Ash... you kidnapped and raped her. That is ALWAYS going to be worse, however much she ends up liking you.
...most importantly, she would not be forgiving you yet. Especially not over her best friends.
I'm not going to stop reading or anything, but... yeah. Really not your best. Can't wait for more bad, awesome, evil smut though.
| Shadowed Genius chapter 8 . 11/8/2010
I read over the chapters of this story, and despite the obvious self-insert of a man lusting after an anime character, it was very well written. The self-insert actually makes it more realistic. ALong with how pokemon can be used to commit acts of rape. I am looking forwards to more of this story.
With All Due Respect,
Roy of Shadows.
| Super Paper chapter 8 . 11/8/2010
I LOVE YURI 3
| Lixie Lorn chapter 8 . 11/4/2010
Very nicely done. xP
Also, seeing a clip of Misty as the mermaid, I retract any comments disparaging her appearence. With her hair down? HAWT.
...also, I don't remember if you said you'd worked out a place for me, but I could totally be one of Cloud's trainers. Although I'd want a little more freedom... and I'd be there because I wanted it as much as her. xP
...although I do prefer hetero...
I overuse ellipses. XD
| Alicorn White chapter 8 . 11/4/2010
lovely. Sorry that I hadn't been able to proofread before you posted it up x.x my internet is down and I'm actually on my phone lol. Got kicked out of my mothers house and I'm staying at a friends. Lovely portrayal me, I must say n.n keep up the good work I can only imagine the terrible things were going to do w poor ash and Brock lol.