|Reviews for Breathless|
| glAssbOy chapter 1 . 6/10/2009
In any case, a good read for a few laughs. Although what came out of me was more of a disturbed chuckle. Judging from the range of genres you've worked on, I must really say you're a very flexible writer.
On the David Carradine angle, I didn't notice it a first until you mentioned it on your notes. Come to think of it, his passing was a pretty weird one too.
| deckman chapter 1 . 6/10/2009
Good Stuff. Rather psychotropic - you have to wonder what Keitaro was smoking/snorting/drinking before he went to bed. You certainly wrote the story in such a way as to allow the reader to think this was just a dream gone strange. Shinobu always getting Su's rejects was pretty funny, the Walmart line was just out there.
Looking forward to seeing your next idea, thanks for some humor!
| NefCanuck chapter 1 . 6/10/2009
OMG! That was *insane*... I love it!
Makes me wonder just what kind of terrors Naru or heaven help me, Mutsumi would be up to? LOL
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| Kyo Tetsuei chapter 1 . 6/10/2009
For me the biggest laugh came at the gallows humor comment... loved it. thanks for sharing.
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| dennisud chapter 1 . 6/10/2009
Very Dark Billish as well, a fitting tribute as I have met the man and as there is no questioning his acting talents, he was a weird MFer!
| Gotenks01013 chapter 1 . 6/10/2009
Was wondering about the David Carradine angle. Also Keitaro with a backbone while drowsy was refreshing...Walmart indeed. Surprised Motoko didn't hit him when he noticed the tear.
| Marzan chapter 1 . 6/10/2009
Totally different to most of your other Love Hina fanfics. Love the bit about Kitsune and Motoko. Somehow, it doesn't seem so far fetched! Funny!
| Wonderbee31 chapter 1 . 6/10/2009
Well done, with a bit of creep and humor mixed really well, though the idea of some of the girls, I can see why Kei would want to forget as long as he didn't get caught up in things.