|Reviews for The Civilian Assistant|
| Cormalindo chapter 13 . 2/7
Regarding footnote 2. This is conflating two separate descriptions. We learn that trolls are a weaker mockery of ents, and during the siege of Isengard we learn that Ents may crush stone like treeroots do, only a lot faster. These two items are not related, especially as LotR trolls are not made of stone while alive.
That being said, I do love how the humour in your stories make me laugh a lot and remind me of Pterry's writing.
| Slantaholic chapter 15 . 12/6/2013
Altogether a very strange story. I liked your take on classism. I didn't like the inclusion of Lord of the Rings so very late into the story, oh, crossover.
| Slantaholic chapter 14 . 12/6/2013
It's, erm, like you ran out of obscure Discworld characters to mention.
*throws arms in the air* I didn't mind the Ents, but Frodo Baggins threw me out.
| Slantaholic chapter 12 . 12/6/2013
I'm unsure as to why dwarfs and trolls are capitalised.
Interesting more women.
| Slantaholic chapter 10 . 12/6/2013
Yay! More Slant!
| Slantaholic chapter 9 . 12/6/2013
An interesting amount of women. Trying to pass the Bechdel?
| Slantaholic chapter 7 . 12/6/2013
Good. More Discworld characters, sometimes obscure ones, entering.
| Slantaholic chapter 6 . 12/6/2013
Go Vimes (is 'go' too old-fashioned these days?) for attempting to change the class system. Meanwhile, my eyes are skating across your prose. I don't know why. *coughs* I think you have too many tangles-up.
| Slantaholic chapter 5 . 12/6/2013
A lovely group of all of Pratchett under-used characters! Well done for including so many.
| Slantaholic chapter 3 . 12/6/2013
Oh my... Slant and Morecombe. *fans self*
And Slant was desperate, Vimes could see it in his eyes. Oh my.
Back to your story; I'm reading it OK.
| Slantaholic chapter 1 . 12/6/2013
Yay! Slant got a mention.
| GuesssWho chapter 7 . 11/9/2013
A damn cynical one indeed!
| GuesssWho chapter 4 . 11/7/2013
Would aforementioned song have a title like 'Dear Old Skibbereen,' then? My grandmother's grandfather was from Skibbereen, you know!
| TreacleMineRoad chapter 15 . 9/26/2013
Wow! Just discovered your site and book. What wonderful ideas and writing. I loved the LOTR crossover, too funny. So much to praise here-just wonderful how Vetinari gets the better of Vimes, as he always does. Vimes not realizing that he had outdone the patrician provoked a real 'ulp' feeling. But Vetinari wouldn't have mentioned it to Vimes unless he had the solution, at Vimes' expense. I am also glad that the Palace and City will be getting their own defenses. The death toll in JINGO is the most horrifying thing in all the books, so touching and real. (I reread JINGO recently and it still moves my heart. And it all happened so fast! I've looked at the Ankh-Morpork City mapp and seen how fast the Klatchians tore through the city, how it took only minutes. AM NEEDS river defenses.
You have a great gift for style, true ears, and real situations. If I may make the following suggestions: I know the council debate is a huge part of the book, but although quite funny in parts, the roll call guild by guild gets old. I found my attention wandering I started to skim. This may be the result of reading it on a PC instead of a laptop or in a hardbook. The buildup to the "Fifty grades of Shale" was very funny. I do hope that Vimes gets Dolomita to be a part-time Civilian adviser. It's the same kind of low-down thing Vetinari would do to Vimes.
| kate chapter 7 . 9/9/2013
I like your writing, I think it's very good and you can be almost as (but not quite as, sorry) funny as Pratchett . However, I wish you would use it as less of an political piece. Your skills would be much better suited to a newspaper. (I'm not trying to be rude, I just don't like reading politics in a fanfic, even if they agree with me.) Also, I have three problems with your piece. 1) You mention that Britain has free healthcare, courtesy of the government. I don't know much about British healthcare, but don't you ultimately pay for this service with taxpayer dollars? I've no personal experience in the matter, but I have heard that Canadians often come into the U.S. for healthcare services because of long waiting lines and poor service provided by their healthcare system. Why is this? I would honestly like your take on the matter, but I'm not logged in. Since you often answer reviews on your profile, I'll look there. 2) It sounded like Vimes was bribing Queen Molly in this chapter(6) Surely that's frowned upon, even on the disk? 3) Vetinari sounds extremely biased. Isn't that a bit out of character for him, actively showing so much bias? I do enjoy reading your writing. Sorry if I'm being overly picky.