Reviews for Chuck vs the Alpha Version
Lowenweiss chapter 9 . 2/14
Wow! A but over thee top, but well written and enjoyable. Glad you are still writing.
baldcoder chapter 16 . 5/16/2016
Great story. Very well done! I liked it a lot.
Marc Vun Kannon chapter 9 . 5/1/2016
Talk about your bad days. He really does need to join the CIA. He'd be safer there.
Marc Vun Kannon chapter 6 . 5/1/2016
Dragging Chuck away from free pizza? Casey's a fiend! An extra helping of suspense, with those two agents down, and now Ellie and Devon are in the mix.
Marc Vun Kannon chapter 4 . 5/1/2016
Exciting stuff so far. Normally I'm not so fond of people making their OCs such prominent characters in the story, but with Slade as a'could have been' for Chuck it works.
garnetflint chapter 16 . 5/13/2013
I have finally found the time to read your whole body of work. I have really enjoyed London Calling and the Next Generation, but I'm very gald to be able to go back and read where it all started. I regret that I hadn't found FF when you were writing these stories as I would have done a chapter by chapter review (pushing thaose numbers up!). Jimmy is a very interesting character and I look forward to seeing how he develops and how our heros end up meeting him again. I think that scene should be a highlight of the series!

Thanks again for a great story.
ChuckFanForever chapter 16 . 2/16/2013
I have to admit when Casey put his bronze star into the coffin, I had to fight back tears (I'm a grown man)! That's how attached I became to this wonderfully heroic fictional character you created in the Chuck universe.

It was a bit anticlimactic to then read in this chapter that he had indeed survived! But I suppose it's only fitting, he was seemingly indestructible in the entire story almost like Casey (along with fighting skills like Sarah, and Chuck's sense of humour). It was an action packed story that kept me on the edge of my seat! Just glad you were able to sneak some sweet Charah moments in between all the action! And I did hope that Sarah would have a friend to introduce to Jimmy!
Ms. Chips chapter 16 . 4/28/2010
I just discovered this story, and I look forward to going through all your fics now. Jimmy is such a compelling character that I can't wait to see how he matures as an agent. As much as I liked the original ending in chapter 15, I'm thrilled that the alternate ending will allow more stories to happen. I can't wait to read the second installment in the series, and see (hopefully) how the reunion with Team Bartowski goes.

Great job with the story! Thanks for sharing it with us.
chucksara4ever chapter 10 . 12/29/2009
Great chapter your writing has been good up to this point jimmey really is a bit of a superhero but what made this chapter stand out for me was the excellent Charah really well written and v sexy. not bothered about any jellie but another dose of charah would be exactly what the doctor ordered
Baylink chapter 16 . 11/22/2009
I missed a lot of the references, but I did catch Star Wars and Saddles...

I think you could have just forged ahead with this chapter without as much author's note, myself; this isn't all that uncommon a thing to do...

though it *does* tend to get you called Bastard, a lot. :-)

The medal was a nice touch, though there were a couple spots in the story where I thought you softened Casey up a bit too much... he can *be* soft, he just can't ever admit it.

I did like the ten-words rule though.

I would recommend sticking with the traditional 3PLO-past in future stories... except perhaps for flashbacks and other emphasis.

Not bad, over all. B, maybe a B. Definitely get the plus if you ran a copyedit pass and fixed all the tenses...
Baylink chapter 13 . 11/22/2009
I seem to be ending chapters with the sentence "oh, shit", a lot.

Baylink chapter 11 . 11/22/2009
Y'know... I have a strategic problem with this arc.

It outs Sarah and Casey in a way that Ellie doesn't already know about, doesn't it? Ellie takes it awfully calmly to find out that Sarah and Casey were helping the "FBI guy"; I would think that should have set her Spidey senses tingling...
Baylink chapter 10 . 11/22/2009
Oh shit.

That's all I've got. :-)
Baylink chapter 7 . 11/21/2009
Ok, now; *this* chapter was revvin' up. :-)

"English and Bastard" is a top 5 line.
Baylink chapter 4 . 11/21/2009
Story's coming along pretty good. Still a bit expo-heavy...

but you're having tense problems again.

My apologies for reviewing all this after you're done - I tend towards really long, complete stories as a first filter, for my own purposes - but the tense thing is really jarring; enough that it almost justifies a copyedit pass to fix it up (there really haven't been many copy mistakes other than that; one or three word choices I'd have changed), and a repost.

Understand: I'm a pretty hard grader. Sharpasamarble, NotoriousJMG and Timewalker05 are my standards for this stuff.
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