Reviews for Double Time Trouble
Snowdove30 chapter 12 . 2/28/2012
Excellent update. So glad to this revived. Just when I think Dumbledore can't sink any lower, he does...
Michae1ange1o chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
Good gracious, well this is a blast from the past. I thought I was seeing things in my email inbox.

Oooh I'm all happy now, something tells me the House of Granger is going to end up running the damn ministry at the end of it all, or at least the Wizengamot. A pity Dumbledore never recieved a love Pinapple too.

Your is actualy quite sinister, I never watched the modern movie as remakes tend to be quite shit, I'm used to the happy go lucky B&W movies. Good going.

Thanks for the update :) Lily and James conversation at the end is just so damn true and very, very well written.
FatesShadow83 chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
So glad you're continuing this!

Great chapter!
Flight of the Valkyries chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
I was surprised to see that this was updated. I can't wait to see what the St. Trinian girls boot camp is like or who Hermione allies herself with. Looking forward to the next chapter.
resplendeo chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
Not to mention that, now that Lucius is dead, I rather doubt Hermione is going to have much trouble with getting into Malf- uh, Granger Library. What does she do with a larger knowledge base? And, after that- information network? Please? Hermione the Spymaster? ... it would be awesome ...
MisterQ chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
I am happy this story is being continued. Good to see the Trinians girls boot camped into a (loyal) fighting force - with magic. I do wonder what Snape is going to do now that he realizes that he has been working for two masters on the same side after hearing Dumbledoor announce that he was also a dark lord. Too bad there wasn't any nosy reported bugging that conversation, but there's still pensives.
jdboss1 chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
you are producing stories at an incredible rate

I just hope you don't tire yourself out.

I was really hoping this this storyone was going to be the next updated

(I'm one of your biggest fans) now on to the criticism)

I do find it irritating more than irritating actually how you just talk about events not actually show them in real-time

I would have really loved to have seen Hermione and politics in the chamber have all the meetings and so forth.

Quite a few authors would have had contents of this chapter over 10 chapters in real-time and in some ways I would love to see that sometimes it's too easy to finish his story to quickly and has there is hardly any good storys I haven't read yet it is harder and harder this website to entertain me I can spend hours searching for new stories and all I find it crap.

You are easily one of the best authors ever

My only major criticism about this story was in Chapter 11

I do accept that the death eater is a combat action and is a legitimate target but what really upsets me was Hermione acceptance of all the death and destruction around her as they massacred people one scene I think was the worst that really got me was this

A young girl presumably just graduated from the castle 17 18 years old clinging on tight to her young baby while being strung up and then having hur baby rips out of her hands stolen from a while she was left to die

A young girl presumably just graduated from the castle 17 18 years old clinging on tight to her young baby while being strung up and then having hur baby rips out of her hands stolen from a while she was left to die

This particular scene really made me feel quite nauseous

yes you could easily claim she was aware of what was going on but then being bought up and surrounded by something lessons the evilness plus what did she have individually done as an example

if you had a scene with her torturing somehow plus person then I think it would have gone down much much better

It's so easy for brave people to condemn those of us who are frightened and would of course carry out any request of somebody who is our life in their hands

As if I bumped into Hitler I would be the most politest gentleman ever intill I politely found an excuse to leave I would quickly emigrate but if I was able to leave then I would do whatever it took for the group I was caught up in not too hurt me

you are producing stories at an incredible rate

I just hope you don't tire yourself out.

I was really hoping this this storyone was going to be the next updated

(I'm one of your biggest fans) now on to the criticism)

I do find it irritating more than irritating actually how you just talk about events not actually show them in real-time

I would have really loved to have seen Hermione and politics in the chamber have all the meetings and so forth.

Quite a few authors would have had contents of this chapter over 10 chapters in real-time and in some ways I would love to see that sometimes it's too easy to finish his story to quickly and has there is hardly any good storys I haven't read yet it is harder and harder this website to entertain me I can spend hours searching for new stories and all I find it crap.

You are easily one of the best authors ever

My only major criticism about this story was in Chapter 11

I do accept that the death eater is a combat action and is a legitimate target but what really upsets me was Hermione acceptance of all the death and destruction around her as they massacred people one scene I think was the worst that really got me was this

A young girl presumably just graduated from the castle 17 18 years old clinging on tight to her young baby while being strung up and then having hur baby rips out of her hands stolen from a while she was left to die

A young girl presumably just graduated from the castle 17 18 years old clinging on tight to her young baby while being strung up and then having hur baby rips out of her hands stolen from a while she was left to die

This particular scene really made me feel quite nauseous

yes you could easily claim she was aware of what was going on but then being bought up and surrounded by something lessons the evilness plus what did she have individually done as an example

if you had a scene with her torturing somehow plus person then I think it would have gone down much much better

It's so easy for brave people to condemn those of us who are frightened and would of course carry out any request of somebody who is our life in their hands

As if I bumped into Hitler I would be the most politest gentleman ever intill I politely found an excuse to leave I would quickly emigrate but if I was able to leave then I would do whatever it took for the group I was caught up in not too hurt me

you could claim she had the ability to contact the ministry but then standing alone while you form a family and the dark Lord now wishes you snuff it quite an expensive choice to make not everybody is as independent and is brave of the heroes of stories it is so easy to have a fearless character who would stand alone that so many of us would keep our heads down and as long as it's not directed at us try our best not to be the next target

I feel she's a bit like bin Ladin's nine-year-old daughter

she witnessed her father being shot in the head on in handcuffs

should she be next?

Cannot really blame a new I know your personality majority of time I love reading it the way you express war and destroying your enemies but sometimes I feel you do get slightly cowered away in collateral damage

I really love the scene with the headmistress that was a classic giving her the thumbs up as she kidnapped the students to be tortured if it's as dangerous as you've shown why would these rebellious and murderous brats stick around to die this not like this a prison wall around them and the inmates are allowed to kill one another but then it is fiction and anything can happen

Think it's time now for My Gilded Life update pretty place
Kitiara Woodbane chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
Another wonderful chapter!

I especially liked Hermione Jane becoming the next head of house, and what she said to that ministry official - the "Love Pinapples" - totally out of nowhere and rather funny.

One thing I am interested in however is what you meant by evolution and immortal souls being opposing theories. I don't suppose you would be willing to share your reasoning? I very much enjoy reading the opinions that you write into your stories, you have a very interesting perspective and your writing is very insightful.

Well, either way I look forward to reading the next chapter of whichever story you update!
Zelara chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
Is anyone going to wonder why/how the granger family came to be connected/in charge of the malfoys? That sounds like something Dumbledore would want to check on, a sudden rise of a muggle family to pureblood prominence. Especially once Hermione starts using all that political power, probably against him.
Rob chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
Thank you Thank You. A new chapter.

This story is a fun read. Keep it up.
Antigone's Sister chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
Hi Skysaber

I started reading this story a few months back, and I loved your unique version of a do-over. Also the inclusion of St. Trinians in a very different light than it is usually portrayed in was refreshing.

I do, like a few previous reviewers, have an issue with the end of the chapter. To say that anyone who thinks that evolution happened must necessary be a eugenicist is, and I apologise for my bluntness, ridiculous, but sadly you aren't the only one who thinks so, which is why I feel obligated to spend most of my review on this subject.

Evolution is a natural phenomenon studied by scientists, much like, say, the occurance of forest fires. Forest fires do happen on their own, and can have huge ecological benefits. They clear out brush which can crowd out and kill trees, they get rid of debris which prevents new trees from growing, and there are even some organisms which require the heat of a forest fire to germinate. Imagine a scientist who studies this: he believes it happens, he knows how it happens. He can predict how a forest fire will spread, in order to give out a warning to any people in the general area that might need to evacuate. He can provide instructions on how to control the fire so it doesn't get out of hand. He DOESN'T go around setting fires, especially in an area where anyone might get hurt.

Its the same with evolution. An evolutionist thinks evolution happens, can predict how organisms are going to evolve, and can give us advice on how to deal with this. A good example are the people who work on the flu shots and other disease control. Viruses and bacteria evolve FAST, since they can reproduce very quickly (often in 20 minutes). An evolutionary microbiologist will predict how they will evolve in the future, based on how they have been evolving in the past few years, and design what they think is the best shot possible to provide immunity. This, by the way, is why you need to get the flu shot every year, not just once. (As an aside, if you're a healthy young adult you really don't need it at all, but if you're elderly or get sick very easily, you do need it every year.)

In summary, believing something HAS happened, and knowing how, doesn't meen you think it should still happen. Consider, since you brought it up in the chapter, the Holocaust. You know it happened, and you probably have somewhat of an idea of the socioeconomic factors that made it happen. You might be able to replicate it. But I'm absolutely positive that just because you think it happened, and know why, that you're not going to start advocating the mass murder of Jews and undesirables.
Navn Ukjent chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
I quite like this fic, and I'm glad that you have continued writing it.

I feel I must correct the blatant ignorance that is displayed at the end of capter 12, where Lily says:

"So, racism and genocide are central to evolutionary beliefs. You can't logically separate them."

This is simply false, and it is a total strawman argument. It's also claimed that it's impossible to belive in evolution and a god. This is also false, as many belivers are also convinced of the thruth and accuracy of "the Theory of Evolution by natural selection", including the Catholic Church.

The last falshood is "Serious science won't even touch the subject. " - I'm assuming that this refer to Evolution, but in fact the wast majority of scientist agree with this theory.
katdemon18 chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
hi! me again! i have more time now! so you get twice the babblings! thank you again so much for posting a new chapter of this brilliant story! i was going nuts with the cliffhanger from the previous chapter!

i'm curious, if dumbledore stopped the *coughneedfulcough* killing of purebloods the first time around by neutralizing grindewald- why didn't he just try to do that with voldemort? death eaters don't have an open leader to incite them into killing, death eater attacks stop, the true order can no longer justify themselves with self defense, since dumbledore's been denouncing them as heretical or whatever many of them might have to slink back to him for protection since dumbledore defeated voldemort, supposedly, and if he protects them it puts them mentally in his debt, even though in reality they're not, and with the political upheavel stopped he has the time to go and wrestle the new wizengamont into submission on the power of "defeating" the previous dark lord with the spin that he'd managed to overcome the veritaseum at the order meeting and what he said was part of a long term plan to make sure that those who were truly dedicated to the light would flee and remain safe while he remained as a sacrifice for the greater good and oh wasn't he lucky that he survived? isn't he a hero? and he was so disappointed in those that became so violent without his guidance but forgiveness is for the greater good and we shouldn't hold it against them but hey you might want to keep an eye on whatever families, thus he has a list of those to take care of during the new peace, with tactics like framing sirius as a death eater and so on, and he can corral the purebloods so they can restore themselves through it suddenly becoming fashionable to have weasley size families, if they can, and then if the upstarts who caused so many "needless" deaths during voldemort's first rampage ever got too snotty then he could simply release voldemort again, with a mind properly altered, and a new war would cause enough chaos that most people would have forgotten his little faux pas and gathered to his banner since he was the one who originally "defeated" voldemort, or if voldemort is useless by that time then he can simply engineer a new dark lord, a muggleborn this time, making it even easier to justify the hatred and need to put the muggleborn down

of course the hermiones would be more than set to spike dumbledore's plans, if only by first taking care of the horcruxes that voldemort has because if a chosen one isn't marked then i'm pretty sure voldemort is fair game i mean after all in the mess that rowling called a seventh book harry's way of defeating voldemort was to let the snake hit him with a killing curse, getting rid of the last horcrux, and then jumping up and letting voldemort's curse bobunce back- without the horcrux in harry there's nothing except voldemort's own skill with a wand to stop someone else from getting rid of the horcruxes and thereby getting rid of voldemort for good, and in the media area since i have no doubts that ann has developed quite the number of contacts in the wizarding media through their fashion articles and through them the hermiones can gain a huge following of fashion conscious witches, of course this requires them to dress much more fashionably than they did before and then to eventually dress however they want and claim its fashionable since everyone expects people who write fashion articles to be very well dressed and tina will likely have picked up a lot of beauty tricks while in hollywood so they can sort of get devoted followers the lockhart way- by looking pretty, and if tina becomes a film star and they introduce the idea of movies to the wizarding world that gives them a whole new angle to be popular in the wizarding world with ann still being their PR since she's the "good" one, add in charity with jane claiming that the babies she has are all orphaned halfbloods or purebloods even if she can get samples of pureblood DNA from the various bodies lying around wherever and then running a legal adoption agency or an agency to find the proper relatives for the babies, getting a lot of them off of her hands and making her seem like a hero for saving so many children, granted a lot of them would fall into the hands of people like the malfoys, though i find it hard to believe that any family would be as bad as the malfoys since the death eater relatives are dead and sicne the malfoys were at the very top for a reason- the ruthlessness and wickedness of the other families simply wasn't enough to overcome the malfoys or even an adoption agency that gets them to muggle parents like they would have had originally but now the babies don't have the st. trinian taint over their heads and there could even be a policy for hermione's adoption agency to simply take the st. trinian babies before the muggle agencies do, magically adopt them into some line that they have the blood for- maybe make them into more weasleys to sort of spike molly since with so many with weasley blood around she might think that arthur is cheating on her with muggles and it was really only the youngest two who were awful 2 out of seven's not bad odds if you believe in nature over nurtue, personally i think it's a mix- and thus creating a generations of extra muggle borns/half bloods to go to hogwarts or wherever, quickly ending up as a greater portion of the population than the purebloods since with all the inbreeding i would think its rather hard for some if not most pureblood women to bear more than one child and there's no guarantee that the child would have magic anyway, again due to inbreeding- i mean, look at the black sisters, bellatrix never had children and i'm sure andromeda would have had more children if she could have, molly is an anomaly since rowling was so enamored with the weasleys, and babies are generally adopted quite quickly when they're healthy

so has hermione graduated then from st. trinians or will she be going back, despite the headmistress keeping an eye on her, and therefore get more future slaves? she'd get a better general education at ann's school and hey if the new girls that she has no connection to get indebted to her then she can turn them into house elves and i'm sure there's a huge market for house elves, partcularly female house elves or she can simply use them as nannies the way the malfoys used a number of house elves as nannies for draco and the triplets

going to mention that i disagree with lily's statement at the end there and darwin never used the phrase 'survival of the fittest' it was perversion of hid ideas which mostly adhere to animals anyway and breeding humans the same way as people breed animals doesn't work

anyway, point of rant before the darwin bit was that the hermiones can become super popular by getting the pureblood numbers up through providing pureblood bbies that "happened to be found", possibly hidden or put into the trust of the malfoy family since the malfoys were such an upstanding family (ha!) while at the same time getting the muggle born numbers up and them being fashion icons as well as symbols of independent women makes them heroes for the girls of the wizarding world, and tina's movies can make her even more popular or she or jane could run around the world actually doing the things that lockhart claimed that he did so they gain the popularity of being minor heroes against the dark, they did read the books after all and all three of them have more capability and knowledge in their little toes than lockhart and while it'd be tricky since lockhart only recorded what other people did and slanted it a lot, they could still do it, thus saving a lot of people the effort of having to do the varous things and making reputations for themselves as well as gaining practice in the defense field for the future war that dumbledore will likely incite, jane can never take a healer's oath though she should probably get the trainingof a magical nurse or whatever, they do have ten years before they're invited to various magical schools and i suppose whether or not they go to hogwarts is dependent on whether or not harry goes to hogwarts, which i can't imagine that he will so i vote for harry going to my made up aristotle academy of the arts, which teaches a variety of things like music, art, dancing and theater as well as the magical arts, or to the boston academy of wizardry an all boy's school and the male equivalent of the salem witches academy, or make up some place in australia and dumbledore can eventually get them to hogwarts through the triwizard tournament, if they go to the american schools he can justify the boston and salem branches as being the same school just divided, but bringing them back spells his permanent downfall bwahahaha! since after all the english wizarding world has loved following the triplets, the darlings of the fashion world and little heroes against the dark and since thy're purebloods, technically, dumbledore wouldn't want to sacrifice them, at least not until they'd married whoever he set them up with and jane bears a son to inherit the family fortunes, a son that he would control so he could get the family fortunes, or with the triplets gone and the marauders out of the country they can just watch as dumbledore causes everything to burn around him and they can laugh and be safe and healthy and happy with ann or jane marrying harry, tina going through a string of lovers and eventually having children whose father she never names and anne or jane, i dunno, whichever doesn't marry harry could marry maybe someone from an ancient wizarding ninja clan, that could be cool, or one of the weasley twins but then that could put them rather close to molly, go with the ninja, or some descendent of odysseus, that would be cool

also, i love that snape is now dead, nicely done, or if i misread it and he's not dead then good on you breakng his mind
Aealket chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
Hey,

Oh wow an update.

You go James/Remus/Sirius. Good Job.

You go Hermiones

Alan
Izzyaro chapter 12 . 2/27/2012
This story is amazing. I love the contrast between the three Hermiones, and the whole story is very well thought out.

Can't wait to see what happens next :)
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