|Reviews for Double Time Trouble|
| UniquelyMi chapter 12 . 4/26/2013
Nice place to end it! If you keep updating, of course. You will, right?
Anyways, I really liked the twist you put on the normal time travel story and while the Hermiones had it really easy, it wasn't annoying so much as humorous. The way the Hrmiones split personalities was so natural that you couldn't have planned it. Did you? Either way, you carried that off brilliantly. I also really liked the development of St. Trinitain's and hope to see more.
Grammar wise you need work. For example, you said "neither...neither..." at least once. Altogether, nice job!
| BrainSurge chapter 12 . 4/25/2013
I'm wondering what is going to become of the girl version of Draco. It's a sort of "What happened to the mouse" thing going on there since she hasn't been mentioned since her creation.
| Random number generator chapter 12 . 4/22/2013
"If you believe in spirits or souls, and as kids at Hogwarts we interact with them daily, then the entire basis of evolution is ruined. You cannot believe in an immortal soul and evolution simultaneously. They are opposite beliefs."
why? This two things are completely unrelated.
| Greenicedragon1789 chapter 12 . 4/1/2013
Just asking is all 3 Hermione's going to marry Harry Potter?
| Runecutter chapter 12 . 3/29/2013
Theoretically it could have gone to Harry as he can be constructed to have a Black connection and with the "minor house of Malfoy" all but oblitarated the rights and bounties probably would fall back on the more powerful patron house.
But then Harry is what? 5 months? So maybe Hermione is the right choice just for that reason and her ability to pose as everything from a 15 month old toddler to the grandmother of Dumbledore with the right magical ressources...
Oh and it's SO good to see the Malfoys gone... well mostly, but i doubt they will have Narcissa taking the mandrake potion and revive her so good riddance to bad wizards :D
Does Hermione remember that with that she will have DOBBY as her most trustworthy minion and willing accomplice for most evil deeds she still might plan?
And now i want to see Dumbledore destroyed, humiliated, restlessly stripped of his powers and then dying in the most unworthy way for such an ambitious schemer as him. This chapter really frightened me with how easily the old geezer was to turn into a thing worse than Voldemort and Grindelwald combined... the snape gesture of stepping over him like furniture was well chosen. And if you're in the process... burn down his darned "anthill". People supporting his twisted agenda don't deserve to have a say in the steering of the country!
| Runecutter chapter 11 . 3/29/2013
Hmmm that would explain why the british and american services of secrecy seem to be losing a lot of their former proficiency and expertise over the decades. Triggerhappy-MIB-syndrome or flashthingy-ed out of their minds, probably :D
I like the idea of Hermioneville, but am a bit concerned as we already have heard ONE historical account that seemed to imply that the pureblood cruelty and penchant for disgusting behavior towards "lesser" humans were very likely genetically inheritable. To build up THREE villages full of not only the kids that inherit St Trinians traits but also the toddlers from Death Eater House Raids seems to be a VEEEEERY bad idea after that...
And maybe you killed off Malfoy TOO EARLY. After all he MIGHT have shared his brainfart about the puppy/kitten training method for instant!brilliant spawn... and so disarmed quite a few of the other tedious little devils before they could come into kindergarten age... ;)
| Runecutter chapter 10 . 3/29/2013
I can see how the Death Eaters would love the fact that not many people would miss a student of St Trinians, but wouldn't they love it more when a school's population would be more... helpless like Cheltenham's proper little ladies?
oh and btw theoretically this is 1981... there IS only one Star Trek Series yet (and that for 6 more years :D) Hermione would have to choose between a minidress like Uhura's (or Dax' in the anniversary episode on DS9 just in blue not red) or the shirt and pants style uniform the real CMO "Bones" McCoy wore... Not between styles of "the Star Trek series of your liking"...
The scene with the rebound of the clones knowledge was great. I like how it makes a mockery out of Naruto's training methods without even acknowledging the Manga/Anime :D
And i'm almost scared how much my disgust for the Malfoys could rise with just some simple accusations and the mention how casually they discuss the nauseating stuff at the dinner table... Isn't there a game for a puppy to play with a big burlap sack, some heavy stones and a deeeeeeep body of water? This family CANNOT be allowed to go on, if these deeds truly were done.
Dumbledore on the other hand just doesn't get it anymore... he was all but helpless against Moldywarts and now he wants to take on the group that has weeded out Tom's ranks like no problem at all? That's not delusional, that's willfully ignoring reality and shouting "lalala" while stuffing your index fingers inside your ears until they meet in the middle! i almost HOPE he will lead a raid against the Marauder-Order. It would only be what he deserves that would come to him... and posteriority might even remember him as somebody sane or useful ;)
| Runecutter chapter 9 . 3/29/2013
you don't PONDER that i might know the name patron for said Mr Stibbons? :D
I don't especially like the whole St Trinian's idea as i feel it's just too flanderized to really work as a believable environment, but of course there's some truth in it's concept like the people forgotten by society and shoved off to a dead end...
Hermione's quest on the other side... Holy Moly that girl has drive and determination for a whole battalion...
| jamuraa chapter 1 . 3/27/2013
ITS A REALLY AWESOME STORY
| Runecutter chapter 5 . 3/26/2013
An almost perfect chapter and i love the idea of reforming the order into an organisation that well... DOES SOMETHING. That's the thing that peeved me enormously with Dumbledore's regency about his "vigilante formation" they were not really good at defending, sucked at spying and even information gathering brought nothing because it all just ended in Dumbledore's desk and there wasn't even a "need to know" system you could recognize from their actions.
But honestly... the thing with the battleships is WAY out of anything realistic and feasible. For one those BUFFs really needed a hell of a lot of crew even when modernized in the eighties and shortly serving in the Gulf... And then they're not miracle weapons but have a range of maybe 60 km (40 miles more or less) which does not really work too well with Great Britain where many targets lie FAR out of that. And i don't think even massive confunding could get their hands on stuff like the Harpoon Cruise missile... or the knowledge and codes to use some of them.
No having ships as mobile "safehouses" is a clever idea, but nothing military... just have James use the Potter wealth to acquire two to five small container ships... not the giants that don't even fit through panama or the Suez canal anymore but ones that are used for short transports around the coastal waters and so on... put a lot of equipment and living containers on them, maybe add a bit of magic for space expansion or better securing the containers used to the deck, set a helicopter platform on top of them and voila... a brilliant base cruising around the island ready to be an emergency portkey target, supply base, hiding place for semilegal stuff and staging area for attacks, maybe even a base for a quick response force. The beauty with this is modularity, very small crew requirements, some of these should need as few as five people to sail around and they're completely inconspicuous not like military vessels like the IOWA class...
And the helicopter may be useful in the distribution of supplies and personnel, extraction of forces in the field and all around fast travel with nonmagical ways (in case apparition, portkeys and Floo are somewhat incapacitated or under observation or they need something muggle for dealing with Muggle companies)
The Malfoy line had me slightly confused, then aggravated and now i'm more or less neutral to the idea of the girls posing as Malfoy daughters and even of Draco's switch against the changeling. The funniest bit was how Rookwood got some results but interpreted them all in as wrong a way as possible...
| Runecutter chapter 2 . 3/26/2013
Ingenious! :D I love the two supertoddlers from hell already and they've yet got to do anything outside their own home... let them start school and it will be creepily superb to watch them wreak havok in the world :D
| Runecutter chapter 1 . 3/26/2013
It was the worst of all times, it was the best of all times :D
Astonishing how much desperation some simple changes to the logic of the story can wreak and i'm not really talking of the self absorbed whining of the wizards left behind by Harry, but him who saw no other way to get his peace and freedom than to end it all and be damned all that stay behind. Whow that was some strong imagery right there.
Luckily Hermione may be one to easily fall into the traps of life (just look how book!Hermione got somehow lovesick for RON of all people *sigh* and before that almost acted as bad as in this story here when she starved Harry's needs for human contact just because the bulimic Santa Clause Cosplayer said so... *grumble*) but she also was able to learn from her failures (except for the Ron one... i'll never give up to hold THAT grudge!) and thus we have a hope for a nice and uplifting story with some nasty surprises for the meddler and the halfblooded maniac...
You've found a wonderful role for Hermione to fit in. Both in this not very advantageous way and the possibilities of the new future with the twin girls!
| Guest chapter 12 . 3/9/2013
Your fic is so humorous, it had me giggling at several different points. And the premise of it is so interesting. Three Hermiones? Oh gosh, I can't wait until they finally meet Harry and all the other Hogwarts students.
Please be alright. I really hope you're ok. I've read your ANs on battling cancer and with your lack of updates on any of your stories (yes, I stalked your profile)... We, readers, are getting worried.
| chain.reader chapter 12 . 3/1/2013
Loved it, hope it continues
| chain.reader chapter 4 . 2/28/2013
roflmao, revenge, served, cold.