|Reviews for Catalysis|
| Chai chapter 10 . 15h ago
What happened? It has been a year already?
This fic is too AWESOME to be dropped! ToT Please update soon!
| VOICEOFREASON chapter 10 . 3/14
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| Obsessive Child chapter 10 . 2/22
Hello, I recently read your story and it was probably my favourite in the FMA fandom until I saw that this was going to be a Roy/Ed pairing. I have nothing against yaoi, but for this story in particular, I feel like that the pairing wouldn't work. And please don't be put off. I'm only commenting because I like this story so much; if I did not, I would just leave it as is.
First is the age difference. I don't particularly like huge age differences, especially since there is a 14 year old one (or perhaps 10 in your case since this is an AU and I saw that number somewhere) between Ed and Roy, but the way this is done in particular is problematic. I used to be quite taken with Tony/Steve in the Avengers series actually, and their age difference is about the same. HOWEVER Tony and Steve in the Avengers are both adults with their own life experiences when they meet, which in turn makes their age difference nearly unnoticeable in comparison to how well they match/clash together. It never occurs to me while reading that 'oh hey Tony's 40 and Steve's 26', and that's what makes it work. On the other hand, most FMA fics will at some point or another remind you that Ed is a kid and Roy is, well, not. If they get together when Ed's past the age of 20, fine, but it always starts when Ed's only 15 or 16 which is definitely NOT okay for someone around 30 to be engaged with. The age difference between Roy and Ed is never really allowed to be forgotten, especially in a story like this where Roy is practically raising Ed so any of Ed's life experiences wouldn't truly be his own (in context).
Which brings me to my second point. Guardianship. Roy is basically Ed's guardian at this point in your story and raising him. My guess is that he's going to continue to raise him. That means a lot of Ed's thoughts and mannerisms are going to be shaped by Roy, which puts Roy in a huge position of power. On the other hand, while Roy is going to be influenced by Ed, everything he does for Ed will be a concession rather than obedience. This puts them on very unequal grounds. It's the perfect setup for a parental relationship, which is why I was so surprised when I saw that this was ultimately going to be some kind of romance. Ed might not put up with Roy's authority all the time, but after practically being raised by him, there's no way he'd be able to actually discard an automatic response to Roy's authority that easily. Any romantic relationship would never be equal, never mind the fact that Roy would have to deal with the feeling of taking advantage of Ed because of their respective positions. I mean, what's the automatic response to a father getting 'together' with a daughter, even if the daughter is adopted? It's not a good one is it?
It is of course, possible to develop a romantic relationship from a parental one. In fact it could be a beautiful story. However, there would be a lot of angst and drama and I am almost certain that it would have to read like a piece of dark literature. The vibe I get from this story however, is far from a dark literary piece. It reads fun and enjoyable and heartwarming. And for that, a parental relationship suits this story better. Of course I don't know where you're planning to take this, but for now, this is how it appears to me.
| Obsessive Child chapter 8 . 2/17
I love parental Roy & Ed fics in general. but this has to be the cutest one I've ever read. I absolutely love it and I thank you for writing this.
| Mello Maddnes chapter 1 . 12/17/2013
I am completely hooked on your attention to detail. Typically if a story doesn't move forward fast enough I quit reading it but you've manage to put a forward movement in the detail. Character thought process is sound. Great books always spell out what the characters are thinking so that they don't lose the reader by looking like they're jumping around. It is super that you're putting so much into the backing of the plot. Trisha's fears are heartbreaking. Even if Edward explained to her outright, I feel that she might have the same feelings.
I've read the explanations you've made about changing when everyone meets and it makes me smile. It reminds me of the DC movie Flash Point where one thing changes that doesn't seem like it would matter but it causes a ripple effect throughout time changing everything.
Reading the earlier chapters you said you were going through med school and that your editor is doing double majors. I hope that is going well for you both. I understand how time consuming both schoolings can be. I await the next installment with much excitement. It being almost a year since the last update on LJ, I feel that y'all might have something big your sleeves.
| Seriyuu chapter 10 . 12/16/2013
so brilliant! I absolutely adore this story! It's very detailed and realistic - your explanations make it seem possible for the series to have flowed in this direction.
please, please, please update soon!
| akitty chapter 10 . 12/15/2013
Hi! I'm just reminding you this story is here (because I like it and it's really good), in the hope that you may update at some point. If it's on hiatus or been abandoned, I apologize for bothering you. Hope you keep writing! :)
| tigerlily101 chapter 10 . 12/12/2013
It's almost 2014; will you be continuing theses chapters?
| Miko Rune chapter 10 . 11/30/2013
Okay I have to say that I have read a lot of Full Metal Alchemist fanfics but this puts every single on of them to shame. This is definitely one of the best fanfics I have read, period. I thought about asking if this plot was going to include be based from the manga or the first version of the anime but in the end I decided it didn't matter because, either way based on what I have read, this is going to be a Great story and I would rather discover the answer from reading your updates anyway. I'm also definitely going to keep an eye on both the live journal site as well as .
| niedosyt chapter 1 . 11/8/2013
and to add on to my previous statement
i hope you guys aren't dead
that would be bad
or that you gave up on this, the fandom, life in general
taht would also be bad
and i know that this is out of my selfish desire for this wonderful, beautiful, amazing, genius fanfic to update
but please please please
don't be dead...
i will spam
i'm serious man
| niedosyt chapter 6 . 11/8/2013
this is beauty in its raw form
i plead you, humble that i may be, to continue
this masterful piece of art that is almost better than the actual series
this sh/t inspires me
| Waitingforagame chapter 10 . 11/7/2013
This is only the best FMA fic ever! Please keep writing! :3
| Ligare chapter 10 . 11/5/2013
The end of 2013 is already in sight, you have an update to write. I'm dying of curiosity here, please tell me you haven't abandoned the project.
| orlha chapter 10 . 11/5/2013
Really good story and really well-written. Hope you'll continue
| Inlay chapter 10 . 10/19/2013
Dude, this is a kick ass story. Are you ever going to update?