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Finnster chapter 7 . 7/22/2009
Liv, this story has been reported for abuse.

It is against the rules of the site to post a "chapter" that is only a message to readers and does not contain story material.

This is unfair to other authors because it bumps your story to the top of the page when you didn't write anything new. We all know that we get the most hits when our stories are at the top and if this weren't against the rules, we would all bump our stories to the top every day and the board would be a mess for readers who just want a new chapter. That's why you can't do this.

Instead, post a message in your profile asking the same question, or PM the readers who reviewed you. They are the only ones who are likely to reply anyway.

It's great that you're writing and we're happy to have you here, but you need to read the terms of use (the rules) for the site before you post here again. We all have to be fair and respectful to one another.
Carriex3 chapter 7 . 7/22/2009
you should write an...wait for it...*looks around excitedly* SVU STORY! lol seriously liv, I know I'm only your sister and I don't have much control over you, *winks* but you could write an AWESOME SVU fanfic. T mean, you know enogh about it from me...
Carriex3 chapter 6 . 6/25/2009
love it liv! please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please pleaseplease please please please please please please please please please please please please please write a sequel! lol

lylas
braceface freak chapter 3 . 6/21/2009
LOL! Jane on fire...I haven't heard that one before...

Anyway I love this, and Carlisle's expression was utterly heartbreaking, I could picture every emotion so clear as day...

Write more soon, and please can we have longer chapters... so more than one next time...pretty, pretty, pretty, pretty please...*flutters eyelashes desperatly*
notwisefox chapter 3 . 6/20/2009
Esme can't die! Though it is very sweet of her to offer to take Edward's place. But, still, she can't die!

I love this. It's an interesting twist on Breaking Dawn.

Conitnue please!

Rowan Rawr. XX
edwardplusbella620 chapter 3 . 6/20/2009
oh no! not esme! i vote no one dies, unless its the volturi. /
XxStitchedxHeartxX chapter 3 . 6/20/2009
1) I don't think this chapter was too short, but it could have been a teensey bit longer.

2) The pieces of the vampire repair themselves. If you remember, in Eclipse, the vampire boy Riley (the one that Victoria changed) had gotten his hand ripped off by Seth. Bella's point of view stated that the hand was crawling back to its body. If the pieces are set on fire, though, then the vampire cannot be repaired (bahaha, let's do this to Jane!)

3) I love this story. I haven't read an Esme-dying fic before, and you're doing beautifully. :) or should the :) be :( since Esme's going to die? Hmm...

Anyways...please update soon. I'll be holding my breath, and if you take too long, you'll be a murderer. Lol. Just kidding. But really...update soon. :)
ES3 chapter 3 . 6/20/2009
The action is good!

In response to your request for feedback in the author's notes... yes I do think your chapters are still too short. The QUALITY is good, but I think you are taking what could be one well-rounded chapter and splitting it up into 4 parts. I think your readers would find your story more satisfying if the chapters had more length and meat in them. One thing you might try is to just keep writing and writing on the story until you get to at least a thousand words. I don't think that it's that you can't write a thousand words... I think you're just so eager to post quickly that you post too soon before you're finished.

Best of luck, I thought the plot was an interesting twist!
Carriex3 chapter 3 . 6/20/2009
love it liv! please add more soon!
XxStitchedxHeartxX chapter 2 . 6/18/2009
THIS IS REALLY GOOD! KEEP IT UP!
ES3 chapter 2 . 6/17/2009
Good, lots of great action. Maybe try to make the chapters a little longer before you post again. They're less than 400 words each and a big chunk of that is author notes. What you have is good, just try to get into things more before calling it a finished chapter.

Keep writing!
braceface freak chapter 2 . 6/17/2009
AH! Don't kill Ed! UPDATE SOON!
Carriex3 chapter 2 . 6/17/2009
luv it liv! lol but darn you for leaving another cliffie! (

lylas
braceface freak chapter 1 . 6/16/2009
Oh...a longer chapter next time please!

UPDATE SOON! I'm intrigued...
EsmeScullyStarling chapter 1 . 6/16/2009
Please continue! I'm incredibly intrigued :)
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