amanda.mars.42 chapter 16 . 9/15/2014
aaaaaaaaaaaa my god that was great you awesome on the i love it! T-T so good keep writing!
Guest chapter 16 . 11/7/2012
Dude that's deep
Josef Engle chapter 16 . 5/15/2011

just wanted to give you some encouragement for such a wonderful story... I have read the origonal scripting for the pred/alien races and your works are very close to what the originallly wrote. I would like to point out that there are some MINOR place of grammar or incorrect word usage, but that is really a minor thing you can always get your editor to proofread stuff for grammar for you, Mine does ALL the time Lol... don't let anyone tell you different you have great talent for this style of writting you just need to develope your style a little more. alos is ab excellent source to review your work, they publish mostly sci fi and fantasy. so have strength and faith and keep on pokin those keys ok?

Best wishes

hotbritt5000 chapter 16 . 9/20/2009
:) What a wonderful story, you can tell as the story progressed you matured in your writing even in that short period. Fantastic job with this. :D:D ENJOYED LOTS!

And P.s Continue or make sequel hehe. It would be awesome. You don't have to if you don't want to but yeah :D
Wicked Falcon chapter 16 . 9/19/2009
Thoroughly enjoyed Taron's and Kara's story. Wouldn't mind seeing what happens next in the next phrase of their life.
sorrelshift chapter 14 . 8/21/2009
Please tell me thats not the end! PLEASE! Is it please let there be more i love this story and i think u sound continue it i dont now maybe something comes between there love and they have to fight it or they find each other and gang up and have a new adventures i dont care give them a kid OH! that would be perfect a alien hybrid Yes please do it take the idea i am begging u i am obviously bored out of my mind! well please think about okay i think this is just such a good story and i dont want to see it end so short PLEASE! X3
sorrelshift chapter 1 . 8/21/2009
blazer chapter 13 . 8/10/2009
very, very nice. you seem to always leave your chapters in a sort of cliff hanger way, it is most interesting.

please update soon.

hope Kara and Taron stay friendly.
Wicked Falcon chapter 13 . 8/7/2009
Hm, interesting to see what happens next. it is proving to be an interesting prospect of Taron turning on Kara. But the feelings may yet play another factor. Good chapter. Now onto the darker side of things. I noticed that when you are empatising something you will use double quotation marks ("") when you only need to use single (''). It can get confusing as a speech could come a couple of words afters. Just a few gammer errors like that. other then that, an enjoyable read. Keep up the good work! ;D
Wicked Falcon chapter 12 . 8/4/2009
I wonder how he would deal with her people when they get there? Wonder what the humans are going to do them? it's proving to be an interesting story with the twists and turns it takes. Keep up the good work! ;D
Wicked Falcon chapter 11 . 7/26/2009
Well that is proving to be interesting. Can not wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work! ;D
blazer chapter 10 . 7/21/2009
This story is really interesting, i didnt think chapter 1 and 2 where told very well but reading further into your story i can see your getting much better. you have agood imagination. please update soon as you have me hooked.

Wicked Falcon chapter 10 . 7/19/2009
Yay. I knew it would be cool. Another great chapter. And very little spelling typos as well. Well done. Can not wait to see what happens next. My nerves are tingling just with the excitement. Keep up the good work! ;D
Wicked Falcon chapter 9 . 7/19/2009
Now that is unfair. That was a good fight. Can not wait to see what the metal thing is used for. Sounds very interesting. Now onto the darker side of things. Watch the spelling. Spell check is wonderful at times but can be a bane at others. Took me a while to work some of the words like tack tic and baw. Other then that. I enjoyed that chapter. Please update soon. Keep up the good work! ;D
Wicked Falcon chapter 8 . 7/7/2009
Very interesting. Love how you made a quiet understanding between them. Can not wait to see the fight scene next chapter. Keep up the good work! ;D
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