|Reviews for The Search for Life and Death|
| ElfIcarii chapter 27 . 9/3
I was looking forward to reading Neville's journey again! Aaaand...is it me, or did you change the ending? I swear I remember him taking it in the end last time...
Other than that, not much to say this time, since I'm fairly sure I said what I had to say the first time these scenes were up...
| scrappy8 chapter 27 . 9/3
great chapter looking forward to the next one
| scrappy8 chapter 26 . 8/24
| Son of Whitebeard chapter 26 . 8/24
nice seeing kingsley and amelia
| fons19 chapter 26 . 8/24
harry should be able to play and he needs to work harder in order to bond with his cat and once that happens then maybe he can use her a little for detection of the bludgers sothat he can get to the snitch
| Midoriryu chapter 26 . 8/24
If I were to comment on the story as a whole, I would say that it seems to be going really slow. However that could be an artifact of the pacing of chapter posting, and not the pace of the story itself. That is not a complaint, merely an observation.
Was the baka neko written that way deliberately as a joke, or a typo of bakeneko? If the former, that's absolutely hilarious, if the later you might want to fix it.
I'm curious as to what factors are inhibiting Harry from bonding with the cat. Are factors such as age, state of mind, and knowledge involved.
Also was Zinnia's comment about them developing psychic abilities off hand, or deliberate either inside or outside the fourth wall so to speak?
| ElfIcarii chapter 26 . 8/23
Conjured up a record player? Wouldn't the magic mess up the technology? THough perhaps that's why it's a record player and not a CD player or mp3 player...indications in the books seemed to be that the less advanced the technology the more cooperative it was...Hmm. Come to think of it, they use radios, don't they...I wonder where the line is drawn?
Ah. Then you explain how it's possible a couple paragraphs later. Hmm. How much of an understanding is necessary? Would a wizard need effectively a degree in electrical engineering to conjure, say, a cellphone? Clearly there is a point of diminishing returns where it is easier to either invent a spell to do the same thing as the technology, or buy the muggle version and try to juryrig a way to get it to work in magical areas...
Sounds like it's time for Sirius to take up painting XD Slapping gobs of acrylic on a wall should help let loose some of that nervous energy. I can just see, Lupin gets back, opens the door and is seized and shaken and informed in desperate tones that if he EVER leaves Sirius alone and locked up in the silence for that long again, he's liable to return to either a destroyed building or a corpse.
Sorry, this is a short review for me, but I admit all the fires have me a little smoke-addled. Thinking is difficult. Which will be interesting with classes starting up tomorrow...anyway, with regard to what we'd like to see more of, the instant response is EVERYTHING! But of course you know that XD But the problem is, while I'd love to see more of your treatment of 'minor' characters (like Amelia and Kingsley), I don't want the main characters to get neglected either (you do fascinating things with their minds too!), so it really does translate to 'everything'. You are going to have a time and a half finding a way to end this story (I include any sequels in 'this story', just as Wheel of Time is all one story but many books) that is a good ending and still manages to not leave me going 'more more more got to find more how do you find a fanfic of a fanfic aaahhhhhhh!'. So yeah. Just keep writing it I guess, and don't get tired of it halfway through like Rowling? XD
On a side note, I have been having a frustrating problem, in that I was hoping to offer to do you a 'book cover' for this fanfic as practice and/or an example sometime soon...but you can't get the feel of the cover right if you haven't read the whole book (too many things that could be misinterpreted). Sooo I just thought I'd mention these plans of mine in case it might act as incentive/inspiration for you to write faster! XD
| ElfIcarii chapter 25 . 7/5
Prepare for a long rambling review of doom. I am half asleep, but cannot leave this until morning, and you know how my thoughts leap on tidbits in your writing and charge down rabbit-trails when I'm tired. So fair warning.
Hmm. The holding-back thing is actually not uncommon. Not always because of parents - growing up, I knew any number of kids who noticed that the kids who excelled at studies, or who admitted to enjoying reading, tended to be frowned upon by their peers, so pretended to be dumber or to 'not care' in order to get respect. For the parents angle, one kid in my class in elementary school had a father who quite literally hated smart people - and the kid was bright. So he hid it by pretending he couldn't read. I doubt most of my classmates of the time know he was pretending even now; I know because my mom was volunteering to help the 'slower' kids with their reading, and she managed to pry him out of that with a book that aligned with his interests. He still hid it, still got poor grades even in HS, but after that he was different - or seemed so to me, anyway. He seemed to have a look like he was just waiting for his chance. I suspect he took off 'for the stars' as soon as he moved out of his parents' house.
Hmm. I swear, in some ways being socially oblivious can be a boon. I didn't notice the other kids' reactions growing up, so didn't stop trying to make friends, and managed as a result to find at least one person in each period of my life who was intrigued by my ideas and fascination with the world. It sounds like Hermione wasn't that lucky. Heh. Caused me other problems later though. Since I couldn't pick up on social context well from those around me, I tried to learn it from the interactions of characters in books (because a lot of them EXPLAIN the thoughts behind the actions/words), and since many of these were fantasy books, my dad thought I was thinking that the books were real because I kept referencing them...and banned me from reading them completely one summer as a last ditch effort before sending me to a shrink (which he never had to because I was able to explain what was really going on eventually. Once I figured out the ban wasn't just because he disapproves of the genre - which he does.) I DO value my few friends every bit as highly as Hermione though, especially since, as an adult, I figured out just how lucky I am to have them.
...Wow. I warned for rambling, and here I've barely started reading the chapter and see how far down the rabbit trail my mind went...I blame your writing of Hermione. You're making her sound too much like me in this chapter. It's hauling up memories.
Of course they don't want to see it. No-one ever does. Very few people are willing to acknowledge seeing such things because if they do they have to acknowledge they should have done something and that makes them feel guilty and cowardly. There are some who don't know the signs, but more who refuse to see them, and some who see them but don't know how to help because of the horror stories of people trying to help a kid in an abusive situation and just making it worse.
I wonder sometimes how many people realize that most of the traits associated with a good leader and 'hero' are usually ones that come from surviving and pulling through abusive or otherwise traumatic circumstances...
I love that you threw in the little details of how their social routine and habits have changed and adapted. It helps complete the picture.
I also love that you stuck with Rowling's tradition of indicative naming schemes for minor character witches and wizards...
I like the realism that there wouldn't be just one sensationalist reporter in the wizarding world.
Multiple thoughts and questions popped up with the time turner. Waiting to end of scene to comment because they might be resolved...
Hermes. Is it a coincidence that they're names for the greek messenger god? Who is also god of thieves etc? I rather doubt it. You don't do coincidence. Your story is far too fun to metagame, all these little hints you drop...And of course since at the moment I am reading the Percy Jackson books (at the insistence of several people who know me), I might be mixing up actual mythology with what is stated there, especially this late/early, so refraining on further speculation on that atm.
Mercury too? Oh my. Definitely no coincidence. Though I suppose they could be code names, relating to their duties.
XD Clearly, SOMEONE was interfering with her life to keep the timeturner in her hands. THe same mysterious nameless someone sticking their fingers and advice in through this whole story, perhaps?
Hmm. I wonder if the magic of the timeturner is in itself addictive, and that is part of the reason for the restrictions...Unfortunately, given that it is Hermione using it, and she is likely to find the learning alone plenty addictive, it's hard to tell.
She's not in Ravenclaw for much the reason Harry's not in Slytherin, I expect.
I like how she always does the distasteful things first and THEN the fun stuff as 'future Hermione'. Good self discipline. A valuable skill.
Easy to doubt your own memory later, when you have nothing to verify it.
Hmm. It seems the timeturner focus is over for now, and one of my questions wasn't answered after all, unless it was mentioned previously in another chapter and I've forgotten, but I don't think that's the case. Is there something in the timeturner magic to prevent aging of the wearer while it's in use? While it wouldn't be as noticeable in someone in their 20's or 30's, Hermione is a teenager. From the sound of it she's done at LEAST several months extra time with all the back-and-forth, possibly a year or two, and that would have her growing up significantly faster than her peers - but no-one's mentioned it. So...is everyone just oblivious, or does the timeturner prevent excess aging due to the longer period of subjective time (making the user effectively immortal, but limited in how far forward in time they can go, up to their death), or was this just something you didn't think about? XD
Just like Hermione, not accepting 'no' for an answer. I wonder what all she'll try to force the ability to remember...
'Unexpected side effects' indeed. Poor Lupin.
Erm. That's...a lot of text. *eyes scroll bar* Hope you don't mind this rambling essay of a review...
| ElfIcarii chapter 24 . 5/26
You already got my 'Awww, squee!' reaction to the first section last night XD
I am amused at the paintings XD It sounds like they think of the lives of the students much the way teenagers think of tv shows such as Friends.
Slight problem with the house-elves methods - to have everything ready at the same time, the breads would have had to be started hours before. Unless they are using magic to massively rush rising, kneading, and baking times? In which case I'd find description of how they do so fascinating XD But that's just me.
I'm still curious about pumpkin juice. I've never actually encountered it,m and seems to me to be one of those things that could be really good or truly awful...and I still have no idea whether it's in the books because it's as common in Britain as apple juice is here, or if it's supposed to be another of those minor details unique to the wizarding world.
I am wondering if the song is related to the Tree of Bonds. Especially as said tree could readily, in your version of this world, be the basis of the house elves' need for a wizard or witch to care for.
Hmm. The lake sounds almost as if it consists of mercury.
*gigglefit* Yep. They're teenagers.
'reduced' to acing their exams...yep, you definitely have a handle on their characters.
I ...am honestly not sure what to make of Zabini. Nott is clearly just the usual sort of arrogant spoiled brat, but we lack information on Zabini. The 'bored expression' indicates he wasn't emotionally involved in what he did to Nott, which might indicate sociopathy or psychopathy, or might indicate that he thinks of Nott as less than human and believes he is only doing what is necessary to keep him reasonably under control. In war, warriors often think of their opponents as inhuman, one way or another - it's how otherwise good people manage to do such terrible things (not referring to simple killing; killing is sometimes purely necessary. I'm referring to the sort of thing that tends to be referred to as 'war crimes'.). So it's POSSIBLE Zabini has dehumanized Death Eaters in his own mind to the point where he truly does not think of this as anything more than a means of control. Especially as you are not prone to one-dimensional characters or easy explanations. It is also possible something similar happened to him at some point and he's 'passing it on', so to speak.
Or he could just be evil and I'm overthinking it.
One wonders what impact this will have on Nott. He will surely change in SOME fashion - such experiences are not ignorable - but he could polarize in so many different directions as a result it's hard to predict. He SEEMS to be trending towards the further-impetus-towards-villainy end, but first reactions often aren't indicative of long-term impact.
| ElfIcarii chapter 23 . 5/24
I like how you slipped that 'sometimes matched' in there. I think it's a common assumption in the fandom that they'll always match.
Ok, clearly I am going to be watching for further mentions of the Three. That's the sort of thing that isn't mentioned even in passing unless it has a later tie-in. Yes, I'm metagaming, so to speak - the result of reading this as a break from business writing homework XD
...in a dream? I wonder how the effects will combine, given the current situation...
No-one who has gone through a personality-altering life experience would say Draco is out of character. I have gone through several.
I like Ron starting nighttime ramblings. It adds to his character, and will provide him with knowledge to provide the others with later that they lack - something that has tended to be lacking from Ron's character in the books and most fics.
I would point out that if she truly believed what she was saying, Umbridge would refer to the first war with Voldemort just as 'the war' - there is no need to label it first if there is only one. Just as people didn't call World War 1 'World War 1' or 'the first world war' until WW2 - they just called it 'the war' or 'the world war'. The same applies if she is at all capable of PRETENDING this is what she believes. Unless it is a slip you put in there intentionally, to indicate her true mindset?
As always, very much twitchily waiting for the next chapter!
| lesa.blazer chapter 23 . 5/22
| lesa.blazer chapter 22 . 5/19
| Nana chapter 3 . 5/10
Good story but could you only do it in
| ElfIcarii chapter 22 . 4/19
Poor Sirius. Waiting is never easy, especially when you have a mind prone to negative thought circles.
Hmm. It sounds like you are familiar with how emotional burnout works. Do you know someone who works in such a job?
If I haven't mentioned it before, I LOVE how you turn minor characters and neglected, unlikeable ones into PEOPLE. It really helps bring your work to life, and is a great part of why I like your writing.
Ah...the chapter cuts off in midsentence? I'm guessing that was a glitch in upload...
Get better soon! We want you writing mroe glorious chapters for us to read XD
| MayaHikari chapter 22 . 4/19
It seems like this chapter was cut off