|Reviews for Fulfilled Reason|
| Saskie chapter 1 . 6/29/2012
This is so sweet! First time reading an Azure Kite x Aura and I am hooked! I love how Azure Kite is completely devoted to Aura. I think Aura still has some attachment with the original Kite that she can't seem to let go. That would make an awesome spin off ;). Thank you so much for posting this. It was a pleasure to read (L)!
| Toaneo07 Ver2.0 chapter 1 . 3/15/2012
coool !Azure kite ,is great!
| zecross chapter 1 . 10/13/2010
oh good story, even though i prefer aura and kite, but this is good in its own way
so its complete right? its so great how the azure kite express his feeling
anyway its great
| Shigeki-Hizashi chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
| Ganheim chapter 1 . 10/24/2009
Since he wasn’t
[isn’t, be careful to maintain verb tense]
does this, whenever
mind and body, always
time on his coffin
[in, although it wasn’t really a coffin as much as some regeneration/protection mechanism]
with his right knees
[He has more than one right knee?]
kicked the ball swiftly without thinking
[‘swiftly’ seems unnecessary]
the only thing he could say properly was Data Drain after all.
[Odd that he’d have this, he never said anything when he DD’d Haseo or when he tried to DD Ovan any one of those numerous times]
is it okay if I referred to you in a different name?”
[She can’t look it up in some manner? I’d think she could, particularly as she’s an AI. Even Haseo could see ‘Azure Kite’ when he fought against him in the Outlands at the end of Vol 1. Some have argued this was just a gameplay element for players, but since Haseo refers to ‘Kite’ later I conclude that he saw it and assumed it was just an Alias]
“Then I’ll call you…Blue Shugo.”
then let’s the ball
picked up the ball and looks
[Maintain the same verb tense. Most of your story is in present-progressive tense, so ‘picks’ should go there]
…soccer was it?”
[That or futbol]
fond at the soccer
let the ball afloat with her two feet’s
[feet. I’m not sure if ‘afloat’ is the right word]
Azure Knights attention
sound to be a questioned
[sound like a questioned]
then lay’s on the
Do you want to walk me home?” she asked.
[They can’t both warp, like the Azure Knights can?]
he always get mommies
Azure Kite lay’s
what she requests,
[Since this is a recollection of a past event, it should be ‘requested’]
he just maked her sad
…in other sense,
[in other words?]
Azure Kite wants’
but him and me
[he and I]
even if he has fulfilled his reasons...’
[A knight’s duty of guarding his liege is never over. As long as either is alive, that purpose remains]
you ask me too.’
when they were out of breath.
[Though…both being bots…technically they don’t breathe]
Well...that was a pairing I never thought about.
| Avedici chapter 1 . 6/21/2009
This is so sweet. Azure Kite x Aura rules
Is there any continuation?
I'm waiting for it.