|Reviews for Indiana Jones and the Golden Cross of Zampur'|
| Dood chapter 15 . 12/14/2010
This is a really good story. Chaptr 13 was really good. Very good storyline.
| iccle fairy chapter 15 . 12/5/2010
| iccle fairy chapter 14 . 11/20/2010
| W. Stock chapter 1 . 8/30/2010
This is a great story!
| Liliththestormgoddess chapter 9 . 7/6/2009
Great chapter! Looking forward to more.
| Hades Critic chapter 6 . 7/2/2009
8/10 - A very engaging read so far! I have a few small problems though.
You ran away with way too much action to start the story off, this would turn away most readers with thinking that's all they'll read. I call it, pushing too much too soon.
Escaping Budapest was too strung out and exhausting. You could've chopped it down a little.
The dialogue could use work in chapter 5 and 6. The first four chapters almost seem written by a different author. But the odd thing is, I liked 5 and 6 more than the other chapters because you injected a great back story.
The final nitpick, somebody mentioned that your Marcus Brody is OC, I agree to a point. You have the goofyness down, it seems. But certain things he says doesn't strike me as something Marcus Brody would say.
Way too long review.
| PhantomProducer chapter 6 . 7/1/2009
I like this! Not much else to say except I look forward to the next installment. :)
| jake2000 chapter 6 . 7/1/2009
This is a great story, your Indy Jones is spot on but your Marcus is a bit OC, you need to work on that.
| Liliththestormgoddess chapter 6 . 7/1/2009
Wow, great chapter! I really like this, please continue soon! :)
| Liliththestormgoddess chapter 3 . 6/27/2009
Nice! Action, deception...great. Continue soon!
| Liliththestormgoddess chapter 2 . 6/25/2009
Great! I like this!
| BadWolf85 chapter 2 . 6/24/2009
Good chapter! :) btw... "his ultra-white smile" lol xD I can't wait for the next one, update soon!
| Carly chapter 1 . 6/21/2009
Good start! I look forward to next chapter.