Reviews for PITCH
imsosrsly chapter 32 . 8/11
So I just spent the better part of this past month reading both S&M and PITCH, and I absolutely could not be happier with them. I plan on giving S&M its own separate review over on AO3, so we'll keep this one mostly focused on the story at hand!
I don't even know where to begin really... Well, okay I could start by saying I read S&M first, and when I caught up to the most recently posted chapter I wasn't sated with your work. I saw somewhere that you had shared a link to your other fics, and this one sounded very close to what I wanted to read. What a wonderful ride this has been! From starting out following L's life and his blossoming social skills, to him meeting Raito and said boy's questionable sanity, to how you incorporated Raito's parents and Misa and Watari and Aiber. Everything was so satisfying! Especially the porn, of course, but the plot and the characterizations too! My favorite thing you did was incorporate little mannerisms L and Raito have canonically into this alternative world without the death note. It made their interactions completely believable and endlessly entertaining. And the ending was good! I found myself wanting to continue to get to know them and how they might further change each other through a relationship, but that means that you did a wonderful job of developing their meeting and initial interactions. (as well as all of their sex. like omg. So good dude. SO good.) Thank you so much for leaving this story posted after all these years! I enjoyed it a lot. It's neat to see how you've improved too, since S&M has a hold on my attention with an iron grip and even your OC's are phenomenally well written. Looking forward to reading more from you! :)
doubledgedtruth chapter 2 . 7/7
I think Ls drunk thoughts in this are fun and whimsical. I also never noticed before that his server was Wedy I always just assumed that Lights blonde assistant was Wedy.

I think this story moves at a very good pace, pacing and flow are something you are very good at.

I do feel a little bad for W in this because hes being so left out. also i kind of want L to just break the whole avoiding sweets thing on occassion; its okay for a treat once in a while, right?
doubledgedtruth chapter 1 . 7/7
This L and I are a lot alike; sheltered control freaks who value thoughts above all else. I get him. It just occurred to me reading this again that Light totally took his pen to see how he would react. Not just the social aspect of reacting but also the whole " what is the man that does nothing but doodle in the bar going to do when i take his pen?"

Conniving even from the start.
cocoloco chapter 32 . 4/27
Me encantó esta historia. Pero ¿dónde está la nueva que mencionaste en tu perfil? ¿Cuándo podemos esperar leerlo? Mantener el buen trabajo!
kelleyj17 chapter 32 . 4/19
You know, I'm really starting to regret finding this site. I need to work and I need sleep, and I don't seem to be doing enough of either since I started reading your stories. I can't put it down!

I liked this one, and I really loved aBfSF. I would have reviewed the chapters individually, but I see that you wrote these years ago and probably don't need anything that detailed. I had a harder time seeing Light in Raito in this one, although that might be partly the name that threw me off so much.

Anyway, you have an amazing talent for writing. The XXX scenes made me really... squirmy... but even just the casual prose was so intense that I couldn't wait to find out what happened. (3:30 AM? Really?...Just one more chapter.)

Btw, I actually laughed out loud when you said you made Sims for L and Light. I used to post stories on Sims web sites too, although I'm nowhere near as good as you are. Once upon a time I had wanted to be a writer, but practicality pushed me into software development instead. So please keep writing! I'm considering reading your Supernatural stories, but I'm not sure I could swallow Dean/Sam as easily as Light/L. Either way, I'll be following for sure.
AngelesPG chapter 32 . 3/9
Me encanto aunque fue largo y con muchos problemas hasta innecesarios pero me encanto gracias por compartirla y espero que en el futuro escribas de este par perosin tantos terceros
NigerianGeek chapter 32 . 12/4/2016
Ah I also forgot about how happy the last chapters make me. For one thing, Ratio is less crazy and I actually have hope for their relationship working out in the long-term. I kinda wished we could've seen a Misa and Ratio or Chairman and Ratio confrontation. Would've been hilarious.
NigerianGeek chapter 22 . 12/3/2016
Rereading this story can be so difficult. I always forget that for every step they take forward, they always ALWAYS take at least 10 back.
Phantomhive chapter 7 . 10/23/2016
This was too cute for me to handle. I think I about exploded when Light calmly told his parents that he was sleeping with L. Also the sudden change in his father was QUITE interesting. I'm looking forward to learning more of this mysterious Light Yagami.
Phantomhive chapter 6 . 10/23/2016
Another lovely chapter, can't wait to read the next one.

Also I'm personally hoping for Watari to have a chat with L soon. I've read many L/Light fanfic and I must say I love every time the author has Wartari talk to L about his relations. :3 I love Watari and his fatherly relationship with L.
Phantomhive chapter 5 . 10/23/2016
...

HOOOTT

intense fangirl squealing

XD I feel ashamed for reading these stories and enjoying them so.

The image of L walking into the restaurant soaking wet brought a smile to my lips. And I can't help but laugh how in one chapter he can go from hating him, to going to his house and letting Light screw him.

Must. Read. More.
Phantomhive chapter 4 . 10/23/2016
...should I be happy or upset?

Yes, my dear little love birds kissed, but Light possibly screw their chances (well at least for awhile...I mean you wouldn't make this just to not have them get together...right?). Why much in every fanfic I read of these two one is cold and distant, unwilling to show emotion, leading the other to think they are a heartless bastard?

I loved you other fic, Psych, but I'm loving this one a hell of a lot more. I'm quite sure I'm going to be spending the next few days, (and restless nights) reading this to the end.

I love you writing style, it's so intellectual and beautifully worded. I love how you switch between them and show how conflicted they both are. I can't write anymore, I want to see what happens next! Though I'm seriously honestly hoping L will get some advice from Watari or his lovely lady friend.
Phantomhive chapter 3 . 10/23/2016
Hedgehog...that, my dear, was brilliant. I am still snickering over that comment, earning an evil look from my cat as I do so.

Also, I'm fond of Celia already, making L blush like that, hope to see more of her. When L started to describe Light as the "woman" to her it made me grin.

Lastly, the whole conversation with Light had my inner fangirl squealing. I could lie and say I'm not reading this for Light/L smut, but of course you would know it's a lie. I was partially screaming "KISS, KISS YOU BASTARDS" as they talked.

It's taking all my willpower to stop long enough to write a review before going to the next chapter. Maybe I should stop them, but of course I won't. As a fellow writer (though I'm horrible next to you) I know how important reviews are, I'm only sorry I can't give better ones. But honestly I see nothing that needs to be fixed; also seeing as this is already completed and favorited by many, my reviews wouldn't matter huh?

ANYWAY...moving on now.
Phantomhive chapter 2 . 10/23/2016
Thankfully, unlike MINE, the pen was returned. (Mostly)

claps

Wonderful so far, I'm thoroughly enjoying how you show both L and Light. They are in character as they are in both the anime and manga, yet you manage to add your own unique twist to them

Also I must say how Light is toying with L is quite adorable and I can't wait for more.
Phantomhive chapter 1 . 10/23/2016
I've started to read this story after I read so many reviews for it in your other story, Pysch. Let me say I see why it was so highly reviewed just by this chapter. I predicted that I will thoroughly enjoy this and your other Death Note fanfic.

Also the pen thing, adorable how upset L got over his stolen pen, but I've been in the exact same situation before. Hopefully I'll see L get it back while I was forced to watch the thief use it everyday for the rest of the school year.
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