|Reviews for PITCH|
| Crazy reviewer chapter 20 . 6/28/2014
I really hate raito..ya know...The entire time i felt like he was torturing L...Forget the physical reactions... they are natural...but other than that, i can't help but say that L was being taken advantage of...raito kinda physically blackmailed him to keep him as his pet...That's disgusting... I really really hate raito...HE is disgusting...
| Teacuppy chapter 1 . 4/8/2014
I felt like writing all this... sorry for lenght...
I also wanted to say that even though that this L is not entirely IC (as the real one from Anime/Manga), it is totally understandable, cuz in Anime he is world famous and acknowledged detective (top 3 detectives in fact) who has a lot of influence and money more than he can spent... and he is more CUNNING and manipulative and more confident in himself and he wouldn't fit perfectly in this story as your L Lawliet fits in this, and I like him more here cuz he is actually human here :-)
(I kind of wanted/expected more in the epilogue part of the story, some sort of better wrapped up conclusion but its ok :-))
Also in other ff stories I've read, in most of them L is the dominent one (weather or not experienced previously) and he fits wherever Light is his 'innocent' self, it comes naturally, and I couldn't imagine him as submissive one, but here it is just perfect and believable and I liked it very much even though I personally prefer the other way around...
But if I consider only original Anime/Manga series - (excluding the fact that this would never happen cuz neither of them appeared to be overly interested in 'romantic' attachments - AKA asexuals) - the most likely scenario is that neither of them would be Seme/Uke, either they would both fight for it all the time or switched turns... Fic POISON APPLE pretty much describes their possible relationship the best, I recommend this for everyone to read...
All this ofcourse is only my opinion, I love this DN pairing the most,
they just seem so perfect for each other, it's shame that they meet under 'MORTAL ENEMIES' circumstances in original story... :-(
Again, thank you for your story, your L is perfect for this, and Light would most likely turned out to be just like that without the DEATH NOTE influence.
At last that would be all, sorry for another unnecessary long and not entirely related to your story review. :-)
( You will be my inspiration, one of my fav authors to look upon when I finally write my own ff stories which I plan to do as soon as I finish with many exams...even though I don't speak English quite so good... )
_ bye for now, until I read and review another of your stories _
| Teacuppy chapter 32 . 4/7/2014
First, thank you for an amazing story, thank you for completing it, at last I found one that is both brilliantly written and actually completed :-) Amazing characterisation, amazingly described such powerful, obsessive, passionate, unique relationship, connection, and most importantly development - evolution of it. I wonder if you have some knowledge in psychology cuz you managed to perfectly capture their states of mind abd help us understand through what are they going to, you are really skilled, very talented indeed :-)
you are certainly one of my favorite authors here, all the best :-) (sorry for any mistake, english is not my first language)
| Fallingthroughthefolds chapter 24 . 3/25/2014
I hated Misa enough when I watched the show, but now its like
person:"...Minced and Puree..."
Me: "I HATE THAT WHINY LITTLE BRAT!"
| Fallingthroughthefolds chapter 5 . 3/20/2014
This is one of the best stories I've ever read I can't believe how well written the characters are
| SynneFox chapter 32 . 2/19/2014
Okay, so I have decided to reread your work, but you deserve a nice big review BEFORE I reread. You, my friend, have supreme, boss-like skill when it comes to writing. You have, hands down, the best group of fictions in this entire fandom. I am always excited to simply reread your work. It's intelligent, evocative, circular, sexy, realistic, and gut-wrenching. I just want more and more and more. I love your L. He's so human, and machine. He tries so much to stay in control and has no idea of his own power against Light. I love your Light. He isn't all-powerful like a lot of other, less mature writing. He's super flawed, but has earnest tendencies hidden under all his selfishness and deviousness and possessiveness. Ahh, his possessiveness. I absolutely LOVE how possessive he is of L (I have real-life issues). I was actually rooting for him to chase L, capture and corner him like something from NatGeo, at the same time I'm rooting for L to run faster, if for nothing else but good sport. You see what your writing is doing to me? Exacerbating my issues; you my friend have talent. Never stop writing.
| Guest chapter 17 . 2/18/2014
Awesome Chapter I love this so far
| DarkSapphireXx chapter 32 . 2/5/2014
aw so sweet :) I really enjoyed this story! it was well written and felt like everyone was in character too which i really liked! Somewhat of a bittersweet ending but understandable since the loose ends would take time to realistically tie up.
| Fan girl chapter 32 . 2/3/2014
Omg, I really don't know how to express myself here... I mean, I just finished this fic and the number of feels I got from this! You have no idea how the characters emotions brought anxiety and I really wanted their relationship to work but I felt bad for L due to Raito's awful personality. He is surely a psychopath or maybe sociopath, I'm not sure, in this fic. Anyway, good job with the development of the characters. Raito improved a lot, though I would like to have seen him improve even more. Great story, very challenging and well written.
| BuBuBlue2 chapter 1 . 12/22/2013
Oh my! This is definitely one of my favourite stories on FF! I finished it in 4 days and omg I absolutely love it. I love the fact that they both seem to be changing to accommodate each other. I love happy endings and this ending makes my heart feel as light as air!
Sorry for posting this random rambling review, but I just wanted to write something to tell you how amazing this story is!
| Rei chapter 32 . 11/5/2013
Whooo! I finish and it took like a month or so xD oh god I wish school didn't take up most of my time oh well. Still man I loved it :D one of the best death note stories I read!
| Rei chapter 31 . 11/5/2013
Aww Nevermind about me getting mad at L! He was awesome! :) lol tops again nice and how cute Celia was even if Light was acting
| Rei chapter 30 . 11/3/2013
L...what the fuck man! Earlier everything was cute you always get like this -.- I'm really loving Celia! I can't believe I'm almost done!
| Rei chapter 29 . 11/3/2013
Lol can't believe we got a Celia and Watori POV near the end! Awesome chapter xD I swear Light and L have the best conversations and just now seeing L interact and be more animate almost makes it like it's not the same L!
| Rei chapter 28 . 10/30/2013
Forever to finally agree to get back together! Doesn't mean I enjoyed it! :) glad they are back but ugh I guess L is right about Light at least emailing Misa to let her know what's up.