|Reviews for Bright White Walls|
| Jane the Unknowing chapter 1 . 8/16/2011
I didn't know Sonic's birthday was only 8 days away from mine... But what I think Eggman doesnt get, is that suicide, is loosing. He may not have realized it, but he lost in the end...
| Speedy1236 chapter 1 . 11/19/2010
Everybody's dead now...
I've always wondered how Eggman can so completely ignore his constant losing. Years of futile efforts gotta be frustrating.
You chose quite an approriate robot to talk to him. How was that in Sonic Unleashed? 'Even the most pathetic loser in all the world'? Ergo's bluntly honest. Too honest, maybe ;)
Super Smash Bros. reference? ... If it's not the fact one of the only proper ways to get a draw in SSB is to take that thermal bomb when you and the other person are already badly damaged and blow both of you up, I don't know. And it doesn't always work, sometimes one of you will be too close to the edge of the screen and die a second earlier and the draw won't be a draw anyway... I'll have to live without that cookie I think :)
| ADarknessInHeaven chapter 1 . 7/5/2009
I think I have the reference (Huge Smash fan, here...) It's either 'forcing a draw': In Smash, the only way to get a draw is to kill each other at the exact same time. However... it could be the 'Are You Sure?' message: When you're about to delete something, they always say: Are you SURE you want to delete this data? Heh. Not bed. Eggman seemed...well, put nicely, insane, in this fiction, and it seemed to have a nice twist at the end...making the hedgehog die on his birthday...how...how to put it...comically saddening, I suppose. Keep up the good work!
| No Line on the Horizon chapter 1 . 6/23/2009
You know what song really goes well with this... white room by cream XD
Nice work, an occassional error or two, but they're so small to the point where it doesn't even matter.
So Eggman is going down with his own ship huh, and on his birthday too. Well he is correct in his desires, he didn't actually win, nor lose, but indeed ended everything in a draw
I really like this actually, and yes that is a check on the add story to favorites.
Oh, and you had Sonic die on his bday? XDXD Oh well
| Starlightlovesya123 chapter 1 . 6/23/2009
Well, it might not be YOUR favorite, but I rather enjoyed it. It was an interesting concept, Eggman forcing a 'draw' a.k.a suicide and murder...
Hm...i'm trying to find the Smash Bros. reference...
Anyway, good work!
Happy B-day, Sonic! :)
| fhfhfhhhrh chapter 1 . 6/23/2009
... W... What?
Is it REALLY in Eggman's nature to kill? I know the doctor would enjoy a moment of capturing the irritating blue hedgehog, but KILL?
Heh. I must say, this one-shot was quite interesting. And, despite it being all about Sonic's birthday, the only two characters in it were Eggman and his robot, Egro. Wow. That robot was correct, he is pretty damn evil.
By the way, you have made a few errors. Har har! But, they are small. You've missed out a few letters, for example like in the word 'thought'... you missed out the 't'.
Oh! And, you sort of then went into Egro's thoughts, because you used first narration. It may be better if that was in italics, instead of plain text, but that's really your decision to make.
All in all, you wrote this well. I now know that you are - sort of - a fan of Eggman. I like that! Oh, and the Super Smash Bros. reference... Meh... no idea, sir. Sorry. Huh. Tells how good an author I am.
Keep it up, UL. I'm rooting for you!
P.S. I would be surprised if what I put up there doesn't make sense... Ah, well.