|Reviews for Beginning of a New Life|
| jaqmaq77 chapter 3 . 11/9
Interesting story, but so many gut churning stupidities in one place is a bit disturbing...
He faces 20 DEs, including Bellatrix no problem yet is afraid of annoying Daphne? Tell the bitch to go sleep on the couch in the suite, or on the bloody floor - and tell her to loose the bitch attitude... he's helping her! Send her back, trying to work with a bitch doesn't work - ever!
I've read thousands of HP fic's - you are now in first place for biggest pussy Harry ever...
| Darknessdawns chapter 21 . 10/22
This was a fascinating story and I enjoyed it from beginning to end. There were a few moments of confusion after Harry and Daphne returned to there original time and Hogwarts. However all that was eventually cleared up, most of it during the Healer's Hell chapter. I think the only things that really disappointed me was how quickly some things moved and how little we actually saw Harry and Daphne use their training. The Healer's Hell chapter and the ones that followed it were some of my favorites because we actually got to see some of what they could do. Also it was disappointing that we didn't get to see much of their romance. It was there but it really felt like it was mostly skimmed over and remained in the background. We also saw little of their relationships with their friends/family. All of that was included in the story but it was condensed and felt lost amongst all the stuff going on due to their training and the war. At any rate, it was still a wonderful story and I did enjoy it. This was a version of the time travel trope I hadn't seen before and hope to see again.
| Darknessdawns chapter 14 . 10/22
So far this is a brilliant story. However, aspects of this chapter have me puzzled. Why are they talking about Harry getting Masteries in subjects he already has Masteries in? I know not all the teachers are aware of this but Aberforth and Minerva are. Is he even being taught things he doesn't know? Is all this just refresher for him? Will he have to get the certification again for his true identity?
| Darknessdawns chapter 3 . 10/21
I don't know if anyone has mentioned it yet but at the beginning of this chapter (3) Daphne's alt name switches from Sarah to Rose in the same conversation.
| Guest chapter 6 . 10/7
I think you just use a bunch of words without actually really knowing what they mean. You’re also making your OC Harry do a bunch of unnecessary shit just cause it sounds cool to you. You set him up in the first chapter to be a guy who won’t take shit from anybody ever again only to be a little bitch in the next chapter. My first read through of this story was bearable, but now that I’m reading it again it’s painful so I’m dropping it before I waste anymore time on a subpar story masquerading as a decent read.
| fvdv123 chapter 20 . 10/5
This is the second time I read this story from start to finish.
To all those that critic this story to be not of their liking, Though shit.
Every Fan Fiction starts with a What If? What if Harry wizened up? What if Dumbledore trains him? and thousands more.
If you can not cope with that, there are always the original books you can read.
Each Fan Fiction is a world on its own, Canon has its own world, and there is no comparison between them.
| Z-Zen1 chapter 14 . 8/7
You lost me here.
Harry can take on Voldemort in a one-on-one fight and has killed over a dozen death eaters, and he is staying in the hospital wing instead of going to Hogsmeade?
And why is Harry being taught by the teachers when he has, in all likelihood, surpassed them. He was the top human curse-breaker in Gringotts and knows magic by motherf*cking Merlin himself. He has received an education that is above NEWTs at higher standards than Hogwarts.
Why has he not seen the memories from Dumbledore's pensieve yet? He was offered but he decided to leave them for later, even though they would help him defeat Voldie.
| WackySpace chapter 18 . 7/7
I thought it was frowned upon to attack healers during War?
| Vricks3 chapter 6 . 6/27
Why is Harry asking what field healing is? At the bank, after a year had passed, they said that in terms of healing, he was a field healer
| jimmy.oz chapter 17 . 6/25
Second or third time reading this story and it is still a really good story.
| nagiten chapter 14 . 6/9
why isnt harry using his animagus powers? also why would harry need contacts?
nice story though
| nagiten chapter 4 . 6/9
so he couldnt get his eyes fixed all this time or will he get ti fix during his travels?
man everyone is just using harry arent they poor harry
| kalloni chapter 11 . 5/9
I can't tell whether Bill is supposed to be good or not. Our earlier impression was bad because Fleur was told he was going to try to claim her whether she wanted it or not. This was evidenced by how upset he was when she left the country and I think even his mom was unsettled by his behavior (could've been someone else but I feel like it was her). Then Harry says he's a good guy, though he could just be putting up a front, but he also helped train Bill so idk.
Also it's pretty far fetched that Voldemort himself would randomly decide to attack a dragon sanctuary in a different country. Just seemed like plot convenience.
Still satisfying to see them so strong. They keep getting new sources of knowledge and power, I think it'd be good at this point to shift to demonstrating the abilities on screen more rather than just telling us what they can do.
| kalloni chapter 10 . 5/9
I am a bit confused how they're citizens of the Veela Nation. It mentioned it was because of the friendship with the matriarch council, but they only met the matriarch in the relative future, the veela hadn't met them in the past.
Also it says the nights together would end at Hogwarts but they explicitly mentioned as part of the contract with Fleur that he'd end up with special quarters at Hogwarts so things wouldn't have to change in that regard.
I just can't always tell what's intentional and what's an oversight. The story isn't bad though some things feel rushed, especially in regards to the relationship. The dialogue sometimes feels a little unnatural though not the worst I've seen. I do love powerful protagonists though so now we're getting back to the present I'm hopeful to see that in action.
| kalloni chapter 6 . 5/8
I feel like the author sometimes forgets things that were written before, like the fact that the goblin tutor said Harry was a qualified field healer and now he's asking what field healing is. We haven't even heard about the metamorph thing he's supposed to have since it was mentioned earlier, relying on bracelets to disguise. It just felt like the first couple chapters were an info dump of "oh and Harry can do this and this and this and this etc" and a lot of it just fell by the wayside.
I don't hate the story, but some continuity issues could be tightened up. Maybe they'll be dealt with later though.