Reviews for Scorpion's Disciple
SpookyBlush chapter 15 . 2/24
this story was truly amazing, and im really starting to get irritated with the number of good stories that have been abandoned. it seems every large good story gets abandoned. you want to be FAIR to readers? dont abandon your stories, and certainly dont mark them 'Complete' when they arent. i know this is way long after the fact, but i cant just be silent about this. i suppose some of the blame for my irritation is on me for reading a story i know is abandoned, i acknowledge that. but it still sucks.
Guest chapter 15 . 7/29/2024
Woah, 2 thousan and something reviews, this comment / review will be invisible at best.

Somebody told me Nobody did a Naruto fic before MoL and I decided I will try it out, despite the fact I haven't read anything Naruto since the end of the original manga (no Boruto). I saw so much of MoL in this and enjoyed it so much it surprised me and I will see If I find anything like it (or if anybody tried their hand at that sequel, thought I doubt It could be as good as this was, all things consider and despite lacking a bit compared to MoL).

Well, I knew it wasn't properly finished, but boy was I disappointed with how much more there was there to do. I only wish I hadn't seen that comment a few chapters back saying "It will end in 4 chapters" that made me think most people meant the ending was open, and no that it was missing. lol.

Still, in the hypothetical this is read, thanks for sharing, I will go try to find something similar but longer to scratch this itch.
ArchmageJoda chapter 15 . 6/10/2024
I know you've no intention to do anything further with this story, and it's been a hot minute since you've written this, but I am really curious: while the others are understandable, what would Sasuke's motivation for trying to bring Naruto back be? They've had little interaction through the fic and most of it wasn't especially friendly, so I don't know why Sasuke would be motivated.
Yuyami Yuri chapter 15 . 5/16/2024
In case you still check your profile: this is one of, if not the, best Sasori impression I've ever read. Your story is captivating and Sasori's influence on Naruto makes for fascinating deviations from canon. Even though you did not finish it, I'd like to thank you for sharing your incredibly well-written fic and for providing a summary of what you had planned going on.
Neon hacker chapter 15 . 2/4/2024
Even if you didn’t finish it, I’m glad you at least gave a summary, It gives us readers a sort of closure. I would’ve loved to see Naruto leave with Sasori, and the sandaime’s face, but I’m glad I know it happened at all.

Over all, loved the story! On a side note, if it’s ok with you, have you ever considered moving your stories to Ao3? The format of FFN it’s a bit hard on the eyes, I had to download the epub, so if you have some free time, please think about it.

But ah! What a refreshing story, it got recommended a ton to me in reddit, and I can see why, finished or not, the character development is fantastic, hope to read more of you soon!
ManticoreBlues chapter 15 . 10/27/2023
I'm so sad this is discontinued, I absolutely love this story. kinda wish the akastsuki arc wasn't quite as pushed but I don't overly mind's considering what you're doing with it. I hope you or a person with a good vision and competency picks it up again3
Maalik chapter 14 . 9/6/2023
A decent story, with the potential to be great. What a shitty ending. You suck.
Maalik chapter 13 . 9/6/2023
I appreciate the suddenness of hinata’s death. Not many writers have the heart to build a character just to destroy them later. Ngl it felt like my own heart stopped along with Hinata’s
maalik chapter 9 . 9/5/2023
this started out as a really feelgood chapter, i loved getting to see zabuzahaku and team7 on the same side against akatsuki, but their treachery was fine too.

the way you weaved multiple plot threads together here suggests you yourself are quite a puppet master.
maalik chapter 8 . 9/5/2023
Meh it feels kind of contrived for Naruto to be able to develop such a fierce killing intent all of a sudden after doing what exactly? life lessons with Sasori? lmao.
It would've been much better to have naruto ATTEMPT to scare sasuke, fall short and then Kyuubi to show him how its done
maalik chapter 7 . 9/5/2023
things are moving too slowly. I need to see some sasori NO DANNA action.
Naruto's "secret" abilities are a joke he should be trying to use the kyuubi's chakra as his main path to strength. All this talk of not wanting to "rely on the kyuubi" is complete stupidity. It would be like sasuke one day deciding to grab a pair of kunai and thrust them into his eye sockets, with the explanation of:
"I do not want to rely on these eyes I was gifted with only from birth!" how lowIQ does that sound?

People are born with and gain different advantages, that's life.

Also canon naruto had no problem stealing kyuubi's chakra with Bee's help. Damn this is stupid and annoying. Being a jinchuriki messed your life up, wouldn't it make sense to try ad extract the advantage it can bring too?
maalik chapter 6 . 9/5/2023
kiba's reaction to naruto's revelation was so heartwarming and wholesome :)))))))))))

Still i can't help but laugh at the idea of on one side Kiba and Naruto facing off, and on another Akamaru facing off against.. the Nine tails JFL.
maalik chapter 5 . 9/5/2023
i hope sasori is angling to sic the Kyuubi jinchuriki on Orochimaru and keep him as a useful companion rather than just randomly become a nice guy for no explained reason.

i really want to see some Nuke nin arcs, with Naruto and Sasori.

but you had sasori completely seal the nine tails' chakra. which is a stupid decision. Sasori should've tried tempting naruto to want to use it

also, i just realised how weird it is for the Hokage to not keep tabs on exactly who his Nuclear weapon is befriending.
maalik ibn Anas chapter 4 . 9/5/2023
although you're trying very hard to paint your version of sasori as a
wisened dispenser of "deep" truths, you're failing miserably and sasori
actually seems like a more childish character than naruto in some ways:

(1) Carbohydrates are not the best choice if you're looking for calories
fat has twice the calories per gram. soo? you're just making diet stuff up
in your fic? wtf lmao

(2) Sasori's usage of "judgements" as a source of motivation is possibly
the dumbest "life advice" i've read. In sasori's own words, in letting
others' judgements dictate your life, you're basically a puppet that gets
dragged hither and tither according to the whims of people around you
does that sound like a life worth living? Just spend your life
in accordance with what PEOPLE WANT lol.
And sasori obviously did not care to follow this advice, otherwise he would
not have become an S Ranked criminal jfl.

the cringe is strong in this fic ngl, especially in Sasori
. I have a sixth sense for people
trying to "appear wise
maalik chapter 2 . 9/4/2023
my eyeballs nearly rolled up my head when I saw SASORI, MURDERER OF THOUSANDS, FORMER AKATASUKI MEMBER, INTERNATIONAL CRIMINAL compalin about sExiSm in the most cringey way possible even a teenage girl would be disturbed by.

reminder to not let your liberal social justice fetishes corrupt the characters you're writing, its extremely obvious and may Allah guide you.

"men are in charge of women, by right of what Allah gave one over the other"
- Holy Qur'an (4/34)
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