Reviews for Scorpion's Disciple
LHN chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
x_x while i was reading my last review I saw LOTS of errors, sorry.

This chapter was very good. I liked specially the way you more or less preserve Naruto personallity while changing the plot.
aboulhosncc chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
A little obvious in the foreshadowing but meh I like the update and after two days of no updates I was worried that you just had those chapters written previously but I'm glad this wasn't the case

Looking forward to your next update
dupel chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
Another brilliant chapter. Like really brilliant ) I think right now this story is the best from the onse being updated frequintly )
Rakkety Tom chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
The best 'puppeteer' story i've ever read, and i've read quite a few.

You have a fantastic writing style. You should be proud.

Keep it up

- X3K
EDelta88 chapter 4 . 6/30/2009
AND Anko? screw moster this kid is gonna be rediculous

poor Shikamaru...though I would be a hypocrite to scold Naruto as I do the same thing when I play chess, I love using a speed clock and putting it at a rediculously low time
Dragonking20 chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
Yes, a new chapter, and a pretty good one at that. The baning of his trainers wasn't Too surprising but still very orginal, honestly the only reason it was so surprising was because of how bad his current situation is with the village. The bit with Ino was also nice, alittle surprised you brought her in this early and an angry Hinata to, very creative. Naruto's first puppet is Very orginal and I rather like the idea of where you're taking it with his style, all ya really need is a close range puppet to balance out like a team and he'll really be kicking but and taking names. The puppet fight scene was also nicely done as well, not to mention the new seals Naruto has been working on, I can't tell you how many times I've wished to see a Seal Master Naruto make exploding kunai's and am grateful that you delievered. Sarutobi was alittle harsh on Naruto for something that was pretty much his own fault, he was just lucky Naruto didn't bring up Sasuke's teachers or Naruto would have really unloaded on the old man. Speaking of Sasuke, haven't seen much of him or Sakura yet, guess that means either Naruto's gonna be on there team anyway, or you got something big planned for them, eith way I can't wait. The last part of the chapter almost guartines that something is gonna happen and its gonna make things alot more difficult for Naruto in the long run. Overall a good chapter, looking forward to more of this great story, keep at
oblivionknight7 chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
I like how Ino learned her place in the world, and the Puppet Naruto made was genius most people just have him make humanoid puppets right from the start, which in my opinion would be more difficult to use because of appendages.

Also near the end "Just remember that if Konoha decides to fail you you can always the village with me".

You forgot to put "leave" and can should be "could".
Dreamweaver Mirar chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
great story!

I definitely like your Naruto, and his growth rate is very believable.

Sasori is interesting, and it is good to see that you aren't totally overpowering your characters (especially Naruto)

hmm... not much else to say other than that your update rate is awesome and to keep up the good work!
TgCid24 chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
Another excellent chapter!

I particularly enjoyed Ino's reactions (and her failed attempt to intimidate Hinata) and the spar between Sasori and Naruto.

On the down side, you jumped from past to present tense a few times and left out a word here and there.

Overall, still an enjoyable read.

Keep up the good work and thanks for writing!

Cid
Loatroll chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
Great work! Only one thing though, I think your mind ran ahead of your fingers (happens to me all the time..)

“Perhaps,” said Sasori. “For what is worth I think you’re quite ready to graduate. Just remember that if Konoha decides to fail you you can always the village with me.”

I'm guessing there should be a 'leave' or something around there?
thales85 chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
Hm.. the last sentence is just a kick in Murphys face..

The gaduation will be sure to have quite a few problems for Naruto.. Be it through sabotage or otherwise..

Keep up the good work!
Fuyuriku chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
Just remember that if Konoha decides to fail you you can always the village with me.”

Think there's a word missing :P

Anyway, i'm glad that a new update game this soon, very interesting... Tough i think it could use a minor timeskip or something of that kind...
Fritter chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
Wow, this was a great chapter. I can't wait to see what happens when naruto takes the exam! Great foreshadowing on him possibly leaving the village. Looking forward to next time!
Carumati chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
Wow... I love this! I so so love this! And with that last sentence of yours- Really, his graduation was all but guaranteed. It'll be really funny if you did make him fail The teams are going to change though, right? Because naruto isn't dead-last anymore. or else Sarutobi would just do it for the heck of it and then naruto gets pissed off again... Anyways. You should probably closely read over this chapter, I saw some places where you forgot to type in a word. Example -Just remember that if Konoha decides to fail you you can always the village with me.”
SuperN-Gaspard chapter 5 . 6/30/2009
As awesome as it is too see you update this you left out an extremely important word in the third last line.

Sasori: "Just remember that if Konoha decides to fail you you can always the village with me."

He can always 'what' the village with Sasori? Otherwise awesome. Two-ish year jump was unexpected but easily mended into story.

Update Soon.
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