|Reviews for Hidden Greed, Hidden Grief|
| Kathrynzala chapter 1 . 3/17/2012
This was amazing... *o*
I really like how you did everything, and I sincerely hope you write more fanfiction like this!
| horror101 chapter 1 . 11/21/2010
tht was AMAZING!
| Accidentally The Whole Fanfic chapter 1 . 2/20/2010
Love how well this idea was pulled off - not something you see too often, either. I liked the whole idea of how selflessness can become selfishness, but how a little selfishness is sometimes necessary if you want to make yourself and others happier in the end.
| jellymaster chapter 1 . 9/30/2009
I had my doubts about an idea like this, I'll admit that, but this turned out to be far better than I expected! I love it when Harvest Moon authors take turns like these in their stories. It's refreshing, because it's something different that is normally overlooked and you delivered it in an interesting, original way.
Don't worry- Lumina wasn't OOC at all. In my opinion, this is the most in character Lumina I've ever read. I could tell because the encounter between her and Jack reminded me of a cutscene between her and Rock that you can unlock in Harvest Moon: Another Wonderful Life. She'd definitely react that way to someone who thought they were selfish, so you were spot on that part of her character.
This was really sweet. I just loved it! And unlike most of the Harvest Moon authors here, you didn't just create a prose-induced, "love at first sight" kind of romance between Lumina and Jack that had no real development involved in the makings of it. There's an obvious reason why they ended up liking each other. It'd be nice if you could continue this in a multi-chaptered story, but the more I consider that possibility, I think the story's wonderful all on it's own.
Kudos on making such a great story!
| high improbability chapter 1 . 7/3/2009
I like Lumina. And she wasn't THAT OoC, and I should know. I'm one of her best friends on HMDS Cute.
Nice job, and good luck!
| rupin chapter 1 . 7/2/2009
I really liked this. It was such an interesting, a whole other side of Jack I'd never seen explored.
Good luck in the contest
| Mage the Observer chapter 1 . 7/2/2009
This is absolutely perfect. I wish I could say more, but I'm not sure I can think of anything sensible.
All I know is, if the other entries are this good, I'm going to have a lot of trouble choosing.
Good luck in the contest!
| Kitsune no Tora chapter 1 . 7/1/2009
I really like how you did this, you really did a great job delving into Jack's insecurities. This was really good.
Good luck in the contest, this is going to be a tough one. XD
| Aina Riddle chapter 1 . 6/30/2009
I really like this one-shot, because I can relate to Jack in a way; I always try to keep everyone around me happy so I won't be alone. I like the way you wrote Lumina as well and I wish you luck in the contest!
| Jean Cooper chapter 1 . 6/30/2009
Very good. I loved the take, and seeing how Jack's flaws led to the ending was nice. Him being able to admit his flaws and starting a knew, still a little selfish but more so for other reasons was just a little aw making. Kudos and good luck
sorry if the review doesnt make sense- I'm very tired _;
| sugarapplesweet chapter 1 . 6/30/2009
I agree with farmermum in that this story really does build the connection between Mineral Town and the Valley. Not to mention Lumina is a great voice of reason here, being that she's often accused of being selfish.
Good luck in the contest!
Peace and Love
| farmermum chapter 1 . 6/30/2009
That's a really good story. I especially like the way you connect the two areas. Well done.