And this, is the chapter where things went off the rails. It was really good up to this point. Afterwards, it just sort of fell off a cliff.

Just want you to know we are still reading this great story. Thank you!

Evil.

good book but dropped 21/54

Hit my limit on tolerating your repeated cock-ups.
Buy a decent dictionary mate! I recommend Chambers 21st Century or Oxford English dictionaries. Then look up the geographical term STRAIT.
Now compare it to the word STRAIGHT.
Proceed to kick yourself black and blue.
Once recovered, REPLACE EVERY FUCKED UP MISUSE OF STRAIT WITH THE CORRECT WORD- STRAIGHT.

Likewise, please execute your moronic betas who appear unable to understand the difference between PASSED and PAST.
For example; a car PASSED a slow moving truck.
A student PASSED his/her exams.
Or;
Sensei Potter travelled into the PAST. He PASSED on info about horcruxes.

Please at a minimum run spell & grammar checking before posting your efforts. Perhaps that will catch the dozens of missing or extraneous words.

Grammar nazi signing off now!

Are you an idiot?
Canon book 3; Prisoner of Azkaban covers which year of HP's Hogwarts time?
Uh-huh. THIRD YEAR. As in 1993-1994.
Ergo, SB escaped from Azkaban in which year?
Clue!
NOT 1994.
Please correct your repeated fuck ups.

Thanks for the great story

However I find the lack of dealing with this line is be odd "Harry, Hermione and Clarice all tested in to Third Year non-magical, much to Hermione's annoyance"
annoyance would be beyond mild for the problems to Hermione self esteem. She would go from so smart that it has caused her to have problems being able to make friends to the family idiot, not only was her held back to repeat a year of school. Clarice who you have written as smart but not a genius gets to skip a grade. She lost the single thing that is 100% special to her and told they had been lied to her about her being smart.

Hermione is now at the new realization that Clarice is the genius, Harry is the great cook and she is the idiot with nothing special about her in her family. The lack of scenes of her dealing with this, makes her unrealistic and makes Minerva and Rose look uncaring to her.

This story seems to have several parts that are repeated throughout, like the reader has forgotten the plot.

Its s shame because otherwise it is a very well written, interesting and imaginative tale

Er… the Bahamas ARE in the Caribbean

Not really important, but if I followed that correctly, I’m pretty sure they’re third cousins, not second. Second cousins have great-grandparents in common. Hermione and her cousins have great-grandparents who are brother and sister, so they only have great-great-grandparents in common. Third cousins.

Although this story ends with a lot of momentum, knowing the sequel was abandoned after 16 chapters (last update Oct 2011) really sucks the excitement out of the story. First time I read this there was still some hope that the series could continue. All of these years later, that seems delusional.

Thank you for the time and effort you have put into this story. It was very much worth the read. It seems to be aimed especially at people who like back stories, genealogy, and political science.

I'm really enjoying your world building! So far everything is consistent and reasonably well thought out and well written. Interesting OCs. Thanks :-)

You created a masterpiece here’s that I do reread every couple of years. As much as I do hope that I will be able to read the sequel I do hope that you are well and happy. Thank you for this gift to the fanfic community!

Sirius giving his goddaughter up for adoption? I don't buy that if you are going for cannon-style Sirius. Temporarily trusting Hagrid & Dumbledore with his godson while hunting Peter, sure. This is very different. The whole Sirius never mentioned her in canon is an obvious plothole too, and will necessarily have a piss-poor explanation like obliviation unless the author has a stroke of genius, but the explanation for how she got to Child Services didn't have to be this bad.