Reviews for 30 Minutes That Changed Everything
TennysonPoet chapter 47 . 7/4
I am seriously enjoying this, my only pain point is there is a lot of information and some repetitive and I think some of the story gets lost in it, beyond that this is outstanding story.
jaqmaq77 chapter 9 . 7/4
in a way I always thought the math of J.K. was seriously flawed... In the UK England had a population of 48 million, Scotland, 5 mil, Wales 3 mil, and N Ireland 1.5 mil... a total of lets say 58 million... but only so 0.005 of the population is magical... and as on average 20 percent are school age children - that's 600 attending Hogwarts, so 7 years is around 86 a year divided by 4 houses is 21 per house per sorting...
Great story - my third time through
J flood chapter 53 . 6/30
Hagrid's name is misspelled
J flood chapter 53 . 6/30
are you honestly trying to make it where Hagrid can't be understood at all I have no idea what parrot is saying you've made his accent so bad that I have no idea what he said please fix this issue
J flood chapter 52 . 6/30
oh man you started Dowager Longbottom rant and I want to hear what she had to say and then you just cut it off you meanie
J flood chapter 45 . 6/29
Cornelius fudge and Dolores Umbridge was fired several chapters ago
J flood chapter 37 . 6/27
I don't know how you're justifying the fact that most of the people in these genealogies at the end of the chapter are dying around ten years old so how are they having kids? you probably didn't do this intentional but on average so far most of the names of these people they're dying Ten Years After they're born there's no way they can have kids like that need to grade go through the chapter and fix it
J flood chapter 36 . 6/27
hallelujah it's not 1988 anymore. just messing with you your story is excellent so far I'm enjoying it.
J flood chapter 11 . 6/23
I I have a love them hate them relationship with Cliffhangers well done with the chapter
J flood chapter 5 . 6/22
another well-thought-out and written chapter well done
J flood chapter 4 . 6/22
no criticism for this chapter only praise well done
J flood chapter 3 . 6/22
you must really like the Lord of the Rings personally I don't think Frodo fits Harry that well but to each his own it's your store and you had the right to call him whatever you want by the way the chapter was good
J flood chapter 3 . 6/22
just so you know you've got disclaimer misspelled
J flood chapter 2 . 6/22
one thing to say about this chapter good job another thing to say about the previous chapter is that unless you catch your readers attention in the first chapter you will lose them in this you have succeeded with me in the first chapter you had my attention you got me interested just remember try to write a story that will catch your readers attention in your first chapter and you will have a story that people will want to read I would like to praise your efforts so far and I plan to reveal probably almost every chapter I will give praise and criticism as needed know that I may sound like a real jerk sometimes it's not intended I'm just a very blunt person and I don't pull my punches on reveals this is so that the writer can improve the writing instead of being babied and told it's okay you can do better next time I don't say that instead I say it's okay you will do better next time and you can do better this time as well this is my thing and it is my model strive for excellence expect the best from yourself so if you do fall short you're not disappointed and there's always room for improvement keep up the good work on writing for your right readers I know that they're enjoying what you write in praising you all the way. May whatever God you believe in bless you.
J flood chapter 1 . 6/22
putting the summary the still called detailed summary in every chapter is only annoying please stop doing that you only need a detailed summary on the first chapter and I don't know if you know it but if you include the disclaimer in the beginning of the story like on the summary page and say it applies to the whole story you can skip the disclaimer in this chapters cuz you'll be on the first page
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