|Reviews for The World That Never Was|
| BecauseHeroesNeverDie chapter 1 . 7/20/2009
I would have loved to have passed in something like this for English. :) What'd you get? Something good, I hope.
This was actually quite good. Top marks, I'd say, if I were your teacher. You created a mood and managed your description well. There wasn't too much or too little adjective power going on here. No droning on about the wonders of the ground Sora walked upon. No fluttering quickly from place to place. I can't place a finger on quite what you did. I just liked it.
| hintcoin chapter 1 . 6/30/2009
AH! thank you! lol, i'd imagined it to be a longer paper since it was for school, but this is short and to the point! thank you for posting it! i like it! i like the word choice here. it didn't just say "the spires poked out of the castle". and i also like how you described the castle color in something that WASN'T silver or grayish. lol, that's what i'd say XD! my cousin who had never played the game read this and she was able to make a good sketch of the world off of it! good job!