|Reviews for Chuck vs the Fallout|
| Marc Vun Kannon chapter 2 . 12/30/2016
Madelyn? Orion's wife is Mary. Interesting way for them all to find out, no more secrets in a big way.
| xxx Rob M xxx chapter 6 . 12/22/2016
My apologies for not reviewing right away, I remember enjoying so many things in this story originally that I wanted to go back and re-read it before getting to the new chapter.
Things I liked:
Really enjoyed Sarahs reaction to Chuck putting the intersect back in his head. The way she practically shuts down when she realizes that theyve both lost their chance at escaping the spy life. Thought this dovetailed nicely into one of the strongest scenes in the story so far. Sarah on the beach, going back to the place where she was so happy only hours before, trying to hold onto that feeling for just a little longer.
Chucks final forgiveness of Bryce. Always felt the show did an awful job of resolving everything between these two. No matter his reasons, Chuck would have still felt hurt and angry about what Bryce did...especially when it came to the intersect. Chuck letting go of those things in this story felt more earned, its the kind of thing he would do when faced with Bryces death.
Orion confronting Casey over the kill order, and the implied threat that went with it
Sarahs stepping up and attempting to be honest with Chuck. This was well done, and I enjoyed the subtle ways that, even though she was trying, sometimes she just couldnt help herself. Lying is such a part of who shes been that its not something she would easily shrug off all at once
The darker tone of the story. I really like that you seemed to be taking Chuck in a direction where he accepts whats required of being a spy. While I dont think hes a character who should ever be okay with things like killing. I do think, much like a police officer, Chuck is someone who is willing to do what needs to be done when innocent lives are on the line. If you continue with this story I hope you stay with this direction.
Im also a fan of stories that play with the themes of trust between Chuck, Sarah, and Casey, especially the idea of Chuck and Sarah being in love, when at any moment she might be ordered to betray him.
That being said, there was a few things that didnt work for me:
First, despite what I just said, if youre building a story that takes place in the show continuity, I feel as though, Sarah at this point would never betray Chuck. That was the whole point of her story arc, and why she ran with Chuck. Shes not someone who just mindlessly follows orders anymore.
Sarah and Bryce's relationship felt a bit more intimate than I would expect. Its not that I dont think they were in love at all, but I think there was a limit..they loved each other as much as they were capable. But never being able to fully trust anyone and the emotional damage caused by their job, means it would have been more of a relationship of passion and living in the now, than one where they would really open up to one another
...and finally, I guess I disagree a bit about where Sarah is in her growth as a character at the end of season two. For me, I think her job did damage her on a personal level. She became cold and emotionless through necessity and I think looking back, she really didnt like that version of herself or miss it when it was gone. Its also why Id argue that Sarah would always choose that name for herself...because its the name she had when she realized that she was so much more than just an agent. Sarah isnt the mask, Sarah is the person she wants to be and does eventually become.
Anyway, sorry for the long post, there was just a lot I wanted to cover here. It really is great to get even one more chapter on this story, even if its another cliffhanger :) ...I really do hope you find the time to either finish this, or rework it as planned, because despite a couple of things, this really was a fantastic story!
| baldcoder chapter 6 . 12/20/2016
Great story. Not sure how I've missed reading this before. Looking forward to reading more.
| wilf21 chapter 6 . 12/20/2016
Great continuation. I hope you're going to give us more, soon!
| vandevere chapter 6 . 12/20/2016
Something's going splat!
Don't worry, Casey's here, and he'll save the day.
With extreme prejudice.
Glad to see you're back.
| ne71 chapter 4 . 11/9/2016
"And they know everything." He blurted out. "Your covers, Charles Carmichael, Awesome and Ellie, Awesome's parents, Morgan and Anna, her parents in Taiwan, Big Mike, Poloñia, even Jeff and Lester. They had dossiers on all of Devon's fraternity brothers, Ellie's colleagues at the hospital and their families, our old high school friends and their families, your dad, Sarah. John, your family. Everybody. They know where we live, what we do, our third grade report cards. They, they don't know about me, about what I am, but they know who I'm working with and that I'm Orion's son, that they can get to him through me. And they won't stop until they get him. They're ready to take L.A. apart piece by piece if that's what it takes."
And with that paragraph, what was already a great story kicked itself into epic territory. Fantastic premise; one I don't believe I've ever seen done here. Everything blown wide open, everyone in danger, and Chuck going at them head first. I loved this chapter for a lot of reasons, but most of all that you managed to show Chuck's transformation in a very realistic way - he's not suddenly a hardened badass, he's simply determined to protect his family and eliminate the threat to their safety at all costs. It's believable and entertaining at the same time.
You also nail - absolutely NAIL - Casey here. His loyalty, his temperament, and his motivations. And with that bit at the end of the chapter about him talking with his nephew, you give him a human side. Fantastic.
I'm hoping against hope that you continue this.
| Nomadic Nerd chapter 5 . 2/11/2015
Wow! THIS WAS AWESOME! Especially chapters one and three. This is the direction the show should have taken. Give Chuck and Sarah (and the fans) one night together no cover no mission before going after the ring. The relationship angst could still be there as they come to terms with their new roles, only they'd be a couple dealing with them like the second half of season three and beyond. I really wish you would write more! I understand that having lost your material and starting from scratch for this story would be difficult but I'd love to see your take on a post finale story. Best part is it can be as you want it to be! Seriously a writer as talented as you are should share their gift with the rest of us. Thank you for this amazing story!
| s-david-m chapter 5 . 11/22/2012
Fantastic post-season 2 continuation. Would have been nice if the show had gone in this direction. Its a shame you'very abandoned it. Especially just when Sarah's about to return to Chuck as Lisa for the rest of the night.
A few comments:
1. I think the Ellie retcon suspecting Sarah and Casey was maybe a bit much. They had no hint of that on the show, although I agree that a real-life Ellie would have figured it out.
2. Sarah finally opening up at the Beach was quite touching. It's nice to see them really connecting.
3. Portraying Casey as the consummate hardcore professional was spot on.
4. Damn you for continuing the show's long streak of coitus interruptions!
5. Your portrayal of her relationship with Bryce was excellent. Too many people retcon it into not having been anything serious, which is just wrong I think. I think Bryce really paved the way for her to connect with Chuck. If she had met Chuck before Bryce, I don't think she would have been emotionally ready, and you might be right that she may not have even been interested. I'm not sure how I feel about how serious you portray Sarah's and Bryce's thinking though, with the babies and all, but it's not too out there.
6. One aspect I think could use some work is the confusing time jumps. You wrote at least this last chapter in a somewhat random order, and it was hard to follow sometimes.
7. The uncertainty behind your new Intersect and Chuck's unusual reactions to it are an intriguing. On the show, the intersect had so few real side effects for anyone until season 5, and even then only because it had been sabotaged.
8. The Orion/Casey scene was great. Your Orion is a little to coherent to match what thy established on the show. He needs a little more ADHD.
9. The Carina backstory twist was totally awesome. Didn't see that coming at all.
10. Sarah's immediate reaction after Chuck taking out those agents was terrific. You really humanized her, but you didn't go over the top like many authors have where they have her irrationally stay mad at him for effectively saving their lives.
11. Your Ring is far more ominous than the one portrayed on the show.
These were just a few of the great parts, and I hope this appreciation spurs you into continuing this! This story has great potential.
| Elysion1879 chapter 5 . 6/28/2010
This actually is probably one of my favorite season 3 AUs, it is too bad you stopped.
| Omgoth chapter 5 . 6/12/2010
Oh WOW. You are just... my god. This is SO what I wish had actually happened in season 3. Not that I didn't love season three from episode 13 onwards, but this totally trumps the beginning of season 3.
| spcr71 chapter 5 . 6/11/2010
I just ran across your story and it was a great read up to the point where you stopped. It's really too bad you didn't continue, it was a great story.
| taintedlegacy chapter 5 . 2/16/2010
Awesome story! Keep up the good work!
| Apollo199199 chapter 3 . 1/1/2010
As a Bryce Larkin fan, it is so nice to see a story where his death was not just glossed over as if everything afterwards is just fine and dandy and that Sarah and Chuck would continue on like nothing happen. I get that some people hate Bryce because he gets between Chuck and Sarah and that his choices of trying to protect Chuck ended up hurting him, but it shouldn't change the fact that Bryce as a character is an important part of both Sarah and Chuck's lives and with him brutally taken away from them, there has to be some sort of reaction to his death and not to mention a strong one at that, after all, Chuck saw a close friend die right in front of his eyes for the first time, and Sarah just lost someone she once loved and still loves now as a friend. Bryce did indeed die a hero. He walked away when Sarah chose Chuck, he didn't whine or make some manipulative plans to win Sarah's love, he understood Sarah's choice and he was happy for his two friends (I saw that little smile on his face right after Sarah shook her head). He was willing to put his life on the line for Chuck, Ellie, and the wedding guests, and he risked everything to protect the Intersect. When the push came to shove, Bryce Larkin was there to back up Sarah and Chuck, I think that should matter more than some love triangle or petty jealousy.
So I just want to say, thank you for actually giving Bryce's death a good closure. And it is my hope that when the season 3 premiere rolls around, that the writers of Chuck understands can do the same. Bryce may have not always made the best choice, but he had the best intentions for people he cared about. I can only hope that Chuck writers will give him a good send-off and let Sarah and Chuck properly grieve for Bryce.
And for the rest of your story, I like the intricate details that you put in, it makes the story well-rounded and the characters more real and alive. You are an amazing writer! Please write more!
| mxpw chapter 5 . 10/25/2009
For the most part, I thought this chapter was great. While Chapter 4 was probably my favorite chapter so far, this dealt with a lot of necessary issues between Chuck and Sarah that, I think, make it my second favorite. However, I did think it was a little odd that both Chuck and Sarah were seriously considering that Sarah might actually tranq him and put him in a bunker. It seemed bizarre, after everything that had happened in the last few days that Sarah would even consider doing such a thing or that Chuck would believe she would. I think I must have missed something in the chapter that indicated why such a breach of trust would have been justified.
Other than that little bit of oddity, I thought this chapter was awesome. You write Chuck and Sarah very well, and here they have this real closeness, yet there is still serious distance between them. Neither of them can seem to just...be Chuck and Sarah (or Lisa) for even five minutes, they're always so concerned for the mission. It's kind of depressing and yet still inspiring because even though their life is not their own, they still manage to convey how much they mean to each other.
By the way, you need to write more scenes like that bathroom one more often. Damn. I don't care how much you deny it, you know what you're doing when it comes to writing scenes of such physicality. Very well done.
Okay, you need to get back to work on this. Depriving the world of your writing, in general, and this story in particular, is just not cool. If I have to pester you to get you to write, I will. Don't think I won't.
| mxpw chapter 4 . 10/25/2009
This was a truly great chapter. I'm not sure what you were afraid about, you wrote Casey very well. I was pretty impressed. In fact, I think this was one of the best Casey chapters of any fic I've read before. Hell, it was certainly better than my Casey stuff! :-P I would not be opposed to you writing more John Casey in the future.
I've said it before, but I don't think it can be said enough, but your attention to detail and your description of things is amazing. Better than most, you have an ability to evoke and create an easily seen visualization of what is happening. In other words, you know how to paint a picture.
I should probably say a few words about the plot, since it's pretty intricate. Very interesting setup you've got for the Ring here. That they are some shadow, global spanning, clandestine order is very cool. I kind of like the idea of Team Bartowski preparing for war. Chuck was very assertive and uncompromising, which was very odd to read. But I can somehow see that it's a change that Intersect 2.0 has inspired inside of him.
Fantastic work, DD.