|Reviews for Beyond The Broken Scars|
| the newest daughter chapter 5 . 9/18/2013
Is she Carlisle mate? What dose the voltori want? What is Edward up to?
| Bell 1 chapter 40 . 9/2/2013
Because you left the Horatio, Alyssa, and Edward thing hanging there, this story doesn't seem complete. I'm guessing you put it into the sequel, but since it was a big part of the last several chapters, I believe it should have been wrapped up in this story. Especially the Edward part because he WAS a large piece of this entire story due to him being in love with Bella still and now Carlisle is her husband.
That being said, this was a very good and fun story. I loved the slow building love story. I also greatly enjoyed the mystery and suspense with the Romanians. There were a lot of twists and turns within this drama, but I was thoroughly frustrated with Bella and all the lies and deception. Then when Emil escaped that final time, I wanted to see him suffer for it AND for getting the upper hand on Bella as he did.
I didn't quite understand, either because it wasn't really explained or because I missed the section it was explained, how Rosalie lived after she was supposedly killed/burned. I sort of guessed that Horatio escaped because he went invisible and ran before he could be burned up, but I never gathered how they were able to trick everyone about Rosalie.
What I did not enjoy about this story was the version of vampires you used. I like S.M.'s vampires and when reading Twilight ff, I expect to have those types of vampires. So, it was VERY difficult to associate the fact that they have blood (not just venom), a blade worked on them, and they have fangs in this story. It may have made it difficult, but it didn't stop me from reading the story because the rest was intriguing enough to keep me reading.
What it comes down to is this story is filled with various contradictions for me... I had a hard time grasping some things about the story and yet I loved the main storyline and the romance very much.
Thank you for sharing your story with us. :D
| Bell 1 chapter 34 . 9/1/2013
I don't get it. It says Bella just knew Vladamir was dead, but he appears later in the chapter, multiple times. Plus, it can't be Alec because he appears in the next chapter. This is the sentence that leads the readers to think Vladimir died:
Alec immediately exerted his power over Vladimir instantly blinding him. I didn't bother to watch the rest, but my ears distinctly caught the sound of metal connecting with stone and I knew that Vladimir was no more.
If Vladamir is alive as is Alec, who actually died after Alec set his power on Vladimir?
| Bell 1 chapter 20 . 8/30/2013
In Carlisle's words, this chapter:
"There has been nothing between them for almost three years now and regardless of what happened then it shouldn't cloud your judgment of her now." I said firmly.
Bella's words, Chapter 16:
I hesitated, feeling the pang of apprehension come over me. Despite being twenty two years old, I was still a virgin and had never contemplated engaging in intercourse with anyone...ever.
So, do to the fact Bella claimed earlier that she is 22 and this story takes place after her 18th birthday party, that means it has been nearly FIVE years, not nearly three years since Edward and Bella have been together.
That being said, I am enjoying this story and the war between the Volturi and Romanians, all because of one girl, Bella.
| Bell 1 chapter 7 . 8/28/2013
You keep using the word revise, but Americans typically say study. It took me awhile to figure out what you mean. However, after I did, I looked up the word and realized that British tend to say revise for "study".
Since Bella is American and this story is set in America (basically, Bella thinks like an American), she should probably be using the word study. You could have Carlisle use revise though because he is from England.
Interesting story so far.
| TheYamiNeko chapter 26 . 4/24/2013
well she's going to get pregnant if they continue their hot tube adventures! xD
| TheYamiNeko chapter 5 . 4/20/2013
so your vampires do bleed? :/
| TheYamiNeko chapter 2 . 4/20/2013
NOOOO! I love Esme :'( but good story so far! and very good style ;)
| TheGoddessWhitlock chapter 19 . 2/24/2013
DAMN IT CARLISLE CHANGE HER ALREADY!
| TheGoddessWhitlock chapter 11 . 2/24/2013
Pixie bitch needs to stay out of it grrr. Great so far.
| Laura201112 chapter 9 . 1/27/2013
| wwechic1619 chapter 9 . 1/8/2013
| wwechic1619 chapter 6 . 1/8/2013
I have to say...you are such an amazing author! I don't know how you managed to write such a great branch off of SM with the same kind of tone, but I seriously love it!
| Guest chapter 10 . 1/3/2013
| Guest chapter 9 . 1/3/2013
Er. Wow. I'm really glad that she is indifferent to Edward now. I mean, I absolutely love the cannon pairing, but this is also awesome! Rock on!