|Reviews for Torn|
| Kiko12350 chapter 24 . 10/30/2013
| Kiko12350 chapter 18 . 10/30/2013
OMG that boy was kakashi!
| purplelover318 chapter 24 . 10/18/2013
Great story! I really enjoyed it
| finnythewise chapter 1 . 5/8/2013
I SHALL BE YOUR 600TH REVIEWER :)
In other news, I really enjoyed your story - the Anbu process was very simple, but I loved how you developed Sakura and Kakashi's relationship.
| Uzumaki Aoi chapter 17 . 5/8/2013
You are just plain awesome. I always forget to review everytime because i was so caught up on reading and continuing on and on. the story so far is so AWESOME. I know i'm saying it again but, it is.
| V-ChanUzumakiLSSJ chapter 24 . 4/29/2013
I enjoyed this story. You did very well. Great job.
| Amrun chapter 24 . 2/21/2013
Thanks for sharing this story. Too often rape is seen as something that happens to women only.
| paranaoblue chapter 24 . 2/18/2013
I just wanted to start off by saying I really enjoyed this story. I’m not always found of darker, more intensely written themes like the ones you worked with here, but I think you did a good job with them. This is not usually how I would personally perceive Kakashi, but the frame you made for his character being that way made sense so I didn’t mind. I haven’t really read any fics where Sakura and Kakashi are ANBU (in Kakashi’s case actively ANBU) but this would be my favorite one so far. I thought about this story when I made myself stop reading it the first night I started so I could go to sleep because otherwise I might have stayed up a good portion of the night reading it. Something about it just stuck stayed with me and the first thing I wanted to do the next morning was continue reading. Good thing it was a weekend so I was able to. I liked what you did with Sai even though he was mostly only there in the beginning. Rin being included in the story in her position was also an interesting touch.
I only really have two criticisms and they’re pretty minor in the grand scheme of things: typos and the occasional redundancy. Sometimes there were small things like a “buy” instead of a “but” or “an” instead of “and” and other times it was double words (can’t remember any examples off the top of my head). As for the redundancy, there was only really one that stood out. Although it was an apt phrase in the instances it was in, “rose-colored” was used at least three times, maybe twice two chapters in a row as well. I was probably able to catch that only because I read fast so there was very little time between the chapters I read and the wording stood out. They didn’t disrupt the flow of the story too much overall, but it would definitely be much smoother without them. However, neither of these things took away the emotion and meaning, which I think was most important. Thanks for writing this!
| Keelah chapter 1 . 2/11/2013
so i just wanted you to know that my first, as in VERY first guess about Kakashi's past (this was still earlier on in the story) was so stupid that i now feel like an idiot.
you mentioned a mentor/teacher. then there was a teammate. stupid me, i never thought it could be an ANBU team, so i assumed... i was like, okay, so minato, the fourth hokage, raped obito?
they were in love?
and then we found out it was actually kakashi. i was like, wait, so, naruto's father raped obito AND kakashi?!
needless to say i was very confused ahahahha. and then it finally made sense, with the flashback. im just incapable of putting the clues together x)
amazing story though
| Guest chapter 11 . 1/22/2013
I don't know about anybody else but I certainly found it...extremely hard to read :/
| xXSasuSaku 4 EvaXx chapter 24 . 1/13/2013
I really liked how you made it a point that Kakashi and Sakura were both able to overcome their fear, their nightmare of when they were force to be vunerable and not able to fight back, it gives hope. :)
Loved the story, thank you for writing it :P
| Guest chapter 24 . 1/8/2013
Haha this is awesome! Heart-wrenching but infused with hope. Thank you for writing! XD
| koegie chapter 24 . 1/8/2013
I very much enjoyed the character development and how you managed to portray Kakashi is such a vulnerable way. He's almost always portrayed as a strong and confident character and yet you chose the opposite for which I am grateful. This is a very nice fic!
I just think the part where Sakura was raped wasn't strong enough, it felt kinda weak and it didn't make that much sense. I only clued in when I saw Kakashi's reaction when he took the pictures, I didn't even know it was happening until it was obviously pointed out... Which I find a shame. The reactions to the assault were very realistic though!
Albeit this being a bit foggy at times I enjoyed it.
Oh and the occasional spelling mistakes ruined the effect a bit...
- your/you're mixed
-it's useD to/supposeD to (I noticed you often if not always spell it as use to and suppose to which actually annoyed me)
Other than those frequent mistakes I can only compliment you on your wide vocabulary which I want to possess. BADLY! (I'm so jealous!) You also did a good job on describing some scenes...
Eh, I might seem a bit of a critic but please don't take any of personal. I hope you didn't get offended in any way because of this. On the contrary, I hope you're flattered! I often find that I am in need of good, honest critics. Of course all the compliments are always welcome but some harsh critics can help immensely too, wouldn't you agree? :p
I think it could have been made a bit more extreme, especially the rape part. It should have been able to shake my insides... But it didn't. I of course understand you wanted to spare your readers but in doing so you didn't bring out one of the most important scenes of your story harsh enough.
Well THANKS for making this story, it's certainly original and well-written. Have a wonderful life haha
| bloomsburry chapter 19 . 12/27/2012
finding out about Kakashi being in love with his taichou was a major turn off...Sorry but I instantly lost interest.
| bloomsburry chapter 18 . 12/27/2012
err...is kakashi gay? and he loved his taichou? honestly, this is much more disturbing than the rape thing.