|Reviews for Fortuna Favet Fatuis|
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/13/2014
I mean manga
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/13/2014
This is a good story do you mind if I can turn it into a man a?
| Leo-Novum chapter 8 . 2/2/2014
The Whild Card's Gift to the Detective Prince was an awesome moment.
| Cryse chapter 17 . 2/2/2014
While it's obvious that no one here will truly be able to understand what you're going through, I understand that writing isn't your main concern right now, and dearly hope that things get better. I know that sometimes motivation to write can be hard to find when things are going good even, and I would imagine is most certainly harder with how it sounds like things have been going.
There's no need to feel so apologetic either, though unfortunately I'm sure many others on this site would disagree with me, they feel so entitled...
Anyway, take as much time as you need. Remember, you come first, and we should just be grateful that you've given us as many beautiful stories as you have. I remember only a few days ago being disappointed that I wasn't finding as many Souji/Naoto stories that I had wanted to, and then I had the good Fortune, if you will, to stumble across your profile. It honestly made me really happy when I read a few and realized how good they were, and how many you had posted.
If Video-games and Tumblr make you feel better (believe me, I know that feeling), then by all means, do those things. Neither of us wants you writing if it's not you who wants to do it, I'm sure.
In the meantime, all I can do is hope things get better, and offer what I can. If you ever want someone to bounce ideas off of, I would love to help. Simply want to talk about stuff? By all means, I'd love to. What makes you like Persona 4 so much? How about the Tales games? What were your experiences with them? If you'd like to talk about things like that, or even things in life, though I've no right to ask, the offer is there. I would honestly enjoy doing so, as people like to talk about their fandoms and things surrounding them, don't we?
Otherwise, I'll wait patiently, and review when things come back, if you think would be for the best. Honestly, the readers wish the best for you, however you find it.
Hope things get better, and until we meet again I suppose, be it one way or another.
Oh, and one last thing. Thank you for what you have written.
| Cryse chapter 16 . 2/2/2014
Oh wow! Naoto is in the velvet room! Not quite like I expected her to, but still! It makes me hopeful for a possible visit with both of them in the future, but perhaps that is asking too much.
Looks like Naoto will be regaining her memories sooner than expected. Does that mean she won't have to face her shadow? Hmmm... if so, things will truly begin to be quite different.
At least my greatest fear of Naoto cutting her ties with Souji in fear of the new emotions inside of her wasn't realized. I should have known that their bond was stronger than that.
If Naoto IS recovering her memories, I imagine Souji's friends won't be able to help but notice how happy Souji will be the next time they see him. I wonder where things will go from here. Will Naoto be joining the investigation team, or perhaps not quite yet? Will she have her Persona? So many questions... and there is only one more chapter to go! Oh, so bittersweet...
If you think about it, whenever Naoto thinks that whatever she is doing concerning how close she is being with Souji she thinks of as wrong, but it feels right, It's almost as if her past self is trying her best to push her towards him. Maybe that's how you will end up describing it even.
Again, if she does end of recovering her memories, the two will be overjoyed to be reunited again. They're both tired, and won't want to be separated from each other. Under normal circumstances I'd imagine that they would just choose to sleep together, I'm sure neither of them would have nightmares and they would get some sleep, but Dojima and Nanako will be coming home. Who knows though, like Souji said before, sometimes in love, all you can see is the other person, and this might be one of those times, and they may end up throwing caution to the wind. They both need it, really.
I wonder if Igor will mention how the velvet room is connected to Souji, and how she is able to be there, along with making a comment on how much care was taken of her vial. Something sweet enough to make Souji embarrassed.
I do honestly hope that the next chapter is a long one, I can't help it.
Bravo on the chapter itself, as it couldn't have been easy to write, however it came together very well. You had my heart racing the good way this time, not that last time was bad I guess, just tiring.
The chapter was filled with Naoto and Souji, which I can't complain about at all, really.
I am really curious as to what Igor, and Margaret for that matter, will say to Naoto. I'm afraid I cannot hold my excitement any longer, and will shortly be reviewing what is-currently- the final chapter.
| Cryse chapter 15 . 2/1/2014
Ohoho, cliff hanger, huh? Makes me glad I don't have to wait for the next chapter, though I think I might until morning anyways.
I'm glad you didn't end up skipping the trip, and about your question about the part you added between Yosuke and Souji (though you have probably received more than enough answers by now), I personally thought it was fine. When you're young, you don't really know, and he obviously turned out different anyways. Not that there is anything wrong with being gay mind you.
I'm also glad that 'Mystery Food X' made a return and showed that even with a second chance, some horrible fates cannot be averted.
I did find it a little strange that you skipped Kanji's entrance and exit however, to be honest. I know it's not something that probably wouldn't have been that different from the game, but since it's the only part of the trip missing, and it's a small part, it just seemed odd for it to be left out.
I wonder what Naoto wants to talk about that is so urgent. Perhaps about some of her conflicting emotions, even going so far as to reject them, reject HIM, until she faces her shadow, making it necessary. I will prepare my heart, just in case, and it's a good thing I will have until I wake to do so, if that happens to be the case.
I'm glad you went with Yosuke being a little more mature than last time concerning the swim suit... 'fiasco' I guess, rather than the opposite.
The chapter itself was pretty humorous, like Yosuke's "I saw a light" and Souji condemning him to his fate, despite having prior knowledge.
Souji found a penguin? Will we see him giving it to Kanji, or have a flashback of it maybe? Or is that the last we'll see of it? It seems as though it has managed to spark my interest for some reason.
I'm glad that they managed to avoid the horrible fate spewing from the inner parts of , though I'd imagine not anywhere near as glad as they are.
To sum it up, a pretty funny chapter, with the ending provoking some thought, and the possibility for some more heart-wrenching. I'll come back to finish the other chapters in the morning. Until then, I will prepare my heart, as I have learned that if I don't keep my guard up, you can hit me right where it hurts. It's a skill to be able to do that however, so bravo to you.
| Cryse chapter 14 . 2/1/2014
So Dojima and Misanori go way back huh? Makes sense, now that I think about it. Still curious as to what Yakushiji's story is though.
Glad to see another moment between Dojima and Souji, even if it's just a small interaction. I'll be waiting patiently until Dojima tells him he considers him more of a younger brother, I really enjoyed that in the game, and would love to see your spin on it.
I wonder what exactly Souji meant when he thought about how he might be able to get close to Naoto without her facing her shadow. Surely he knows the importance of Naoto doing so regardless, and I wonder how that will happen, as the way it normally happened might not work as well in this situation. Maybe Naoto and Souji have an argument where Naoto wants some information from him that he cannot give her, and that is why she ends up using herself as bait again, in order to find out? Hmmm...
I like how you added some confrontation between Yukiko and Chie, and I have to admit I didn't see it coming. Their bond will only come out of it stronger, so its another way to add development which I had forgotten to consider.
Next will hopefully be the school camp-out, which I really hope you don't skip, because of all the opportunities it presents for some laughs. Judging form how things are playing out currently however, I doubt I have anything to worry about.
I'll admit, I didn't expect to see Naoto at the hospital, until you wrote that someone else was there, then I realized there was a good chance it would be her.
I'm glad that things are starting to diverge more and more, though I feel the velvet room has been absent for far too long.
I imagine that Yosuke will be even more of a horn dog during the camping trip than he usually is now that he is involved with Chie, though I suppose it could go the opposite way as well, depending how you decide to go about it.
I can't help but wonder if Dojima and Nanako's problems will reach a resolution. I'd imagine so, but that leaves me wondering when? Not the impatient kind of wondering, the curious kind.
Anyway, looking forward to the school camp out!
| Cryse chapter 13 . 2/1/2014
It seems that Souji and Naoto are making progress, even without her recovering her memories. At this rate, I imagine that when Naoto recovers her memories, it will be more like the final push in them reforming their bond, rather than re-establishing the whole thing from nothing.
Again, I understand why not much attention was paid to the actual rescue of Kanji, as it wouldn't have been much different than in the game.
Kanji opening up early and more than you expected Souji? Well then, you must have forgotten about the 'Kindred Spirit Effect' (I'm never going to get tired of this by the way, sorry, not really sorry though, heh)
With Yosuke making all these jokes about Souji and Naoto, I wonder what he'll have to say when he finds Naoto is a girl?
Also, now that Naoto and Souji are becoming more comfortable with each other in their current state, this brings me back to thinking about when the group visits the club in the future. If Souji somehow gets drunk off the atmosphere this time like the other, or there is real alcohol involved this time, I can imagine him saying something like: "I mean, are you guys blind, or just stupid? Obviously... heh... someone as beautiful as Naoto could only be a g-" before Naoto promptly stops him. Don't look at me like that, I've had that idea since playing through the event in the game.
And like I just mentioned, even though Naoto and Souji are becoming more comfortable again, you show that there is still some distance between them, like when Naoto accidentally called Souji 'Senpai'. Good job with that.
I'm assuming that Dojima and Nanako will end up in the hospital again, so that leaves me hopeful that Naoto will be staying with Souji to keep him company while they are gone, as I would assume that she would have her memories back by then.
I'm glad you expanded on Kanji somewhat, similar to how I mentioned before. That just leaves me wondering how you will do the same with Rise...
And speaking of Rise, she'll most likely be next to confront her shadow. Teddie too, which I almost forgot about. I wonder how you'll explain Rise's Persona and its capabilities.
As usual, good chapter. Finally shaking off some of the after-effects of the heart-wrenching you gave me a couple of chapters ago, so hopefully you don't decide knock me right back on my ass on the next chapter, though I would love it despite how emotionally draining it would be.
| Cryse chapter 12 . 2/1/2014
Wow, talk about changes.
It's almost like what Naoto said during her social link. Something along the lines of 'I'm afraid that if I keep talking, everything will just spill out', which pretty accurately describes what happened to Souji.
Well, I am glad that Naoto is in the story earlier than usual, that's for sure. Though I do think Souji is taking this better than he should be. I understand that he truly feels okay as long as Naoto is okay, but it still must feel sad to have your lover treat you like a stranger. That's why the hug was cruel in a way, it gave him a taste of what he can't have right now.
I thought you would have taken the opportunity of having Yukiko and Souji alone together to have Yukiko ask if Naoto was the girl who had forgotten him, but I guess she either hasn't figured it out or deems the issue too private. I'm going to guess the former.
I see that the 'Kindred Spirit Effect' didn't affect Kanji and his view of Naoto like I thought it would, but perhaps we'll see more of that later.
While I do like all the Yosuke/Chie fluff, much like Souji, it makes me sorely miss Souji/Naoto fluff. I'm still vulnerable from that heart-wrenching you gave me last chapter too! That was seriously effective.
Souji was acting like he was going on his first date when he was trying to go to talk to Naoto, but I guess I can't blame him given his circumstances.
Naoto is taking it all in stride, or as much as you can be, having that many bombshells dropped on you at once.
At least I'll have some Souji/Naoto interaction to keep me occupied until the fluff I suppose.
I wonder if Naoto will get to face her shadow earlir than normal this time? I hope so, only because the contents of this chapter lead me to believe that she will regain her memories once she gains her Persona. Now that Souji has approached her, I foresee her Shadow being considerably different than last time, which makes me excited for that event as well.
As things lay however, it seems that at the very least Kanji will have to be dealt with first, and unless some drastic change occurs, the order will fall as normal, meaning that Naoto won't be getting her Persona terribly soon. Oh well. Maybe you could have it similar to Chie and have it pop out in the middle of Kanji or Rise's dungeon, but it probably wouldn't have as great of an effect. However, I don't see her normal scenario playing out either, so I'm left unsure.
I'm sure it will be enjoyable regardless, so I'm looking forward to it.
Very good, interesting chapter.
| Cryse chapter 11 . 2/1/2014
Oh my god. I feel so tired after the huge rush of adrenaline you just caused to course through my body. That was so out of nowhere and... just... wow. I mean, I did say I expected him to lose his cool, but not quite so extremely. I might need to go lie down...
Anyway, um, on to the, uh, rest of the chapter. Ah... I'll come back to this in a bit, I really need to calm down.
Phew... alright, better now.
Seriously though, that was intense, and now thinking back, heart-breaking, especially since Souji probably thinks he just fucked everything up.
Getting off that topic for a bit, I like how you made Nanako able to tell that Souji wasn't alright, once more showing that Souji's bonds are being re-built. Adding how Nanako was slightly uneasy concerning the bento because her mom used to make them was clever too.
I wonder if Yukiko will piece things together and realize Naoto is the girl who can't remember Souji. If not, she will when she finds out Naoto is a girl. Would she share this with the group I wonder?
How will Souji deal with his emotions now? He probably needs someone now, and that person was usually Naoto. Hopefully his friends can offer him so kind words, even if they don't fully understand what's going on. I'm guessing Yosuke. Maybe even Dojima. He has to be hurting right now.
Naoto's feelings are stirred up to, though not as bad as Souji's. Something else for her shadow to talk about eventually perhaps.
Oh you've made a mess of me... I'm trying to add as much as I can, usually I have more to comment on than this. I sincerely apologize, and I'll try to focus during the next chapter.
| Cryse chapter 10 . 2/1/2014
Naoto is being affected by the 'Kindred Spirit Effect' I see. I was wondering when you were going to put that in.
Nanako really is adorable isn't she? You've got that down pretty good.
I'm glad Souji ended up making a comment about how his heart already belonged to another, as it would have cleared up any misconceptions that Yosuke may have had, like I felt he might have a while ago. He probably didn't, but still, it put me at ease I guess.
Souji telling Nanako that Dojima sounded close to tears is kind of a stretch though. I know he was making something up to make her feel better, but it just struck me as a really off way for Souji to go about it doing so.
I knew that Souji would be plagued by what had happened to Naoto one way or another, which makes me glad for the fact that Naoto is Inaba now. One step closer, though there is probably still quite a while before she regains her memories.
I forgot to mention before how I thought the Fool-ish thing you did on the card was clever. Souji is of the Fool Arcana after all. Fortune's Fool as you like to say.
The part you added with the strange fridge contents was a pretty funny nod to the game, just as the joke about Souji fishing much earlier in the story was. The game does have a lot of strange things if you look at it the right way after all. They're part of what makes the game Persona 4 though, right?
Going back to Naoto recovering her memories, I hope it doesn't take too long for her to get them back. I'm not expecting her to get them immediately, but I don't want it to happen right before the end of the case, you know? I'm sure you understand and have similar sentiments, so I think I needn't worry too much. After all, I'd imagine that we both want to see them spend some time together.
At this rate though, Souji is going to lose his cool if he spots Naoto, and Naoto being who she is, is certain to notice. The possibility leaves me intrigued.
Overall good chapter. I'm glad that Naoto seems to have become a consistent part of the story now even if she isn't a part of the team yet.
| Cryse chapter 9 . 2/1/2014
Another quick peek into Naoto's life hm? I like the trend. Misanori is still as sharp as ever I see.
Judging from what Souji said during the chapter, does he not know he holds Naoto's memories? *Checks earlier chapters* Oh, I see. I thought he knew. I'm going to assume that Naoto will regain them when she either A. Gets her Persona B. Gets close enough to Souji (Social Link) or C. Kisses Souji. The last one because it would be a way of transfer I guess...? Anyway.
I'm glad Souji had some time with Dojima like I had hoped earlier. The part where Souji and Nanako sang the Junes theme, and Dojima's reaction made me laugh.
So far it seems like the investigation team is progressing normally, more or less.
I'll admit, I didn't ship Chie and Yosuke (not that the possibility hasn't crossed my mind), but you're making me a believer. Chalk another one up I suppose, ne?
Souji's conversation concerning his past relationships (or future, if you will), gave off a much better impression than it did with Yosuke I found. I'm surprised that Souji decided to say anything about it, but Yukiko is his friend and he probably needed to talk about it, if only a little.
You really make me curious as to how Yakushiji come to be Misanori's assistant, I feel like there is something interesting there...
At least even if Souji doesn't know that he contains Naoto's memories, he still intends to not "waste any chances". Looks like he'll be in for a nice surprise eventually then, Naoto does recover her memories.
I wonder if something will work out differently with Dojima and golden week, and if not, I wonder what Souji plans to do with Nanako instead. She hung out with Souji and the gang last time, didn't she? Maybe something similar, except they all go do something this time insetad of hanging out at Junes. To be fair though, she does like Junes, and there's not really anywhere else to go.
Oh! I either forgot to mention earlier, or it was going to be in the review I accidentally cut off, but they went to Daidara's! Too bad the ridiculousness of the situation wasn't emphasized as much as it could have been. And they hide their weapons under their clothes, huh? I guess that makes sense.
Anyway, my excitement to see Souji and Naoto reunited is building. Great, long chapter.
| Cryse chapter 8 . 2/1/2014
Awwww, Souji still finds a way to care for her even when she doesn't know him yet. I must be careful not to eat much more sugar today, lest you overdose me.
Kidding, of course, not about it being sweet though.
I apologize for the abrupt ending of my last review, as I accidentally clicked post before I had finished. But, moving on.
I was wondering when we'd get a peek at Naoto, I knew you couldn't stay away from her until she joined the team. I'm grateful though, as I'm sure are many others.
You've kept Souji as the guy to turn to for advice I see. That's good though, because the others appreciate him in turn.
I don't particularly mind skipping the fight with Yukiko's shadow, as you had no reason to change enough of it to warrant an appearance. It might have been redundant, so I agree with your choice to give it some brief mentions before moving on.
I see Souji and Nanako are getting closer, that makes me hope that will be the case for him and Dojima somewhat soon as well.
Souji's good a teasing, which can always make the situation more light-hearted. He must have gotten pretty good after learning how to make Naoto blush easily, not to say he does it if it's bothering her.
Development for Yosuke and Chie, that's good. Souji is as thoughtful as ever considering people's problems.
The mention of how Chie and Yosuke's relationship having some awkwardness to it despite their good intentions makes it feel very human, like Yosuke still struggling to find that protective balance.
However, I think Souji is giving off the wrong impression sometimes with all of his advice, making him seem... not quite like he's been 'around' per se but... anyway. Watch out for that. Yosuke might think he's been around the block or something, at least that's the impression I'm getting, if only a little. Maybe it's just me though.
I guess next will be Kanji, or in the near future anyway.
Great chapter, and looking forward to the next, which I will read immediately.
| Cryse chapter 7 . 2/1/2014
Ah, the title is very suitable for this chapter.
I didn't really realize it until now, but you're right, this is Souji's second chance in so many ways. I was too busy focusing on the differences between the bad and true endings that I failed to see the potential for change in the rest of the story. You're doing a really good job, enough to make me realize that. I'm looking forward to the rest of this story even more now.
The flashback with Souji and Naoto was sweet, but painful at the same time. Souji himself summed it up pretty well at the end of the chapter, he's happy for them, but he can't help but feel a little jealous, because right now, Naoto doesn't even know he exists.
I have a feeling that Souji will try (fruitlessly) to change the fate that is 'Mystery Food X'. I think it would be much funnier if the helplessness of it was emphasized, that even a second chance couldn't save them from such a horrible fate.
It's impressive that Chie and Yosuke are getting even more development than they did the first time, which had been good on its own.
Thinking on the others and how their development might change... Kanji might come to terms with whatever his sexuality is (as some could argue that wasn't settled). Not that it's a big deal, more so that Kanji can find himself. Rise... hmmm... hard to say. I honestly don't know her character that well. You can probably showcase a closer and more pure friendship between Yukiko and Chie even after Yukiko is saved, not to say their friendship before wasn't good.
Even though Souji has regained his memories and Naoto will be regaining hers, that doesn't mean their development is over either. I'm curious to see where you'll go with them.
I imagine that the pair might keep their relationship under wraps for a bit when Naoto does recover her memories, as it would seem odd to the group if they seemingly became lovers out of nowhere. Then again, they might not find it weird because of the 'Kindred Spirit Effect' as I will no refer to it as. That would probably cause Kanji to be less inclined towards Naoto too, because the 'Kindred Spirit Effect' (I'm going to have a fun time using that name) will make him feel as though it would be wrong, because in the back of his sub-conscious, he knows that she already belongs to someone else.
Thinking about the future even more, I almost forgot that they go to the club. Maybe Souji will get a little drunk off the atmosphere as well, and accidentally start revealing things to Naoto, or say things like he misses her. Lots of opportunity, and you wrote the club extremely well last time, so I'm now really looking forward to it.
At some point I feel like Naoto is going to notice Souji's strong gaze, because he can't help himself, and think on how there is sadness in there for some reason she cannot place. Something like that, anyway, but you're probably quite a few steps ahead of me in that aspect.
| Cryse chapter 6 . 2/1/2014
Awwww, he misses her. I mean, of course he does, but still. Naoto looked after him even at the end, huh? That sounds like her. I feel so fuzzy right now... but not like Teddie.
So they're not going to get arrested this time huh? Doesn't mean that I can completely rule out the possibility happening later, Yosuke is Yosuke after all, if he did it once, he can do it again.
Also, I know this is probably an old issue, but asking for reviews for chapters doesn't really bother me. I understand why you are doing/did it.
The phone saved contacts, I wonder why that is. I don't feel like you added that for no reason, but I guess we'll see.
I wonder what Naoto would think if she saw the badge before the regained her memories. I'm betting she will, and it will stir up some things inside of her, because she knows that she is the only one who could have made that.
Looks like Souji is going to have a tough time keeping things under wraps. At least if he does screw up, I still don't think his friends would suspect him, you've shown that they still trust him (at least with Yosuke anyway).
Giving Souji back all his precious items saves some time I suppose, so he doesn't have to get them again. Not to say he won't become close with his friends again, but this way you don't have to dedicate a whole chapter to him getting them back, or something along those lines.
Judging from what Igor said, I'm glad that a large part of the focus will be on Souji and Naoto, not that I expected any different.
I'm also glad that just because Souji regained his memories, doesn't mean he's forgotten his family because he's focusing on the future of the case. He keeps a good head on his shoulders, but that's part of what makes him a good leader I suppose.
So he's getting his social link Arcana back. That leads me to believe that he will be using multiple Persona, also because you mentioned that Souji switches Persona in order to minimize damage through Naoto on tumblr. I found your profile while searching your pen-name to find your fanfiction profile, so I took a look through some of it, just so you know I guess.
Souji's playing matchmaker huh? I can't complain. He's just trying his best to get his friends to be happy, so his actions don't strike me as odd.
Teddie's puns still make me laugh.
So, on to Chie and Yukiko. Things are moving somewhat fast now which is good, but I hope we get to see some more of the group together for some down time later, especially when the whole group gets together.
Great chapter, like usual. Time for the next.