|Reviews for Embers to a Flame|
| Evidence Murderer chapter 1 . 4/14
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| Dantelover051386 chapter 1 . 3/7/2012
Umm...wow. let me say that it was very well wrote. I felt bellas pain in the death of her father and the pain of seeing edward. I wholly get why she is pissed and angry and furious at edward. her side, they were togther, they fucked and he left. thats her side of things. thats the only side of shit we see here. everytime edward tried to say something she would cut him off in a angry rant. i see her being bombarded on the day of her fathers funeral in all, to. but at no time did we get to hear edwards side of shit. clearly theres self doubt there that was there back 8 years ago that prompted him in leaving in the first place which bella didnt even want to hear. she saw her reasons only. her actions in the end were no better than his 8 years ago if not even more cruel not to mention childish. shes twentysomething since its eight years ago. a woman scorned in right. she fucked edward and left him jsut to get back at him. he may have made a deadly mistake 8 years ago by leaving, but she made a even greater one by not hearing him out and doing the very same thing that makes her no better it not more cruel. I dont know his reasons for leaving 8 years ago, but given his thoughts now...im venturing it has to do with self worth and that was his reasons for leaving. its clear it wasnt a lack of love. his love is very obvious and her anger and hatered for him now is clear as well. edward may have made a mistake 8 years ago and one he will blame himself for the rest of his life, but bellas actions for revenge and yes revenge...she fucked him and left him. wouldnt even let him explain shit. his remorse was obvious and she wanted nothing to do with it. i know shes under alot of pressure with her father dying and we all do stupid shit, but she was just fucking cruel. wrose than what he did 8years ago and for that it is her that doesnt deserve him. I hope to hell she comes to her senses and realizes what she did, that her actions were no better and childish and she just lost her chance at making it right with edward. even if they could never be together romantically again, she could have at least made peace and she could have listened to his reasons for leaving 8 years ago. got closure, but no. she just had to ruin that chance of making things right and bahave like a woman scorned.
again, believe it or not. i really did love this story. it was very well wrote. I dont agree with her actions, but i can see her hurt as well. her actions will be something she has to live with the rest of her life jsut as edwards actions have been something hes regretted and lived with the last 8 years. I hope it was worth it for her to ruin any chance of making peace with edward or herself. she let her anger ruin that. and despite how much i feel her pain. I do. ive been there.. fucked and left behind. so i get her anger, her pain, but her actions were no better if not more cruel that his 8 years ago and for that it is her in the end that truly doesnt deserve him. in the end it is him that i feel the most more for because of her cruel actions. at least he seems remorseful, he tried to make amends. she was just dead set on getting him back. thats what makes HER not deserve him.
I mean no offense by this, just my thoughts only. i wold very much like to read a follow up. see what happens. maybe edwards pov when he realizes she just fucked him and left him.
| Siriusmunchkin chapter 1 . 6/10/2011
| bmango chapter 1 . 9/18/2010
Wow - that was powerful and full of such hopelessness and hope at the same time. What happened to them? can he fix it? And your idea about maybe making it a novella...kind of into that! ;) -b
| sleeptalker1 chapter 1 . 6/11/2010
loved this! how come its just a one shot?
theres def a major story to be told
that lemon was juicy & zesty yummy!
fab writing - all emotions were pure & passionate & so intense
please take this further I know it will be worth it!
| youngandmature chapter 1 . 1/17/2010
So was Edward really the only one? What's her relationship with Jacob? Why does she call him? And why does she leave EDward after he falls asleep? Do they end up together?
| Anjukins chapter 1 . 1/8/2010
Oh! This is so good! Why does this only have 20 reviews, that's insanity! Great one-shot, but man, do I want a follow-up! Don't you wanna turn this into an epic 20-chapter piece? I know you do... at least a little morning-after and ever-after reconciliation for us die-hard romantics, right? xo
| Kats Flower Girls chapter 1 . 10/29/2009
Great one shot... So is the all human? Why did the Cullen's offer Edward the piano, wasn't it already his? Why is Bella so upset that Charlie left her his house? What is Edward trying to tell her? Is he married? Is Bella really on birth control? Why would she be after 8 years of celibacy? I really liked it though & I understands how one shots have to be condensed & leave alot out but they always leave me with so many questions, LOL! Great lemon by the way, it is one of my favorites I've read so far!
| Lisalove83 chapter 1 . 9/19/2009
well, I don't exactly like the ending, especially with Failcob picking her up and her leaving Edward behind, but it's justice in a way for him leaving her. Good story!
| MrsInesCullen chapter 1 . 9/18/2009
Tell me you will continue on this story and I'll love you more. That's a good trade, or a least that's what my son says every time he wants some more (more ice cream, more Discovery Kids, more Playstation).
Please write at least a sencond chapter. It might portray...Edward begging on his knee, Bella whipping Edward. I don't know you're the crative one. Just make then happy. TOGHETER. Be good and think about it.
| maraki1611 chapter 1 . 8/24/2009
aw i wish they could end up together!but i like it!
| hismariposa chapter 1 . 8/16/2009
This was am amazingly passionate reconnection. What was he trying to tell her? Why are they seeing each other for the first time in 8 years? Please continue this story. I think you have the makings of a great one right here.
| TwilightSherry chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
That was really good. You really caught my interest with a great storyline. I hope you decide to write more. How sad that Charlie is dead. But, wow Bella hasn't been with any one for 8 years. Great lemony makeup goodness. But, no she shouldn't have left. You must continue. Great job.
| Lil Miss Golden Eyes chapter 1 . 8/5/2009
ok u need to add another chapter or so cause there was a lot of confusion there for me.
1) is Bella and Jake together, as she said she hadnt been with anyone in 8 years.
2) what was Edward trying to tell Bella? you said their kiss was a reunion, it left readers thinking that things were going to be ok, that they could be together, then Bella runs off
a good yet frustrating one shot (hopefully two shot). hehe
| cravingtwilight chapter 1 . 7/21/2009
Wow that was amazing! Intense, emotional, raw and incredibly hot!