|Reviews for After Atlantis|
| Cyndera Dracona chapter 24 . 5/23
Primus, that dream sequence... frag me... that’s some freaky slag...
| BlushLouise chapter 33 . 11/12/2017
This is an old fic, and I don't know if you keep tabs on this anymore. But I wanted to tell you, I absolutely love this fic. It's well-written, well thought out, Wheeljack's reactions are believable, it's just a very good story. So thank you for writing this. Hope life is treating you well.
| kiyohunter chapter 33 . 7/5/2017
Dunno if you are still active on this site (even if just as a reader), so you might not get this review/message.
But... Jesus Christ, wtf is up with that Fox person? Sorry to bring up an old flamer. I just have never seen anything like it in my life. I was just looking to see if anyone else had any comments on that scene made of pure gold with Sunstreaker in Chapter 31 ("dirt? On my chassis? I didn't come here to be insulted!" Amazing, fav scene by far), but found that instead. So sorry they said all that to you. Such violent verbiage... Clearly they just want to be an ass for no reason at all.
As you have posted anything in some time, I hope your life is going well and your writing has stayed strong. Even if the rest of us don't get to see it, I hope it has continued to being you happiness :)
| Catalina chapter 33 . 3/17/2017
I started reading this fic on AO3 last year and only found this version yesterday...
...I kinda choked on my water on my rush to keep reading from the point it was left on over there...
Really good story, totally worth the 3 hours I just spend on the laptop: You just made me ship a new pairing
Oh, and about the raging bitch on the previous comments, just ignore her: Everyone is free to think whatever the hell they want, but some should just shove their venom up their assholes.
| Lithium223 chapter 33 . 11/29/2016
I remember reading this fic years ago and liking it. A couple days ago, I thought it deserved a reread and I wasn't wrong. This fic is incredible and I'm glad you put in the work and care to make it that way. I also enjoy rare pairings. So well done.
| Cyndera Dracona chapter 33 . 10/16/2016
| Cyndera Dracona chapter 30 . 10/15/2016
| The fox killer chapter 33 . 12/30/2015
ad Hominem fox familiar ad hominem infinitive.
Attacking the author rather than the story itself is ad hominem
| AliceSylvia chapter 22 . 10/7/2015
I love long chapters!
| AliceSylvia chapter 18 . 10/6/2015
| AliceSylvia chapter 15 . 10/6/2015
| AliceSylvia chapter 14 . 10/6/2015
Oh, darn. Now what?
| AliceSylvia chapter 13 . 10/6/2015
Wow, that was painful!
| The Fox Familiar chapter 22 . 6/23/2015
Chapters 27 – 33
More shower scenes. Will we have Healing Sexxors? You get another 5 points fail for including any mention of washracks.
“It was utterly humiliating” – Drink.
Uh-oh. Trailbreaker is breaking up with Wheeljack. But by Wheeljack’s own admission, it was just a fling, nothing more. Yet I expect a huge emotional fallout.
“The last thing he needed was more guilt” – Drink.
“Think, Wheeljack, think!” – Yeah, do it for once! Instead of complaining!
“He wasn’t a human or fragile sparkling, too weak to defend for himself” – HAHAHAHA OH WOW.
Throughout the entire story this is all he’s ever been. Maybe your beta should have caught that, but she didn’t, which shows how useless she is. See? Sometimes having a beta isn’t always useful, especially if they don’t do their job.
“Why are you doing this to yourself, Wheeljack?” – In which a character asks one of the biggest questions begging to be asked in the entire story.
“Igniting nodes of pleasure” – Drink.
Healing Sexxors. Add five more points of fail.
“Had Ratchet loved him even then?” – Not at all a cliché.
“His circuits burning with humiliation” – Drink. 10 points.
“He’d been so stupid” – Yes, yes he is.
I skimmed the rest of the chapters until the end because all I could get from them was lines and lines of emotional dialogue and them patting Wheeljack on the back. But now that we are at the end, let’s give a proper review and analysis of the entire thing.
It’s usually said that women, when they’re not writing rape fantasies, have such a strange obsession with rape that they talk about it more than men do. In this case, it was prevalent throughout the entire work, along with everyone behaving wildly OOC – which is a thing that you claim to despise. Wheeljack keeps his secret from everyone, and gets into an affair with Trailbreaker, who breaks up with him because Wheeljack wasn’t being entirely honest. Let’s start off with the fact that Wheeljack, not even days after his abuse from Starscream, started the come-ons with Trailbreaker, as well as denying his ‘true love’ for Ratchet or some shit. Ratchet, sensing that something is off, also gets an unwanted come-on from Wheeljack, says no, to which Wheeljack says: ‘HOW DARE YOU RESIST ME! YOU DON’T KNOW HOW I FEEL!’ What a creep. Then, after that, Ratchet gets angry – yes, angry! – that Wheeljack doesn’t sleep with him.
Talk about a lack of respect. Wheeljack obviously wasn’t affected by the assault at all. He keeps telling himself how he’s useless and whatnot, but he doesn’t do anything to change it. He cries and turns to sex as a way to fix himself. In an original character this /might/ work, but for Wheeljack, absolutely the fuck no. He was so wildly OOC that I am amazed that no one pointed this out. If you were trying to make this a PTSD rape-angst fic, it just ended up being a mess of contradictions and unintentional funny moments. These mostly occurred when there were Healing Sexxors between Wheeljack and Trailbreaker. Their dialogue screamed female centrism to me, and didn’t at all give the intention that Wheeljack was someone struggling with trust issues. Someone doesn’t understand how people work. If you have trust issues, you’re not going to jump into bed with the first person you meet, especially after enduring a sexual assault. Wheeljack does. He gets angry, is easily driven to emotion, and even after all the battle scenes (which are simply lifted off from the show) he wonders why no one understands him. When characters are not being outright sluts – yes, I am using that word – they don’t even act like three-dimensional characters. Mirage was too busy thinking about screwing his love du jour, and among the useless scenes involving salmon and the humans, I am left wondering: What the fuck was this even about?
Your forte is obviously sex, which is a paradox. Your sex scenes are laughably juvenile, smack-dab in the middle of Sue territory. If Wheeljack wasn’t Wheeljack I would have thought he was a female OC that couldn’t help but get raped by everyone, enjoy the sex, and then get raped some more. Some inspiration he is. When no one is talking about stuff...things they’re talking about nothing. No one was in character, but I don’t need to tell you that. People came for the sex, and that is what they got. Your Seekersmut fics are even worse than this, ending up having worse sex scenes than 50 Shades of Grey. Wheeljack was BOTH Christian Grey and Anastasia Steele, in which he has that deep, dark past and Ana is just a fucking idiot with everyone and everything. Add on the sex talk, the talk about feelings, the oodles and noodles of female centrism, and we get this!
So, how about that hypocrisy? I found that you engage in all the sins that you hate other writers for doing. It’s an inevitable thing, isn’t it? Falling into the circle you are trying to break. I’ve read quite a few of these stories and eventually they all fall in this circle, and in doing so, end up being predictable. This work was edited and betaed, and it still sucked. It is a tantamount to your skill and the skills of your editors, which, frankly, suck ass.
BTW – you’re still a sick fuck. If you had any dignity, you’d delete your entire roster of works, look at your hypocrisy, admit that you are shit at what you do and that you could be a better person. But this is asking for too much. You are what you are. Parasites will be parasites, and the only way to destroy them is to burn them. It’s clear you don’t understand canon; your head-canon is based on zero evidence at all, and even with help, you cannot improve.
Enjoy your flames. You deserved them. Too bad we can’t have Rick Grimes shoot the zombies of this fic.
| The Fox Familiar chapter 21 . 6/23/2015
Chapters 14 – 26
“Famously invasive maintenance exams” – Well, since Jackie opens his legs to anyone, he should be enjoying it. Right. Right?
“It would be all his fault” – Drink. 10 fail.
I forgot to add all the points towards the Healing Sexxors involving Trailbreaker and Ratchet. Let’s just add 100 points.
“He couldn’t understand why Ratchet was angry with him” – Based on how he’s been acting, who wouldn’t be angry?
“What was wrong with him?” – Drink. 10 fail.
“Because he might tell everyone on the Ark” – Wheeljack knowingly ‘slept’ with a robot that’s pretty untrustworthy, Ratchet’s angry at him for making his own choices, and Wheeljack doesn’t realize a thing called ‘common sense’. If he wasn’t so whorish he’d probably know what’s good for him. Jesus Christ. What am I reading?
“Coming online and seeing you” – Not at all cheesy.
“I don’t know if I trust him anymore” – Wheeljack, if you stopped being an idiot for one minute, you could trust people. But since the author is so bad at writing characters, especially characters going through traumatic events, how could she do anything right? That’s asking for too much.
“How jealous he’d been when he found out he was with someone else” – Wheeljack can make his own decisions. Ratchet has no right to dictate him.
“Renewed wave of guilt and terror” – Drink.
“All of it was Wheeljack’s fault” – Drink. 10 point fail.
“He hated (these people) for what they did to him” – Well if Wheeljack was remotely in character, he’d actually be doing something about it. He’s not someone to wallow in the guilt you have him wallowing in. This is getting ridiculous. And here people call /me/ crazy for pointing out this crazy shit.
Trailbreak and Wheeljack scene is Healing Sexxors, and a 5 point fail.
“There was no excuse to justify what Ratchet had done” – Damn right there isn’t. So why are you making an excuse?
“You’re so gorgeous...I get wound up just by looking at you” – I’m going to need a tray for all that cheese.
“All sleek curves and strong angles” – In which Wheeljack is secretly a chick.
“What you’re doing with Trailbreaker is wrong and you know it” – Obviously not, because he can’t resist that sweet ass.
“Just...things.” – Stuff. Things. Starring Rick Grimes.
“...Reminder of his other guilt” – Drink. 10 fail for this, and another for the Healing Sexxors.
“He wished he had been deactivated that day” – One visit from Trailbreaker and all those thoughts go away. Great to see him abuse others sexually for his own benefit.
“That was embarrassing” – In which a character is honest about this story.
“Final shout of pleasure” – Drink. Healing Sexxors, so 5 point fail.
“Igniting them with pleasure” – Drink.
“You’re the most beautiful thing I’ve ever seen” – Totally not clichéd.
“The pleasure surging through his circuitry” – Drink.
“He felt guilty” – Drink. 10 fail.
Rape-y dreams cliché. Because there aren’t enough of those. And no, I don’t think you are ‘smutted’ out. I have seen those Seekersmut fics, and by God, are they awful.
“Wave of sorrow and regret” – Drink. 10 fail.
“This chapter solves some conflicts” – HAHAHAHA no. And this is beta’ed? Well, it looks like I have two birds to bring down.
Sparkplug is A-OK with robot gay marriage, because of Reasons. Yes, I can clearly see your politics had nothing to do with this.
“It’s my fault” – Drink. 10 fail.
It’s a dear shame that the Dinobots don’t save this fic. Because with all the drama, all the support and feel-gooders for Wheeljack, I would have thought this was a soap opera. Ratchet tells Wheeljack he’s sorry for being such an ass, when it was Wheeljack that tried to force himself on him. Then, Ratchet gets jealous at Wheeljack for making his own choices, which don’t make sense because A) Wheeljack is supposed to feel ‘dirty’ after his rape and B) Wheeljack also forced himself on Trailbreaker and Ratchet is mad because Wheeljack didn’t do it AGAIN to him. So among the useless battle scenes (all lifted off from the show, showing your lack of originality) and other drama llamas, it’s safe to say that you really are not the brightest or sharpest tool in the shed. I have no idea why anyone would favourite this. It’s a piece of garbage, and when it tries too hard, it ends up being a big mess of funny memes.
So Kookaburra betaed this? No wonder this sucks. She’s just as bad as you. And instead of doing any research, you pull things out of your ass, just like the authors you claim to hate! Brilliant. How’s that hypocrisy? Does it taste good?
More Healing Sexxors. 5 point fail.
“A noblemech would swoon in on the lure of a quasi-forbidden quest and swoop the poor mech off his feet” – Not a cliché. Mirage and all the others fall into this trope at the same time you’re making fun of it. I love it when someone’s work makes fun of their creator. Shows how stupid they are.
The entire conversation between Mirage and Wheeljack screamed female centrism to me. We don’t care about salmon or your views on the ecosystem, nor do we care about your limited love life. For someone who claims to hate bad romance fics and enjoy ‘good’ ones, you sure have a habit of engaging in the crimes you hate seeing others commit. Nothing is worse than a 100,000 story about nothing but two bum-drillers talking about their fated romance. It either screams female romance or a gay dude that didn’t have enough fun in the bed. Both ways, it screams ‘novice’ to me, and you haven’t changed over the years.
No research, not even for your own fandom, and most certainly nothing to tell in this overall work. You will hear more when I reach my addendum, but for now, I’ll simply poke fun at it as I go along.
Those plot bunnies of yours can be mutilated by snares for all I care.