Reviews for Family |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I like this idea,funny,I never thought of making your own sonic universe,thanks for the idea,and no,Im not going to copy you,i Just think its a cool Idea,keep up the good work,and,wel,I dont like virtual cookies with raisons,do you have some chocolate chip? |
![]() ![]() ![]() much better. yay for no more sudden pov changes. now back to sleep... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very good! A huge improvement compared to chapter 1. It's much more pleasant to read it now it doesn't have those POV markers anymore. Good job, and I like how Shadow nearly gave himself away (when he said he was there at the stargazing part). And a nice idea to give him amnesia (he remembers everything now?), which seems to strike him in nearly every AU. I'd really like to read more, so please continue this! Regards, ~jorenmartijn |
![]() ![]() ![]() coolness you updated! Update again soon, this is getting very interesting! |
![]() ![]() ![]() very interesting- update asap- lol- like today? |
![]() ![]() ![]() lol. virtual cookies. anyway, i like the dual eye colors. and yha... i got confused for a few seconds with the rapid changing POVs but i got it |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like this! It's an original idea, so please continue working this out! However, please try to do something about those POV changes if you can. You can write bigger blocks by merging your POVs somewhat into one. Anyway, like I said, keep it up! |