Reviews for Family
KeizerGodzilla chapter 1 . 7/15/2009
I like this idea,funny,I never thought of making your own sonic universe,thanks for the idea,and no,Im not going to copy you,i Just think its a cool Idea,keep up the good work,and,wel,I dont like virtual cookies with raisons,do you have some chocolate chip?
HyperShanic01 chapter 2 . 7/15/2009
much better. yay for no more sudden pov changes. now back to sleep...
jorenmartijn chapter 2 . 7/15/2009
Very good!

A huge improvement compared to chapter 1. It's much more pleasant to read it now it doesn't have those POV markers anymore.

Good job, and I like how Shadow nearly gave himself away (when he said he was there at the stargazing part).

And a nice idea to give him amnesia (he remembers everything now?), which seems to strike him in nearly every AU.

I'd really like to read more, so please continue this!

Regards,

~jorenmartijn
Simone Robinson chapter 2 . 7/14/2009
coolness you updated! Update again soon, this is getting very interesting!
Simone Robinson chapter 1 . 7/13/2009
very interesting- update asap- lol- like today?
HyperShanic01 chapter 1 . 7/11/2009
lol. virtual cookies. anyway, i like the dual eye colors. and yha... i got confused for a few seconds with the rapid changing POVs but i got it
jorenmartijn chapter 1 . 7/11/2009
I like this! It's an original idea, so please continue working this out!

However, please try to do something about those POV changes if you can. You can write bigger blocks by merging your POVs somewhat into one.

Anyway, like I said, keep it up!
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